"seeyore" is a typo.
"ans scooters" is a typo.

"undetermined" Needs a period.
Are you going to add the version with blotches of flora to the main submission?

Most of the landmarks in recent Weeks do not have flora shown, even when flora (or at least scum-level photosynthetic microbes) would plausibly be visible. For one of the landmarks I made, Askell Lava Field, I provided both a "fresh" version of the landmark image and the landmark covered in pioneering flora. MNIDJM could do the same, but I don't think it's required.

Isn't the section about the captive females escaping big enough to justify splitting it off from the "Rogue Reproductive Behavior" section?

It's interesting to see them using prosthetic limbs, even if it's rare behavior. I wonder if this could inspire some fictionalized account of a Twineshrog missing a limb killing or mutilating other Twineshrogs for their limbs. (I already wrote some dialogue, though who knows when I'll finish it.)

Is it realistic for them to recognize equivalent function to replace their limbs, but not be sophonts? Do they consider their own limbs tools? Do they simply think, "Oh, look, so that's where I left my tail---on a dead shrog's body" and attach it where the tail goes? Do they simply think "that's where a tail goes" as they would regard logs on a nest, or "flat shrog in water look bad, no tail, make it look right, add tail"?

When I read "crafted tools", I interpreted that as not meaning prosthetic limbs or teeth, but simply wielded tools which fulfilled similar functions. Perhaps the female would use spears, perhaps small ones, to tenderize or dismember meat to replace the function of her fangs.

CosmoRomanticist, please don't swear.
More to the point...you could always draw fauna which don't need good coloring skills to properly draw.

Try using the Phantom Filtersquid, Deep Crimson Phantomsquid, or Red Phantomsquid (once the digestive system flip is figured out). They're all mono-colored.

If you can find some organisms that are actually pure monochrome or pencil colors, it should be a lot easier for you to submit things. For example, Puroisters are dark grey with grey fan-arms, and the art for the Bloister seems to be just a very good uncolored pencil drawing.

If you can find some organisms that are multiple shades of the same color, or are mostly one color with accents of another, it also expands what you can do. My Acucravat drawing, for example, is mostly dark pencil shading, with a few color accents.

The Camouflage Foi and Dixon Foi are transparent and nearly colorless, too.

You could also simply make mono-colored or transparent descendants of colorful organisms.

Most of Solpimr's art has very simple coloring, so you could simply filter "Solpimr" and "extant" to find some good candidates for color practice.

"among other" is a typo. You forgot to add an 'S'.

I cannot find improper capitalization. Perhaps it existed in an earlier version of the submission, prior to June 11.

Do Common Gilltails have any resistance to these?
How do they detect gills and breathing apparatuses? Oxygen? Carbon dioxide? How do they adapt to various gill-or-breathing-apparatus structures? Do they have color variations for the twilight zone? Do they occur in brackish waters? Are they more or less common in low-oxygen waters or polar waters?

"survival" should have a period at the end.
Is there only one "titanic baleen hunter" to justify use of the singular?
Some Minifee are poisonous. Do any of those have adaptations to poison, or do they eat non-poisonous varieties?
Did you mean "planktoids"? (Which isn't a word, but looks more like one.)
Does this replace the Gilltail itself? I'm surprised the original Gilltail has lasted so long.
Are these nocturnal or diurnal?
How many eggs do they make? Could you mention a few predators? Do they all exist in one polar area, or both? Do they have any sort of courtship? Do they breed in early, mid, or late summer? Do they have any variations in beak shape for their diets, or do they all have roughly the same omnivorous diet? Do they eat mostly flora, mostly fauna, or a mixture? Do they have any favorite foods?
Its thermoregulation is "exothermic", which seems odd. Did you mean "ectothermic"? If so, how do they live in polar waters? Antifreeze proteins, perhaps?
The description does seem rather short for a macro genus group.

Getting on the dwellings of seafaring shrog (e.g., Seashrogs, Wolvershrog) ships can vastly increase an organism's potential range. Wolvershrogs do occur on the Maineiac Polar Beach habitat and Barlowe habitats. However, Barlowe Temperate Beach seems to no longer exist as of Week 26. You may have meant "Oz Temperate Beach".

If this does get on Wolvershrog ships, you'll have to mention that, and ideally give it an explanation. You could make one of its hosts the Wolvershrog, since Wolvershrogs are Carpozoans.

I'm surprised the Viridian Hot Springs still exist, as it's a landmark that originated in Week 20. Speaking of which, I'm surprised Mount Cryostone from Week 22 still exists.

I'm not sure why the seasons are capitalized here.

I suppose that's true. It would be useful to specify a deadline for canon-replacements like this. How about "only within the same Week"? That's assuming, of course, no ecological significance or connections with other organisms.

Please don't use profanity. More to the point...is it fair to replace things like the Tummorsus with something of a completely different character? Does it set a bad precedent, relative to replacing them with a loosely similar microbe species created by Disgustedorite? I don't have a particular strong opinion, but I'd rather we not establish precedents that cause trouble later.

I agree in that retroactively removing species and replacing them with other ones and species deletions would complicate things, relative to description and minor art revisions. Retroactive insertions long into the past could also complicate things, such as for the Seashrog and Pirate Waxface, though those have been well-incorporated into the ecosystems now and thus can't be removed.

I believe users' first submissions don't need to be posted to this subforum. In any case, it's already approved.

"not only capable" should be "It is not only capable".
"get away" should be "getaway"
"Another adaptation[...]autonomy".
That sentence is overly long. You also confused "autonomy" with "autotomy". (Think of the Pokemon move "Autotomize".)
"but certainly not least important" is extraneous.
"chewed up" I recommend "chewed-up".
"minimum" should have "temperature" or "body temperature" after it.
"gallop away from" should be "gallops away from".

Argentine tegus seems pretty close to this in physiology, and those live for 15-20 years.
It's interesting to see how many Teguloterguformes end up looking like dinosaurs in some way, even ones that aren't thornbacks/Fermisaurs.

I think rotting fruit counts as detritus.

I like their red eyes. They look like spooky crow-fish.

The lung-bumps in the neotenic form seem to be open from the back. Do they not fully grow over in the neotenic form?

It's odd these don't also eat Shelpads...given their sizes, it might be more useful to say they're filter-feeders with a given size range rather than listing out individual microbe genus groups)

" ( Larvaback" There's a slight spacing error before "Larvaback".

These eat only three non-genus-group organisms, and that includes cannibalism. I wonder if having specific watershed habitats for Alpha would have expanded local watershed-dwelling organism sets?

I made sure I didn't check others' entries when I made my submission. It's interesting to see the similarities between the dispersal form of this organism and the Minosparrow.

I like the coloring.

"landmasses" Landmass's.

"This toxin, while not deadly but still potent enough to make anything that would consume be overcome with a sense of noxiousness, is not something of their own making." This sentence is too long.

"vaste" hould be "vast".

"a substance normally forbidden" is poetic, but not quite accurate. I'd recommend "a substance normally inaccessible" or "impossible to obtain".

Shouldn't "Maineiac river" be capitalized?

"strips" makes semantic sense, but I think you meant "stripes", which is more typical.

"help agape": Did you mean "half-agape".

It's interesting to see another organism using the food source of minifees, and taking advantage of the fact some are poisonous.

Is that green bit near the eye part of the eye, like a plica semilunaris, or just decoration? If it's a physical structure, it might help in a potential small project to determine how related the Srugeing descendants are to each other.

"to replenish their gametes"
Surely they would eat for other reasons, too, such as to fulfill energy stores? I doubt all the nutrition goes into making more gametes, even if they have notably high reproductive investments. This sentence also suggests they do this purposefully, which they do not.

"so that it may" and "so that they may" These also sounds purpose-based.

I like the shading.

Is that binomial name meant to be "Volanix annuss" or "Volcanix annuus"? "annuss" doesn't give any results in Wiktionary.

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While it is a significant change in salinity this lineage has made such jumps before, from fresh to salt and back again. Would a line like "Their eggs and larva are significantly more salt tolerant than their ancestor's, more like those of their distant ancestor the tileback." be ok?

Kopout,that could work, although mentioning specific adaptations, such as kidney adaptations to deal with water concentrations and solutes, would be better. You could say it also has gill-based adaptation to control salt levels, or skip that entirely and say it has air-breathing young. It would seem the water-bound young of various Teguloterguformes have gills, judging by Crallsnapers and various thornbacks.

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"to deter predators from grabbing it"
I would suggest "which deters predators from grabbing it" instead.

I recommend "pack hunting" and "tightly knit" get a hyphen.

"Brightly colored heads"? Is that sexual dimorphism? Mating-season-specific coloration?

I like this scaly-looking murderous Protoceraptors-esque fauna.

"go through a small growth spurt," needs to have a colon, not a comma, and "diet. Which" needs to replace the period with a comma, but at this point it ought to just get edited once it's on the wiki.

I believe this is sufficient. Does anyone else have further feedback? If not, this submission can be approved and Oofle can be admitted as a member.

Does the name need to be changed? The Beta timeline has the Shearwyrm and its descendant, the Vicewyrm. "Wyrm", unlike "worm", is harder to excuse as an inevitable coincidence.

"Inside of" is redundant: "inside" is sufficient.
All other genus groups portray at three species example in the same image. It makes more sense to make the second image the first, official image, and then make the first image a supplemental image. Perhaps the supplemental image could be a focus on an exceptionally large but otherwise not especially notable species. Alternatively, you could merge the two images together, placing the smaller-looking species beside the original example.


"spores will use its" should be "spores will use their".

"plents body" should be "plent's body".

I recommend adding a comma after "stable source of food", although that particular sentence does fall within normal amounts of spacing. It sounds as if someone is speaking quickly to not pause to provie a comma.

"fertilizing organisms"? What do you mean?

"Florambulatioparasita" is quite a mouthful. Is there a shorter name? It's ten syllables. In comparison, the tapeworm order Diphyllobothriidea is seven syllables.

Why is there an empty pair of parentheses in the reproduction line?

When you say "plents", do you mean the entirety of the Phytozoa phylum? That's quite a lot to cover at once. It's not impossible, though, as tapeworms cover birds and mammals (chordates) as well as mollusks, but it might help to specify their various adaptations to major kinds of plents.

What about plent lineages that gave up photosynthesis, but regained it, or regained a weaker version of it? Consider Gesistratidae. A Shroom Herder, one species in Geistratidae, comes from a long line of non-photosynthetic nodents, but it has weak photosynthesis.

They gently "swim" through the air, but do they have a particular direction? It's not out of the question they could grow in a particular direction once they grow, like dodder vines, but it should be specified.

Personally, I would suggest "plentwerms", due to the Vicewyrm and Shearwyrm of Alpha having pretty distinctive names. (And also the more relevant Burrowyrm, released in the Alpha timeline, and in this same Generation, too.)