is this a WIP?

is this not being updated any more?

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: vibration sensitive hairs on lower jaw for narrowing in on prey, side hairs for detecting prey, reduced pointy fang size,
Internal?: gel sacs attached to sensory hairs, water pressure and temperature detected by fang,
Behavioral/Mental?: marine now. offspring diurnal, adults nocturnal
Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: n

Habitat: we considering coasts and mangals same same right?
Type?: 2
Flavor?:2
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Within range?:y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: good
Capitalized correctly?: y?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?: did anything actually change? It's very similar. sexual spores now.
External?:
Internal?:
Behavioral/Mental?: sexual spores
Are Changes Realistic?: y?
New Genus Needed?: .... n? I mean, I kinda think it should, but also it's super similar.

Habitat:
Type?: 2
Flavor?: 3
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?: n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?: could be lenticels, but can also be left alone.

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y, sexual spores now
Other?:

Description:
Length?: okay
Capitalized correctly?: y?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y ABSOLUTELY
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?: y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: well for one thing it is beautiful. The "nostrils" of the ancestor are now "organs" allowing them to have external form. The cilia seem more numerous. Defined paired mouths every other segment.
Internal?: brains and ganglia
Behavioral/Mental?: magnetic sensory, larval form and spawning.
Are Changes Realistic?: YES
New Genus Needed?: well, yes, though ferrovermis is a nice name this has a reproductive method that demands a new genus.

Habitat:
Type?:2
Flavor?:1
Connected?: yes
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Within range?:
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Transition Rule?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:added detritivore

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y elaborated
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y, now fragmentation, and hermaphroditic spawning
Other?:

Description:
Length?: good
Capitalized correctly?: I think so?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: replaced OH NOO, my favorite ancient beast
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

" maturing the in first year."

the and in should be switched around

that's literally all I see in the description that ought to be edited.

"It has specialized to be a planktovore"

planktivore? That's how it's listed in diet.

"are now used as foot to stand on "

as a foot, I think.

"Those in the coast where the water dosn't free still go through"

doesn't, and, freeze.






Something that crosses my mind with these, and plent bones, and such, is that although we call them cellulose based they're probably actually really heavy on lignification and other hardening compounds.
Since they're supposed to be really tough and all.
Regarding the exoskeleton and pupa.

Description edits still ought to be made, though the concepts still come across correctly more or less...

Hydro has not been on the forum for a hot second, so I'm not surprised it hasn't happened yet.

Maybe carpozoans are just really prone to syndactyly.

"This servers a duel purpose of "

this serves i think. a dual purpose?

"It can swing it it in defense."

duplicate "it"

" keep them comfortable warm even in the snow."

comfortably warm?

"They gives birth to helpless fetal young."

give birth to....



those are all the corrections I can see needed!

https://sagan4alpha.miraheze.org/wiki/Ninjaswoop


A filter feeder?

Okay.

The first sentence reads somewhat awkwardly for me.

Regarding your comparison to the Ferrotine,

Could you say something like that, referencing that other species, in the description maybe?

As it is, the alone statement does not have much meat to it nor gives much real explanation. The hindering aspect that is, could you elaborate a little.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:N, BUT SHOWN IN SUPPLEMENTAL SO I THINK IT IS OKAY
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: smaller
Internal?:
Behavioral/Mental?: congo line cooperation, scent markers
Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: mm, probably not

Habitat: Fermi Tundra, Fermi Steppet, Scifi Subpolar Beach, Arctic Subpolar Beach
Type?: 1
Flavor?:3
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?:y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: I MEAN, YEA?
Reasonable changes (if any)?: ELABORATED
Other?: EXOSKELETON NEEDS TO BE SPELLED RIGHT, and material should be listed, and external shell could probably replace exoskeleton in this section

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: YES?
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?: POTENTIAL PREY NEEDS TO BE ADDED IN DIET

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y, sure
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:
Does It Fit Habitat?: ....yes?
Reasonable changes (if any)?: yes? elaborated
Other?: IF LISTED AT ALL, then maybe cover the method of passive gas exchange, since oxygen is just assumed it shouldn't be listed.

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: okay, short
Capitalized correctly?: uh...
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split, but replaced in territory.
Other?: STEPPE NEEDS TO BE SPELLED CORRECTLY IN HABITAT, should this cover what happens in Winter?

Opinion: Pending needs fixes

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: bigger, brown pigmentation to avaoid competition
Internal?:
Behavioral/Mental?: loss of fragmentation based reproduction, redevelopment of sexual spore reproduction
Are Changes Realistic?:y, the spores are an interesting development
New Genus Needed?: y, new method of reproduction

Habitat:
Type?: 3
Flavor?:2
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?:n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y
Other?: intense change there, but probably just a thing they can do

Description:
Length?: ok
Capitalized correctly?: yesssss?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?: boy we have a lot of flora colors

Opinion: Approved

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: slightly yellow
Internal?: sulfur in tissue
Behavioral/Mental?:
Are Changes Realistic?:
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: 3
Flavor?:2
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Within range?:y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:n.a
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Transition Rule?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:n.a
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y elaborated
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y, i guess
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated that spores are sexual
Other?:

Description:
Length?: short
Capitalized correctly?: yessssss?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: taller
Internal?:
Behavioral/Mental?:
Are Changes Realistic?:
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: 3
Flavor?:2
Connected?:y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Transition Rule?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elab orated
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: short
Capitalized correctly?: yesssss?
Replace/Split from ancestor?:split
Other?: not much going on

Opinion: Approved

Does this larval form still work

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: bigger, has a stiff mane that helps swim, covered in scales
Internal?: immune to aquatic crystal poison, rear gut fermentation
Behavioral/Mental?: omnivorous, swims left to right
Are Changes Realistic?:
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: 3
Flavor?: 2
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?:y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y elaborated
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Transition Rule?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y, eats some meat now

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y, LOSS OF FUR DESCRIPTION, and gigantotherm
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: okay
Capitalized correctly?: yesss?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?: the very basic same as ancestor, different from ancestor starts to the lines was nice and convenient.

Opinion: Approved

Cool changing to approved then

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?:
Internal?:
Behavioral/Mental?: stays on ocean bed and burrows
Are Changes Realistic?:
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: continental shelves, intertidal and mangal zones of barlowe, drake, fermi, koseman,lamarck, ramul steiner, vonnegut, wallace, ladym, jujubee, mnid
Flavor?:
Connected?:
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Within range?:y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y, sexual now
Other?:

Description:
Length?: good
Capitalized correctly?: yesss?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: approved

hm does that mean the toe count is wrong and needs to be explained or adjusted?

Honestly there isn't really anything wrong with this picture.

I just mean if they wanted to say more than vague Ectotherm.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Oct 28 2022, 02:59 PM)

Do not approve this yet. It has organizational issues, formatting issues, and minor art issues, and I don't recall going over its description, even briefly.

Okay, if we want to work on formatting then I'll change it to pending.

The description seems to suggest basking as a form of thermoregulation, given the heat is then stored in the trunk, if a different form were desired.

Interesting to consider.

Just being an attractant is probably good enough given critters step on their spores