APPROVED

Would this arrangement of muscle, attaching two thirds down the length of the bone and originating as that hamstring muscle, allow for the movement desired?
Since apparently there's a tendon along the back quarter end of the bone.






I also wonder about just extending the attachment point for that tendon out which would pull the tendon further down the bone and open up more of the back of the bone for other muscles to attach.

APPROVED

APPROVED

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: ventral rays for crawling on ground
Internal?: all have lunged larvae
Behavioral/Mental?: lay eggs in mud, larvae are nonflying and crawl on ground, adults capable of crawling on ground and do, BAD SWIMMERS THEY DROWN EASY
Are Changes Realistic?:
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat: STRAIGHT UP GLOBAL, EVEN POLAR?????
Type?:
Flavor?:
Connected?:
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N?????
Within range?: Y?????
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?:N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:N
Transition Rule?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: carnivore now

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y, at least the lunglike ones
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: spawns in mud and veggies
Other?:

Description:
Length?: good
Capitalized correctly?: Y??
Replace/Split from ancestor?: SPLIT
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y, though it is a little faint, it's the clouds.
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?:smaller proboscis girth, webbed feet, rounder streamlined "head", snapping style tusks like bobbit worm, extreme male neoteny due to fast selection via new repropductive habit
Internal?: air layers trapped in lower portion of shell, more short fast action muscles in neck
Behavioral/Mental?: now actively swimmings rather than stalks about the shoreline, rarely lifts its probscis/head other than for particularly interesting things, collapse of harem style breeding
Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: y, neotenous males and webbed feet

Habitat:
Type?: 2 thank you for counting
Flavor?: 3 thank you for counting
Connected?: y? the thing also swims, so there's ease to move around
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?: males are neotenous

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet: CARNIVORE NEEDS TO BE LISTED
Same as Ancestor?: y
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: does now list hard shelled eggs
Other?: The social exchange rapidly selecting for neotenous males is an interesting direction

Description:
Length?: okay
Capitalized correctly?: y?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: replaced in range
Other?:

I don't really know how to say something belongs to a proboscis.


Opinion: Pending, carnivore needs to be listed in diet

Once that gets fixed it gets approved.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y, splendid
Art clear?: y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: better supported tongue, big ol head crest,
Internal?: mouth set up for tongue to move in and out like a limb rather than coiling, tongue internals are more complex and digestive organ-like.
Behavioral/Mental?: courtship and socializing more complex, hunting prey more tongue reliant
Are Changes Realistic?: yea
New Genus Needed?: y, greater complexity to tongue, tongue skeletonish

Habitat:
Type?: 3, thank you for counting
Flavor?: 3, thank you for counting
Connected?:
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet: NEEDS TO LIST CARNIVORE
Same as Ancestor?: y
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: very nice
Capitalized correctly?: Y???
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Pending, diet needs to list carnivore



APPROVE THE SECOND THAT GETS FIXED, SOMEONE PLEASE I LOVE THIS

I really like that frilly whisker feet on the male in the picture.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: larger lips, females lose tusks to form a basic non-tidal filtering system with their mouth. toe covers for catching underwater prey
Internal?:
Behavioral/Mental?: dietary distinctions between females, young, and males
Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: y, new mouth and foot parts

Habitat:
Type?:3 (thank you for counting)
Flavor?: 3 (thank you for counting)
Connected?: y (I thiink so?)
Wildcard?: n

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Transition Rule?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: original diet as larvae continues to exist, females become specialized to consume smaller prey both fauna and floral, males love eating eggs and land life.

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y ??
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: added "hard shelled" to description, didn't exist in ancestors, probably was the same.
Other?:

Description:
Length?: good size.
Capitalized correctly?: y??
Replace/Split from ancestor?: REPLACED IN RANGE
Other?:

"Bellow the water her legs" should be "Below"

"she carries her nest in her rock-shaped suace-shell" should be "sauce-shell"

Opinion: Approved,

though the two minor spelling errors I noted ought to be fixed, but I've done hella worse myself.

Oh!

Okay, so a mesoglea lump in this is very interesting, and I wonder just how malleable one could be for this.

The shape of it ought to be described.

I've perceived the outgrowths as rigid and rather non membraneous or non living material.

Looking at a few it's possible that the central vein may have been membraneous or alive at least at one point, but the remainder could still be extracellular material or grown like bacterial flagella.

Or, even the entire thing could be membraneous initially and then solidifed as dead appendages to the singlular cell.

QUOTE (Oofle @ Nov 10 2022, 08:20 AM)

Maybe it’s just me, but personally the shade of blue used here makes it really hard to distinguish the line art, especially the limbs (it kind of makes it look like it has limbs with two claws and the other limbs are obscured rather than four with one claw), maybe you could use a color other than black for the lineart? Or make the limbs otherwise more defined?

Maybe just recoloring the outline at points like that to a grey?

It's commonly practiced in cartoons to invert outline color on dark objects.

Unless changing the entire outline color makes more sense.

If they're built for stripping you can have them strip branches like a planer tool.

That'll give lots of surface area.

The beaches are listed as having the same trees, so the canopy is rather continuous.

Just add the beaches, make mention of swimming capability in areas where it is required, and it'll be good.

How do they handle winter in the temperate regions and what predators are using eyesight that they are using their dark coloration to hide from?

I mean on the scale of years if we're just talking fermentation.
Consider how long it takes a small log to decompose in the forest with fungi actively eating it.

I suggest adding some form of mechanical breakdown if you're going to have it eat entire lignified woody branches.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:
What changes?:
External?: large forward pointed horn along dorsal side that aids in stealing carcasses and prying or breaking armor on food. more complex feather display for mating, eye spots have arranged more toward rear (with a Haida people reference I appreciate), offspring have quills. thickened protected body to prevent attacks from doing much harm.
Internal?: greater muscular control over feather movement.
Behavioral/Mental?: more lazily approach food to steal due to being very tough.
Are Changes Realistic?: Y, look at that haida art.
New Genus Needed?: n

Habitat:
Type?: 3
Flavor?:3
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?:y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: n (but yes kinda)
Transition Rule?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: added kleptoparasite

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: good
Capitalized correctly?: Y?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: replaced in range
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

I like this.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: more squat. gill exit covers prevent dissication,
Internal?: photosensitive skin of ancestor now used to better detect imagery on land as a second retina in its middle eye, tail ganglia increase, advancement in its gill system with gulping entry and olfactory sac dictating safety of water, pronounced stomach and digestive aid "pancreatic livers", a partition in the gut now creates a loop for smoother food processing.
Behavioral/Mental?: amphibious in lifestyle, active during twilight hours, females hold onto their eggs and males releasing milt for fertilization (milt is not stated)
Are Changes Realistic?: YES. LOOK AT THAT GUT.
New Genus Needed?: yes

Habitat: WE ASSUMING COAST AND MANGAL SAME YES?
Type?: 2
Flavor?: 2
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y (island giantism)
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y? It makes specification of filterfeeder for the larvae which is stated in ancestral description but not listed in ancestral diet, and scavenger is listed before carnivore meaning no change occurred.
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: n (but actually yes)
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y elaborated
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y, loss of open spawning and distinction of what kind of egg females produce)
Other?:

Description:
Length?: decent
Capitalized correctly?: Y?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

"are likely take a bite"
could say are likely to take a bite

But the concept still passes



Opinion: Approved,

gorgeous internal supplemental image.

I suggest mentioning that the wings are now shaped for active soaring rather than passive soaring like its ancestor. Since you are seeming to aim for that body shape and lifestyle.

" Because of its oil rich diet, its feathers can get wet. It is not shy of diving into the water to grab onto a juicy looking Gillfin or other prey."




It's feathers get wet because of its oily diet?

Make sense, tidal lungs are active and they're basically air tanks.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y (is being painted by the probe)
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: listening thing can move, shell mimics its food the Doctor Pickle,
Internal?: greater water tank for storage, partially internalized foot claws aid in structural support,
Behavioral/Mental?: can pump water into tank via trunks rather than submersion,
Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: y, kinda different, legs and such.

Habitat:
Type?: 1
Flavor?: 3
Connected?: yes
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated, muscle rings have been agreed upon, and semiinternalized claws can provide a solid base
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Transition Rule?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y, loss of frugivore

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y, elaborated
Other?: there may be a better way to word it, possibly "Passive /active(gills in water tank)" for example. I wanna pass it, and this is literally my only hang up to cause pending unless Mnidjm wants to approve it.

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: good
Capitalized correctly?: y?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Pending, only due to needing "passive" or "active" for respiration assuming the gills don't pump inside the water tank.
I actually think it should be approved since I haven't seen any elaboration beyond "gills in tank" for any of them, but I put pending for the same thing on another submission so. There ya go.

But also, Doctor Pickle has yet to be approved so, technically this can't yet.

Their long ribbon-like fins have been changed into a selection of movement sensitive quills toward the rear of the body, to detect motion through the water, as well as four short and highly mobile fins to allow the organism to more easily maneuver in its open water home. The quills toward the back of the body have the second purpose of deterring predation, their tips are dark and hardened.

changed to


Their frontmost and rearmost ribbon-like fins have changed into four short and highly mobile fins to allow the organism to more easily maneuver in its open water home. Meanwhile the other ribbon-like fins have changed into a selection of movement sensitive quills toward the rear of the body, to detect motion through the water, and to deter predators. The tips of the quills are dark and hardened.



plus other minor edits.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: spiky throat guards, thinner fur, forward facing pouch,
Internal?: loss of fatty layers
Behavioral/Mental?: stays near shore, smaller nest, violent warring, more bipedal, navigation rafts, not monogamous,
Are Changes Realistic?:
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?:3
Flavor?:3
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: loss of thick fat
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: very decent
Capitalized correctly?: y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: replaced in territory
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y (nice, has the translation)
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: yellow, look how round it is, long straight outward fangs, check out them feets!
Internal?: short tongue,
Behavioral/Mental?: probing hunting, cannot stand up,
Are Changes Realistic?:
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat: not 100% if we're treating coast and mangal as the same thing
Type?:2
Flavor?:3
Connected?:y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Within range?:y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: good
Capitalized correctly?: y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved