It's not drawn as if it is entirely flat: it looks slightly tilted, like a blanket laid on top of a bed with a triangular prism underneath it on one side.
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It's hard to tell how a naked, terrestrial, subarctic endothterm would behave, since there don't seem to be any contemporary wild examples. Armadillos are somewhat similar due to their sparse hair, although they do not have fat reserves and these do.
The easiest solution is to say they migrate in latitudes or habitats prior to winter's approach in the Fermi Tundra habitat. Alternatively, you could specify they live in packed burrows as they hibernate, sharing body heat, and they stuff their burrows with insulating material (e.g., shrog hair). Low-density snow, such as fresh snow, is an effective insulator, while dense, wet snow is not so good an insulator. Therefore, you could specify igloo-like principles of construction whereby they use low-density snow. The interior of an igloo can be 70 degrees (Fahrenheit) warmer than the outside, so, depending on the exact minimum temperatures of Fermi Tundra, that could be plenty to keep it above the freezing point (32 degrees Fahrenheit) and therefore not require antifreeze chemicals or similar high-cold-intensity adaptations.
More minor details include specifying it hibernates with its limbs, tail, and snout curled up, like how arctic foxes sleep with tails over their noses. A mother with young, depending on prone to freezing the young are (itself contingent on Fermi Tundra temperatures), might adjust the posture to share more warmth with her young. Perhaps a spot between her forelegs or hind legs could be like a brood patch in birds, and the young could press their vulnerable limbs or snouts against it for warmth.
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It's hard to tell how a naked, terrestrial, subarctic endothterm would behave, since there don't seem to be any contemporary wild examples. Armadillos are somewhat similar due to their sparse hair, although they do not have fat reserves and these do.
The easiest solution is to say they migrate in latitudes or habitats prior to winter's approach in the Fermi Tundra habitat. Alternatively, you could specify they live in packed burrows as they hibernate, sharing body heat, and they stuff their burrows with insulating material (e.g., shrog hair). Low-density snow, such as fresh snow, is an effective insulator, while dense, wet snow is not so good an insulator. Therefore, you could specify igloo-like principles of construction whereby they use low-density snow. The interior of an igloo can be 70 degrees (Fahrenheit) warmer than the outside, so, depending on the exact minimum temperatures of Fermi Tundra, that could be plenty to keep it above the freezing point (32 degrees Fahrenheit) and therefore not require antifreeze chemicals or similar high-cold-intensity adaptations.
More minor details include specifying it hibernates with its limbs, tail, and snout curled up, like how arctic foxes sleep with tails over their noses. A mother with young, depending on prone to freezing the young are (itself contingent on Fermi Tundra temperatures), might adjust the posture to share more warmth with her young. Perhaps a spot between her forelegs or hind legs could be like a brood patch in birds, and the young could press their vulnerable limbs or snouts against it for warmth.
"it's larva": "its larvae".
"their way" conflicts with "its larva" earlier.
"started from": That sentence needs grammatical clarificiation.
Do Lungworm Clogmanes always stand like that? They look rather top-heavy.
"as larva": "as larvae"
"into a adults": Into adults.
"its ancestor, they are": Pronoun conflict.
"spikey": "Spiky" is the more common variant, but this is optional.
"maw": That is not a verb: did you mean "chew" or "gnaw"?
"plents epidermis": "plent's epidermis".
"plents limbs": "plent's limbs".
Some of its hosts are low on the food chain. What's the risk the burrowing will make the host more susceptible to predation, and therefore the larvae will die? Just causing a decrease in oxygen in hosts which depend on running away or other highly energy-intensive defenses could hurt its chances.
You misspelled "Coldigger" in the credits. That's also five people: the most people credited with one organism I have ever observed. It brings up the question of what degree of feedback or involvement is necessary to justify inclusion in the credits.
"their way" conflicts with "its larva" earlier.
"started from": That sentence needs grammatical clarificiation.
Do Lungworm Clogmanes always stand like that? They look rather top-heavy.
"as larva": "as larvae"
"into a adults": Into adults.
"its ancestor, they are": Pronoun conflict.
"spikey": "Spiky" is the more common variant, but this is optional.
"maw": That is not a verb: did you mean "chew" or "gnaw"?
"plents epidermis": "plent's epidermis".
"plents limbs": "plent's limbs".
Some of its hosts are low on the food chain. What's the risk the burrowing will make the host more susceptible to predation, and therefore the larvae will die? Just causing a decrease in oxygen in hosts which depend on running away or other highly energy-intensive defenses could hurt its chances.
You misspelled "Coldigger" in the credits. That's also five people: the most people credited with one organism I have ever observed. It brings up the question of what degree of feedback or involvement is necessary to justify inclusion in the credits.
What lovely art. It has a lot of personality.
What's the shape of its leaf? Is it lying flat, with a twist at the start, or is it like a Dimetrodon sail?
"Much like its ancestor[...]scrounging for food." That's a long, breathless sentence.
"Their long tongue" That doesn't make sense; it's using the singular 'they'.
"culminated into": "culminated with" or "culminated in".
"It can often direct[...]" This sentence needs more commas.
"Most of the other creatures": Are you only counting large fauna, or should it be presumed bug-like fauna are also deaf?
"thrive on Fermi": that needs a comma.
I have to wonder how cold Fermi Tundra must be during the winter. It's an important detail to consider, since many fairly large Fermi fauna are endotherms with no integument. Knowing the conditions of Fermi Tundra would make it easier to migrate or evolve out organisms from Fermi Polar environments. Rackettoons having no integument, and also a long, skinny-looking neck, head, tail and long-skinny-looking legs and and a vulnerable-seeming sail would make them vulnerable to the cold. I'm not sure whether hibernation and hibernation alone would be a sufficient adaptation.
Is its coloration an adaptation for purple flora, or a mixture of black and purple environments?
I noiced it has an indigo stripe on its face and green stripes on its tail. Are those display structures, or predator-distraction structures?
Are you sure it eats Umbrosas? They have a "rock-hard shell" and are 2 meters wide. I don't think Rackettoons have a mouth well-suited to gnaw on Umbrosas. Umbrosas probably wouldn't be as tough, and certainly not as large, when they are very young, so that might be suitable.
Does it favor particular foods over others? With so many foods and habitats, it's hard to tell what are its preferred foods, unless it's "small foods", as the description may vaguely suggest.
What's the shape of its leaf? Is it lying flat, with a twist at the start, or is it like a Dimetrodon sail?
"Much like its ancestor[...]scrounging for food." That's a long, breathless sentence.
"Their long tongue" That doesn't make sense; it's using the singular 'they'.
"culminated into": "culminated with" or "culminated in".
"It can often direct[...]" This sentence needs more commas.
"Most of the other creatures": Are you only counting large fauna, or should it be presumed bug-like fauna are also deaf?
"thrive on Fermi": that needs a comma.
I have to wonder how cold Fermi Tundra must be during the winter. It's an important detail to consider, since many fairly large Fermi fauna are endotherms with no integument. Knowing the conditions of Fermi Tundra would make it easier to migrate or evolve out organisms from Fermi Polar environments. Rackettoons having no integument, and also a long, skinny-looking neck, head, tail and long-skinny-looking legs and and a vulnerable-seeming sail would make them vulnerable to the cold. I'm not sure whether hibernation and hibernation alone would be a sufficient adaptation.
Is its coloration an adaptation for purple flora, or a mixture of black and purple environments?
I noiced it has an indigo stripe on its face and green stripes on its tail. Are those display structures, or predator-distraction structures?
Are you sure it eats Umbrosas? They have a "rock-hard shell" and are 2 meters wide. I don't think Rackettoons have a mouth well-suited to gnaw on Umbrosas. Umbrosas probably wouldn't be as tough, and certainly not as large, when they are very young, so that might be suitable.
Does it favor particular foods over others? With so many foods and habitats, it's hard to tell what are its preferred foods, unless it's "small foods", as the description may vaguely suggest.
| QUOTE (kopout @ Dec 19 2021, 08:00 PM) |
| Would you want to do the Spirepipe Forest as a collaboration? |
I could start on that tomorrow, or the day after.
This organism in particular is so small it can likely make use of more hospitable microhabitats than some of the flora (and indirectly fauna) it's bringing over. But if you mean "this species" as in its role in spreading other species, yes, a Fermi Xeric Scrubland or semidesert woodland or "Spirepipe Forest" of some sort would make the transfer more plausible. (Yes, "Spirepipe Forest" sounds like a good name.)
Ringtailed Ketters, given their shape, small size, lack of integument and wings, would probably have trouble living in the tundra during its cold months, and there's no mention they're seasonal or live only on the fringes of the habitat. Ringtailed Ketters living in Fermi Desert might be more plausible. If a scrubland of some sort provided the occasional hollow log or burrow underneath a tree, it could plausibly allow a small population of Ringtailed Ketters to survive in its warmer latitudes until it yields a better-adapted descendant. (see northern bats, which are much smaller at 6.4. cm, but do have an integument and hibernate in colonies.)
Ringtailed Ketters, given their shape, small size, lack of integument and wings, would probably have trouble living in the tundra during its cold months, and there's no mention they're seasonal or live only on the fringes of the habitat. Ringtailed Ketters living in Fermi Desert might be more plausible. If a scrubland of some sort provided the occasional hollow log or burrow underneath a tree, it could plausibly allow a small population of Ringtailed Ketters to survive in its warmer latitudes until it yields a better-adapted descendant. (see northern bats, which are much smaller at 6.4. cm, but do have an integument and hibernate in colonies.)
Would all of those organisms brought over even be able to survive in those habitats, though? The desert is surely drier than the beach habitats. There might be less rainfall or fog to draw moisture from. In real life, some plants aren't generalists in soil conditions, such as by requiring constant moisture, quick-draining media, or both. Very sandy soil (potentially Fermi's beaches) drains fast, but Fermi Tundra is a wetland during the warm months.
Organic matter in the soil increases its moisture-holding capacity. If there's a "Fermi Semidesert Woodland" landmark or savanna of some sort, suggested by Branching Bonespire and Bonespire descriptions, then perhaps some of these transfers could be localized there.
Organic matter in the soil increases its moisture-holding capacity. If there's a "Fermi Semidesert Woodland" landmark or savanna of some sort, suggested by Branching Bonespire and Bonespire descriptions, then perhaps some of these transfers could be localized there.
" They are hermaphrodites," That comma should be a colon.
"during that period": That sentence is breathless, so I recommend a comma there.
"spore producing": "Spore-producing".
"during that period": That sentence is breathless, so I recommend a comma there.
"spore producing": "Spore-producing".
Hmm...Violet Cadovermis and Flugwurms do share a common ancestor, although they're in different genuses. Since one's from Generation 140 and another is from 144, that would suggest they've had plenty of time to accumulate genetic differences, especially since they likely have very rapid generations.
For comparison, it's believed grizzly bears (North American brown bears) and polar bears diverged 500,000 years ago, and zebras and donkeys diverged 1.69-1.99 million years ago.
On the other hand,inter-genus hybrids inter-genus hybrids do exist: red junglefowl (the ancestors of chickens) and common pheasants diverged diverged 18-23 million years ago, but chicken-pheasant hybrids exist and at least some are fertile.
Flugwurms are, themselves, hybrids of Clear-Wing Worms (the ancestor of Cadovermis) and Cadovermis, which complicates things more.
It might depend on the degree of genetic drift, or whether chromosome numbers changed throughout time.
"While rare mating attempts between the two were relatively rare, and successful fertilizations even more so," That's two uses of "rare".
For comparison, it's believed grizzly bears (North American brown bears) and polar bears diverged 500,000 years ago, and zebras and donkeys diverged 1.69-1.99 million years ago.
On the other hand,inter-genus hybrids inter-genus hybrids do exist: red junglefowl (the ancestors of chickens) and common pheasants diverged diverged 18-23 million years ago, but chicken-pheasant hybrids exist and at least some are fertile.
Flugwurms are, themselves, hybrids of Clear-Wing Worms (the ancestor of Cadovermis) and Cadovermis, which complicates things more.
It might depend on the degree of genetic drift, or whether chromosome numbers changed throughout time.
"While rare mating attempts between the two were relatively rare, and successful fertilizations even more so," That's two uses of "rare".
"the slurpabill will use their" Its.
Is there enough air within the burrow for her and her offspring, even if she's in a state of torpor?
I wonder how many millions of years it takes for eggs to change from froglike to snake-like soft eggs...I'd check myself, but I've been busy lately.
Is there enough air within the burrow for her and her offspring, even if she's in a state of torpor?
I wonder how many millions of years it takes for eggs to change from froglike to snake-like soft eggs...I'd check myself, but I've been busy lately.
Strictly speaking, it shouldn't be able to exist in purely Barlowe Temperate Rainforest at all. Its ancestor lives only in Barlowe Chaparral, which borders Barlowe Temperate Woodland and Oz Temperate Beach. However, it doesn't need to be perfectly adapted to its environment, just good enough, and the workarounds I proposed on November 17 could work for Barlowe Temperate Woodland populations.
Surely you can elaborate on the persistence and adaptive value of its striped pattern? It wouldn't function in the same way as before, with Bombardier Clipperkins so long extinct.
Could you add some shading? It's hard to tell its shape.
There's some other feedback I'll give later.
Could you add some shading? It's hard to tell its shape.
There's some other feedback I'll give later.
| QUOTE (colddigger @ Dec 7 2021, 04:49 PM) |
| I don't see anything wrong with the pattern, deer fawn have it for a reason. |
They do, but it's an adaptation to a particular look of dappled sunlight on the ground. It wouldn't work (in the same way as fawns, anyway) in this habitat, because the leaf shape of local tall blackflora would likely cause a different dappled pattern.
For comparison:
Palm Dappling
Dappling from Another Tree, Likely Deciduous:
As you can see, the second example has a lot more light spots on the ground.
That's a good point. I revise my opinion: an in-description intermediary stages can only go so far, especially given all the other changes it's developed.
I second the notion it should be set to pending. It would be fairly easy to re-adjust the art and description.
https://sagan4alpha.miraheze.org/wiki/Size
This one specifically says not to use "microscopic" as a size measurement.
I believe "cell wall" has occasionally been used as structural support, and cell membranes do seem to be a means of structural support.
For comparison, the largest virus known at time of writing, Pithovirus sibericus, is 1,500 nanometers, or 0.0015 millimeters. That's bigger than the average size of members of the genus Ostrococcus, an exceptionally small class of algae with an average size of 0.8 micrometers (0.0008 mm). Since this eats other, smaller microbes, presumably ones significantly smaller than yourself, you'll need to make sure that, at least in its feeding stage, it's big enough that it still has something to eat.
"meant to disguise their identity and trick observers into registering them as something less dangerous." Meant by whom?
These have such a novel lifestyle that making a few references in the description to real-life microbes with similar lifestyles could boost its plausibility.
This one specifically says not to use "microscopic" as a size measurement.
I believe "cell wall" has occasionally been used as structural support, and cell membranes do seem to be a means of structural support.
For comparison, the largest virus known at time of writing, Pithovirus sibericus, is 1,500 nanometers, or 0.0015 millimeters. That's bigger than the average size of members of the genus Ostrococcus, an exceptionally small class of algae with an average size of 0.8 micrometers (0.0008 mm). Since this eats other, smaller microbes, presumably ones significantly smaller than yourself, you'll need to make sure that, at least in its feeding stage, it's big enough that it still has something to eat.
"meant to disguise their identity and trick observers into registering them as something less dangerous." Meant by whom?
These have such a novel lifestyle that making a few references in the description to real-life microbes with similar lifestyles could boost its plausibility.
The sentences in the template at the top are customarily capitalized.
You'll need to specify the minimum size, not just "microscopic". There's a big difference between, say, slightly below 0.1 mm (the smallest thing that average human eye can see without tools) and 370 nanometers. The latter is the small estimated size of Pelagibacter ubique, one of the smallest known free-living bacteria, and it's equivalent to 0.00037 millimeters.
No support? Surely you can at least say "cell membrane", or ideally something slightly more specific, like "Cell Membrane, Microtubules" or "Double Cell Membrane".
Make sure you aren't confusing "it's" with "its" in the description. Putting this through a word processor, such as LibreOffice or Google Docs, should help you detect common types of errors.
I'll have to get to the rest later. I've been busier lately.
One minor error:
"as extensive of roots":
You probably meant: "as extensive a root system".
"as extensive of roots":
You probably meant: "as extensive a root system".
"being near": Begin near.
" in order better": "In order to better".
"now a much more mobile" A much more mobile form, you mean?
"awhile that this" All while this.
" in order better": "In order to better".
"now a much more mobile" A much more mobile form, you mean?
"awhile that this" All while this.
Surely a Work-In-Progress can have more material than this? This is the shortest work-in-progress I've seen.
I wonder what it will descend from? Obsidoaks seem the closest match, but the trunk is brown and the trunk texturing is very different. Chameleon Obsidishanks match the color of the leaves a little more, but look even more different.
Of course, it's possible it changes trunk color and texturing over time, as oaks do, or perhaps some kind of encrusting organism (e.g., lichen-like, moss-like, or algae-like) grows so thickly as to make it brown, rather than grey or black.
I wonder if those leaf shapes show a leaf with and without its ribbing, or shows two different leaf shapes depending on age and/or sunlight exposure?
Of course, it's possible it changes trunk color and texturing over time, as oaks do, or perhaps some kind of encrusting organism (e.g., lichen-like, moss-like, or algae-like) grows so thickly as to make it brown, rather than grey or black.
I wonder if those leaf shapes show a leaf with and without its ribbing, or shows two different leaf shapes depending on age and/or sunlight exposure?
I like the background art, and the diversification of parasites.
"Cell Wall" is nonspecific. Is more specific information available?
There's a missing parenthesis after "Greatcap Baseejie".
"millions years": million years.
"that similar": That are a similar.
"Cell Wall" is nonspecific. Is more specific information available?
There's a missing parenthesis after "Greatcap Baseejie".
"millions years": million years.
"that similar": That are a similar.
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