Oh my.
I have a feeling this shall become...memetic.

Are there any real-life examples of animals which have similar specialized symbiosis later getting generalist diets? Termites and aphids may grant inspiration, although they aren't exactly equivalent.

"escaped" That's not suitable wording. It's lived in there for millions of years, so it's surely a good habitat for it.

Its microbial partner fed on aluminum and silicon. That brings up the question of how it obtains sufficient volumes, and how its expanded diet affects its microbial partners. (Incidentally, a quick Google check suggests silicon is not a food source for any bacteria, so some retcons might be needed.)

I feel tired now. I suppose I'll have to come back later for more thorough feedback.

A brief note: the name is very odd. I recommend "Doctor Pickle", or Doctor's Pickle (e.g., like "St. John's Wort" in name). Both are still very odd, though. "Physicians' Gerkin" (that, is a misspelling of "gherkin", or pickle) sounds more like an actual plant name, which is appropriate for a flora.

...oh. So that's how Betty Crocker factors into it.
This is like a very long, semi-cohrerent dream based on vague recollections of Sagan 4 combined with Homestuck characters, pop-cultural figures, and subject to huge time skips and multiple timelines.
I suppose this only reinforces how difficult it is to explain Homestuck. Last time I stopped reading Homestuck, it had only one major character, and it was a few pages after the marble bust next to a door in the first chapter/section.

If you're trying to make a different reproductive method, it may help to research both how reproduction worked in its ancestors and how various plants launch seeds.

" fungal-like core is a network of airgaps"
Fungus-like, airgaps.
By what means do they store nutrients for hard times? Inulin? Starch? Glycogen? For a genus gorup, the description is small.

While I have now edited a page to fix a typo to mark the wiki as active, it seems Disgustedorite made several edits yesterday. That should be sufficient.

HethrR Jarrod,

That's very fragmentary, even for a work-in-progress. If you want early feedback, it would help to provide more details. Try following the template. What its ancestor? What is its diet? A diet of purely blood poses the risk of nutritional deficiencies. How does it deal with that? The most intuitive physiologic bases would be blood-feeding arthropods, but you could also take cues from vampire bats.

It has good art. Otherwise, I am not sure what else to remark upon. I've gotten rusty.

I'm back, at least for roughly the next four weeks. I need to balance Sagan 4 with other things in my life, but for the time being, I can at least theoretically afford to be active here.

Has anything significant happened in the past two months, particularly in relation to the forum side of Sagan 4?

I'll probably release some Raptor Volcanic flora once there's a new Generation. Flora tend to be quick to make.

That's an interesting, colorful design.

"passed the initial" past the initial.
"chunks of flash" and "tear flash": Flesh.
"front most": front-most.
" over open mouth" over its open mouth.
"it's feeding" "its feeding behavior.

I think I'll give a full review once it's submitted.

Right. I did say I'd be back. I was busy with offline things for about two months.

My skills are rusty, but I still have something to say.

Why would it hunt both small game and the juveniles of megafauna?
"tightly knit" should be "tightly-knit".
"pack mates" should be "packmates". I don't think "packmates" is technically a word, but it looks more like "classmates" or "roommates", rather than suggesting a "mate" as in a mating partner.
"while the stygmogg barking" with the stymogg barking.

I like the pose, musculature, and shape. I'll provide more feedback later.

"In response to the increase rain and stormy weather"
"increase in", you mean?

"glorious mycostrum" Unless that's a species literally named that, I recommend re-phrasing it. The other unusual phrasing is poetic and formal, but not too fanciful or unscientific.

"nannyworm"?

"legendary feat" I recommend not using that. "wisdom" I strongly advise against using that, except perhaps in the most intelligent of fauna to poetically refer to the experience of older individuals.

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There are some it's/its errors in the Honorable Crownworm description.


There are likely other things I could grant feedback on, but I prefer to do so when they are released onto the submissions subforum.

"low oxygenated wetlands"
Oxygenated which are low, and oxygenated, or "poorly-oxygenated"? They would surely be in wetlands that are "low": that is, close to sea level.

Are there particular conditions they cannot tolerate, such as high sulfur concentrations or high heat?

With this one reproducing asexually, too, it seems a lot of base-of-the-food-chain genus group flora are asexual-only reproducers.
(Snotflora, Marbleflora, Pioneeroots, to choose some especially popular, related examples) It seems a huge opportunity for a genus-level disease or parasite to cause ecological collapse, especially if it affects more than one genus group.

I'll have to check the rest tomorrow, but I already noticed a typo: "bouyant" should be "buoyant".

That description is very small. Surely you can add more? Saying something about its climate tolerances, commonness and diversity across various habitats, variation in cytotoxin strength, and whether strength of toxin has any correlation to particular patterns could work in lengthening the description.

I noticed it causes "little damage" to other groups. What sorts of symptoms occur in other groups? For example, caffeine kills insects by suppressing an essential enzyme in their nervous systems, but it blocks sleepiness chemicals in humans. Are there varieties of plents with some resistance to toxiglobes? After all, the coffee berry borer, a kind of beetle, has bacteria in its digestive tract that allow it to break down caffeine. "Very few" species of Pioneeroots, a close relative, are toxic, so it's possible a few Pioneerroots-eaters equipped to eat poisonous things could resist these. Plowskuniks might be one candidate, though I think they are only distantly related to the likes of nodents and phlocks.

"Overtime," Over time.

"Fast growing": "Fast-growing".

"Despite their lifestyle they are not strong swimmers[...]" This sentences needs to be split up: it's too long.

"algae" What kind of "algae"? There technically aren't any algae on Sagan 4, so much as algae-like organisms.

"help somewhat camouflage" I recommend re-phrasing that.

"many defense" Many defenses.

" food and warms." "food and warmth".

"midspring": mid-spring.

"out crops": Out crops. I wonder...does Fermi's geology even allow for outcrops? I assumed a flat beach, rather than something like the chalk cliffs of Dover.

The fact they eat the displays once mated suggests the males only mate with one female per mating season. Does this habit align with having elaborate growths for the breeding season? Typically, in peacocks and deer, males mate with multiple females in a breeding season.

Could you add some shading to the beak?

This can't be approved until Colonialballs are approved.

Alas, these just missed being food for the Hypnotizer Waxfaces.

The approval seems premature.

"Razorbark and Maulwart are notably scares however as they have adapted to the drier portions of the desert."
Razorbarks and Maulwarts are notably scarce, however, as they have adapted to the drier portions of the desert.

"Although precipitation is low ground water is relatively abundant compared to the rest of the desert. Much of this water is brought inland by the piperoots."
It needs a comma after "low", and "ground water" should be "groundwater".

"bioticly" is not a word; you probably meant "biologically".

"beach Piloroot": Capitalization error.

"Spirepipe Forest with" needs a comma after "Forest".

Many of them don't have definite habitats yet, so much as particular types of habitats. The Wright Caonach has a ludicrously wide range, so there are a lot of habitat options.

"Starfruit Caonach": Possibly includes a Montane Desert watershed.
"Gelatinous Caonach": Possibly includes savanna watersheds.
"Shade Caonach": Possibly includes rainforest riparian habitats. Planned as a Veinnach descendant, so it won't be available in the first Generation.
"Veinnach": Not presently listed as a riparian dweller in my document, but it makes sense, given its other habitats.

Only a few of them could be released immediately or quickly, though: I had prioritized making some other fairly large flora first. A big chunk of my Caonach ideas are for the Ovi region.

" the bike of Ophan Scimitars"
Is "bike" species-specific jargon for a pair, or is that a typo?

The diet list has an extra comma after "Grassland Lizatokage".

"They are not as fast as their ancestors[...]" This is a very long sentence.


" has being rough" I recommend: "They continually grow teeth in their oral ring past the growth of the skull, compensating for constantly breaking their teeth on bones and other hard tissues in a carcass." The next sentence can start with: "The species has also developed a higher density[...]"

"blood sand and dust" Blood, sand, and dust.

"evolved mimic"
I recommend: "Their tail feathers aid in intimidation and defense due to their mimicry of the eyes of Argusraptors".

The sentence that starts with "to aid in" needs to split, because it's too long.

Theoretically, this could be dealt with by making it poisonous, have a very smelly spray like a skunk, or possibly work in combination with making it unusually vicious, like badgers' possibly aposematic coloration. In the case of badgers, though, it seems they can cover their aposematic faces as necessary.

There's a typo:
"the have also are beginning". You may have meant: "They have also begun to develop"

That's a good point about the heat waves. Whether these substantially affect water temperatures could depend on the deepness of the water, among other things, and whether these substantially affect organisms would depend on tolerance to heat waves and low-oxygen conditions. I don't think these alone would be responsible for massive ecological changes: their heat-emitting properties are probably different from, say, black asphalt.

Black shade balls could be useful for back-of-the-envelope calculations of how they affect the environment.

QUOTE (colddigger @ Dec 10 2021, 04:10 PM)

I'm also wondering if these would heat the water directly around them enough to make it inhospitably warm to other organisms.

As Disgustedorite said, it wouldn't boil. It could make the water warm enough in summer to be less than ideal for algae-like organisms with narrow temperature tolerances, but the effect would probably, at least most of the time, not be significant enough to notably change the ecology. If one species in a genus group doesn't do so well, one can assume a nigh-identical species can replace its function.