When I said to clean up the image, I meant something like this. The sketch lines are more minimal.

It's funny to see "loss of Coolsteph", because I feel like saying, "I'm right here!"

Roughly how many islets are in the Coolsteph Atoll? What's the size of the biggest island? For comparison, the biggest island in the Hawaiian archipelago is 4,028 square miles (10,430 km2) and the island of Manhattan in New York City is 59 square kilometers.

Incidentally, I had gotten halfway through trying to calculate the size of the biggest Coolsteph atoll while assuming Drake was roughly the size of the Middle East when I just realized I could ask you. It turns out that making the biggest atoll one-twentieth the size of Ramul using Middle East Map guesses makes the biggest atoll more than ten times bigger than the biggest Hawaiian island, which doesn't make sense because at least Hawaii has an mountain above 4 kilometers.

I like the goat pupils and patterning.

"Jaydoh island" Should "island" be capitalized here?
"beech cheekhorns" Beach cheekhorns.

Could you clean up the sketch lines in the extra gallery image? The sketch lines make it look messy.

I like the color gradation.

"In the cold tundra’s" Cold tundras.
"their face exposed." Its face? Were you going for "An adult tyrant crested limbless spend large amounts of time entirely underground, with only the top portion of its face exposed."

"their snout" Its snout/their snouts.
"being known to attack" That seems extraneous. If you want to suggest it is surprising or little-known, you could say it attacks subadult polar barons only rarely.
"Sub adult" should be "subadult".
"Crested limbless, on the other hand", You mean "limblesses". If it has weird grammar like "deer" or "sheep", a note should be made of it in the description. However, "limblesses" seems already established as the plural form: https://sagan4alpha.miraheze.org/wiki/Limblesses
"drake tundra" should be "Drake Tundra" or "Drake tundra". Drake is a continent.
"Once they catch something" It would make sense to use the collective possesive if they hunt in packs, like wolves, but they do not do so as adults and that part of the description seems to be describing adult hunting patterns, so using the singular makes sense.
"these young limbless" Limblesses. There are other instances of incorrect pluralization, too.
"their life is simply to breathe" Their lives, plural.
"merely kill her" Merely kill her? "Merely" downplays something; saying "merely scratches her" or "merely leaves superficial wounds, despite his jaw strength" makes sense, but not "merely kill her". Did you mean "surely kill", as in "It's not guaranteed to kill her, but very likely".
"will be hopefully caught". Did you mean "likely caught" or "if they are lucky"?

"This cycle continues until one of them gives up and leaves, with the loser often wandering on their own or joining bachelor herds." Since it's males specifically, using "his" is appropriate.

"running secretmaw has to live up to their name" Its name.

There's some purpose-oriented language here.

I like the coloration and pose.

"which helps it hide" is the easiest solution.
Did you want to elaborate on its dietary preferences? It might help to know how strongly herbivorous it is.

Would you suggest I mention Pirate Waxfaces are helped in arriving on the islands by the Gentonnas, but haven't managed to colonize it for the reasons you've stated and so don't have permanent populations?

I decided to give it some Driftwood Islands details. They probably wouldn't find it as easy to colonize as for smaller, more common seafaring shrew-spread organisms, so I mentioned they were rare.

I also decided to justify introducing the Pirate Waxface to the Driftwood Islands. I'm surprised they weren't there already.

The Tigmane seems to be missing. Did I not ever submit it?
Sketch of Tigmane:

Indeed, I was going to comment on this one today.

"to help hide in the forest floor;" That suggests intention, which is discouraged.
I see it has a very broad diet. Does it have particular preferences, overall, by season, or by life stage? At least some herbivorous birds have strongly insect-loving nestlings.

Full Size: https://imgur.com/PrTo6jy

Artist: Coolsteph
Biome:Seal Moor
Fauna: Purple Snood, Purple Wude, Shearwyrm (very close to camera), Beardgill (very close to camera), Royal Crestgill (very close to camera)
Flora: Violetmellow, Violetweed, Violetspine, Violet Mat, Shootstems spp. (seen from a distance), Medamaude Gnarlpalm (seen from a distance), Fern Asterplents spp. (two juveniles in foreground; very close to camera), Grassterplents (seen from a distance), Ambrejalaalo (very close to camera)

Perhaps the official image depicts the young (a calf?) with some underdeveloped features? In any case, that should be corrected or clarified.

This submission is now complete. Is there any feedback?

It's a deliciously detailed description, and at this point, I think separating it into sections is a good idea. I suggest at least four: "General Behavior", "Tools & Nests", "Hunting Behavior", and "Reproduction", with the latter being easy to split into general reproduction details and "Rogue Males & Harems" details.

What materials does it use to make the twine? I presume it's purpleflora materials. Does it use stem tissue? Leaf tissue? Fuzzy tissue?

I forgot to mention this earlier.

"--" That should be an emdash.

"In the drier open parts of its range, twineshrogs may defend their nests from wildfires by clearing away flora so that there is nothing in between to burn." That's exceptional foresight. Is it worth specifying it is excellent at observing and applying what it has learned at a delay, or is "orangutan-like intelligence" sufficient?
"a sword on a stick--" that also should be an emdash.
"dig--though" That should also be an emdash.
I've seen using multiple hyphens as a substitute for emdashes, but I think I typically see three hyphens (---), not two, making this use conspicuous.

How would they not frequently bleed to death or get infections from their tails and teeth getting sawed off or pulled out...? Unless there's some kind of antibacterial plant or fungus or some other substance, and the rogue males are smart enough to anticipate needing them or applying them as needed, the captured females would probably die and attract scavengers.

"It defecates outside away from its nest and does a good job of removing rotting food to avoid attracting scavengers, so it does not have a symbiotic shailnitor descendant by its side to clean its nest."
But the captive females are tied up. Would rogue males clean up the nest? Are they capable of doing so? I suppose it depends on the texture of Twineshrog feces (never thought I would say that...) and how willing they are to handle it. Now would be a good time to have an "evil shailnitor", wouldn't it?

Using a harness does seem unusual. Is it derived from behavior of setting out concealed twine traps on large prey and then eating their disabled, mutilated prey alive? I'm actually surprised these don't engage in cannibalism.

I recommend phrasing like, "Its [feature] helps/ it [do specific thing]", or "its [physical feature] makes it well-equipped for [specific thing]".

Yes, I do plan on taking part in the latest Prime Specimen. I'd like to finish my long-delayed Beta timeline diorama entry first, if that contest is still going for lack of entries.

"The reason for this of their mildly venomous bite - the poison does not involve fangs and is instead produced by the salivary glands - which has recently evolved. "

I think the statement within the emdashes (hyphens, in this case) would be better if separated and put after the first statement, outside the emdashes.

""Rooted" Are the shapes inside the body root-like, or is it simply anchored in the skin?

"When done in mass" You meant "en masse", a French expression. (https://brians.wsu.edu/2016/05/24/in-mass/)

"They eagerly await" Is this excess anthropomorphization, or does their behavior, such as moving about rapidly, suggest eagerness enough to justify this characterization? Can they even think of the future and past to the extent it can eagerly await the return of warm weather? Does a squirrel shivering in the cold of winter think, "Gosh, I hope spring arrives soon", or just "It sure is cold", if it has particular thoughts about its environment at all? I think a dog wagging its tail and doing a play bow and barking in a melodious manner can be described as "eager", but I'm unsure whether a roly-poly meandering somewhat quickly to a watermelon rind can be called "eager". I don't know whether this organism is closer to a dog or a roly-poly in its level of emotional complexity.

"if they wish to survive" Are there some that don't want to survive? That phrasing suggests the possibility.

The artwork is very pretty, but also grotesque. I like the shading and use of color.

"is it’s massive" its massive.
" also known to" Why this expression? It seems needless.

I like the pose and its bright green tongue.

"The tail has also elongated to serve as a counter balance," "to house a larger gut", "to help clip off" (and other examples): I recommend not using purpose-oriented phrasing. (see this Wikipedia article) As Disgustedorite pointed out for the Barkback, octopi are weird for modifying their RNA in a way that seems directed see here), but as a general rule, purpose-oriented descriptions can lead people astray.

"faceplant" is an informal word. I recommend "fall flat on its face" or "stumble repeatedly".

"Cardicracker's are" Cardicrackers are.

I like its shape and coloration.

There are some suggested revisions for greater clarity I'd like to add to the Sappy Pinknose and Tigmow pages, which I had initially put on the Retcons & Revisions Beta Timeline topic. However, those are clarifications, not retcons. Should this topic be used for both retcons and smaller-scale adjustments, or should there be separate topics?

I think I left an anatomical ambiguity in the Tigmow. As MNIDJM brought up in a private message to me, it's unclear whether it still has tail-spikes.

Given one of its descendants, the Tigmadar, has tail-spikes, I propose clarifying the description to say it has stumpy tail-spikes on a modified tail-tip. That would allow one of its descendants, the Neoshrew, to easily continue with tail-spike reduction.

I also propose adding the following diagrams to the Sappy Pinknose's page, to clarify its physiology. Ambiguities in its physiology were brought up by OviraptorFan via private message.

Cutaway showing passages:


I would also like to clarify it is similar to a conk fungus, with a complex, sometimes asymmetrical shape.