is "instinct" the correct term to use for an organism without a brain?
| QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Oct 7 2022, 06:15 PM) |
| is "instinct" the correct term to use for an organism without a brain? |
Yes. It is a term used with slime molds as well.
Just a cursory check...
It's surely an ectotherm, so you can list that.
Please put the scientific name directly after the common name. There's no need to put it in the next line.
The first sentence is so small that it is better to put it in the same paragraph as the second paragraph.
Ther's a conspicuous empty space after the second paragraph.
It seems to crawl along the ground when young, and then lift itself up into the sky from there.
A plastic bag lifted up into the sky does not contain water, and water is heavy. A 20 cm-long plasmoid full of water is probably too heavy to be lifted up into the air very much in virtually all habitat conditions and seasons, which is surely the standard assumption for a global genus. The easiest solution is drastically reducing the size of the plasmoid to get a high altitude, or mildly reducing its size (say, 15 cm long) for much lower, shorter flights.
"ground avoiding": "ground, avoiding".
"otherwise it": "Otherwise, it".
"look for" Unless it has eyes, using "seek another tree" is better.
On an unrelated note...why not get an avatar? It seems you've had plenty of time to get established in the community here and find an avatar for yourself. It's like a user's face.
It's surely an ectotherm, so you can list that.
Please put the scientific name directly after the common name. There's no need to put it in the next line.
The first sentence is so small that it is better to put it in the same paragraph as the second paragraph.
Ther's a conspicuous empty space after the second paragraph.
It seems to crawl along the ground when young, and then lift itself up into the sky from there.
A plastic bag lifted up into the sky does not contain water, and water is heavy. A 20 cm-long plasmoid full of water is probably too heavy to be lifted up into the air very much in virtually all habitat conditions and seasons, which is surely the standard assumption for a global genus. The easiest solution is drastically reducing the size of the plasmoid to get a high altitude, or mildly reducing its size (say, 15 cm long) for much lower, shorter flights.
"ground avoiding": "ground, avoiding".
"otherwise it": "Otherwise, it".
"look for" Unless it has eyes, using "seek another tree" is better.
On an unrelated note...why not get an avatar? It seems you've had plenty of time to get established in the community here and find an avatar for yourself. It's like a user's face.
The first paragraph is just one sentence, so it's better to merge it with the second paragraph.
There's a conspicuous spacing gap between Paragraph 2 and Paragraph 3 which should be removed.
How does it know a tree has many branches? It's unclear if it can see, much less see with sufficient resolution for that. Does it make an "inference" that a tree has branches based on wind flow patterns across its colony-body once it's sufficiently high up on a tree? Does it have to crawl over the crook of branches to make an "inference"?
I recommend merging Paragraphs 2 and 3, since they are both about its hunting methods, and so logically flow from each other. They're short paragraphs, too.
"engulfing": Engulfs.
There are a few stray lines and uncolored parts, but those aren't too conspicuous, so you don't actually need to fix them.
There's a conspicuous spacing gap between Paragraph 2 and Paragraph 3 which should be removed.
How does it know a tree has many branches? It's unclear if it can see, much less see with sufficient resolution for that. Does it make an "inference" that a tree has branches based on wind flow patterns across its colony-body once it's sufficiently high up on a tree? Does it have to crawl over the crook of branches to make an "inference"?
I recommend merging Paragraphs 2 and 3, since they are both about its hunting methods, and so logically flow from each other. They're short paragraphs, too.
"engulfing": Engulfs.
There are a few stray lines and uncolored parts, but those aren't too conspicuous, so you don't actually need to fix them.
If this has a global habitat, it will need to be a genus group. That requires depicting at least three species in the image, and I recommend providing more detail about its broad adaptations to various environments and environmental tolerances. You can also just limit it to one continent, but the same genus group rules apply.
An easier tactic is making it just one species, but giving it a remarkably wide distribution as your wildcard submission. (See Wildcard Rule in the rules: https://sagan4.jcink.net/index.php?showtopic=1&st=0)
"an organism" surely means "the organism".
The second part of the scientific name should not be capitalized. Remember: "T.rex", not "T.Rex".
Since the Flying Ooze eats "whatever it can find" when it's small, it would help to specify the sorts of things it eats, or at least prefers: say, small prey, rotting fruit and leaves, and so on.
If you intend to make this a wildcard submission, then all you'll need to do (after the relatively minor things above) is specify habitats, make sure they're connected, or make habitats that can't be survived in for long merely merely migrating habitats in between main habitats.
An easier tactic is making it just one species, but giving it a remarkably wide distribution as your wildcard submission. (See Wildcard Rule in the rules: https://sagan4.jcink.net/index.php?showtopic=1&st=0)
"an organism" surely means "the organism".
The second part of the scientific name should not be capitalized. Remember: "T.rex", not "T.Rex".
Since the Flying Ooze eats "whatever it can find" when it's small, it would help to specify the sorts of things it eats, or at least prefers: say, small prey, rotting fruit and leaves, and so on.
If you intend to make this a wildcard submission, then all you'll need to do (after the relatively minor things above) is specify habitats, make sure they're connected, or make habitats that can't be survived in for long merely merely migrating habitats in between main habitats.
I thought it was already un-global'd. That must be a newer edit.
The habitats involved have four flavors. Unless you're using a wildcard, this is impossible, but that's a moot point because the coast is largely an underwater enviroment with no trees inherent to the habitat....unless, of course, you make these use Topship Fuzzpalms on Topship Shrog nests.
That does bring up the question of how it doesn't use Topship vessels to spread to more habitats, though, and unless it just ran out of food, couldn't handle environmental conditions on the journey, or got destroyed by Topship Shrogs or other topship symbiotes, it would likely have to be a wildcard anyway, since it would surely spread to other forested areas once the Topship Shrogs made landfall. Notably, Topship Shrog nests are much cleaner than most shrog nests, which would likely make it harder for Flying Oozes to get enough food when it separates from the parent organism.
Style of feeding is not normally listed in the diet, so "omnivore" is more suitable.
I recommend:
"Diet: Omnivore (Dartirs, Xenobees, Xenowasps), Detritivore". "Detritivore" would suggest species matters little, if at all, when it concerns the rotting material it eats. You can, however, specify it eats (or mainly eats) rotting fruit and leaf litter in the description, as that is a useful detail.
When you've updated it, make a post in this thread to alert others to the fact. If you edit the first post without telling anyone, it's hard to know there was an update.
That does bring up the question of how it doesn't use Topship vessels to spread to more habitats, though, and unless it just ran out of food, couldn't handle environmental conditions on the journey, or got destroyed by Topship Shrogs or other topship symbiotes, it would likely have to be a wildcard anyway, since it would surely spread to other forested areas once the Topship Shrogs made landfall. Notably, Topship Shrog nests are much cleaner than most shrog nests, which would likely make it harder for Flying Oozes to get enough food when it separates from the parent organism.
Style of feeding is not normally listed in the diet, so "omnivore" is more suitable.
I recommend:
"Diet: Omnivore (Dartirs, Xenobees, Xenowasps), Detritivore". "Detritivore" would suggest species matters little, if at all, when it concerns the rotting material it eats. You can, however, specify it eats (or mainly eats) rotting fruit and leaf litter in the description, as that is a useful detail.
When you've updated it, make a post in this thread to alert others to the fact. If you edit the first post without telling anyone, it's hard to know there was an update.
Coast/Mangal counts as 1 Flavour
Types
Temperate
Subpolar
Flavours
Coast/Mangal
Rainforest
Woodlands
edited diet
Types
Temperate
Subpolar
Flavours
Coast/Mangal
Rainforest
Woodlands
edited diet
| QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Oct 24 2022, 08:41 PM) |
| The habitats involved have four flavors. Unless you're using a wildcard, this is impossible, but that's a moot point because the coast is largely an underwater enviroment with no trees inherent to the habitat....unless, of course, you make these use Topship Fuzzpalms on Topship Shrog nests. That does bring up the question of how it doesn't use Topship vessels to spread to more habitats, though, and unless it just ran out of food, couldn't handle environmental conditions on the journey, or got destroyed by Topship Shrogs or other topship symbiotes, it would likely have to be a wildcard anyway, since it would surely spread to other forested areas once the Topship Shrogs made landfall. Notably, Topship Shrog nests are much cleaner than most shrog nests, which would likely make it harder for Flying Oozes to get enough food when it separates from the parent organism. Style of feeding is not normally listed in the diet, so "omnivore" is more suitable. I recommend: "Diet: Omnivore (Dartirs, Xenobees, Xenowasps), Detritivore". "Detritivore" would suggest species matters little, if at all, when it concerns the rotting material it eats. You can, however, specify it eats (or mainly eats) rotting fruit and leaf litter in the description, as that is a useful detail. When you've updated it, make a post in this thread to alert others to the fact. If you edit the first post without telling anyone, it's hard to know there was an update. |
Please put the thing you're responding to at the top of your response. This is done automatically if you respond by pressing the quote button on a post.
Keep in mind that the mangal is like a mangrove forest, but the coast is out in the sea. This organism relies on trees. The coast (as a specific habitat) does not have trees, barring Topship Fuzzpalms. I checked the rules, and Coastal/Mangal counts as one flavor (Sunlight Zone) only if it includes the coast as well, which is, again, impossible for this organism, barring Topship Fuzzpalms. This rule most likely exists for fishlike organisms that live in both mangrove-like estuaries and bays or coasts, not for terrestrial organisms.
Keep in mind that the mangal is like a mangrove forest, but the coast is out in the sea. This organism relies on trees. The coast (as a specific habitat) does not have trees, barring Topship Fuzzpalms. I checked the rules, and Coastal/Mangal counts as one flavor (Sunlight Zone) only if it includes the coast as well, which is, again, impossible for this organism, barring Topship Fuzzpalms. This rule most likely exists for fishlike organisms that live in both mangrove-like estuaries and bays or coasts, not for terrestrial organisms.
So just removing the coast and it'll be fine?
Even if it gets blown out there, there's nothing for it to perform its normal lifestyle on so probably shouldn't count as a habitat.
Even if it gets blown out there, there's nothing for it to perform its normal lifestyle on so probably shouldn't count as a habitat.
| QUOTE (colddigger @ Oct 24 2022, 09:16 PM) |
| So just removing the coast and it'll be fine? Even if it gets blown out there, there's nothing for it to perform its normal lifestyle on so probably shouldn't count as a habitat. |
Removing the coast from the habitats is the simplest solution, yes. It's not impossible for it to live in a coastal habitat if it uses Topship Fuzzpalms, but this does greatly complicate the submission. There is also the possibility it could simply yield a specialized Topship Fuzzpalm-dependent descendant later on.
| QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Oct 24 2022, 10:59 PM) | ||
Removing the coast from the habitats is the simplest solution, yes. It's not impossible for it to live in a coastal habitat if it uses Topship Fuzzpalms, but this does greatly complicate the submission. There is also the possibility it could simply yield a specialized Topship Fuzzpalm-dependent descendant later on. |
There are plenty of coastal trees for it to use.
Quhft, Cocobarrage, Obsidibend, Mainland Fuzzpalm, Mangot, Qupe Tree, Bangsticks
Branching Qupe Tree, Topship Fuzzpalm
I just don't think getting rid of coast would be the best option here.
Got rid of Rainforest and Archipelago
This post has been edited by HethrJarrod: Oct 25 2022, 06:30 AM
| QUOTE (HethrJarrod @ Oct 25 2022, 07:47 AM) | ||||
There are plenty of coastal trees for it to use. Quhft, Cocobarrage, Obsidibend, Mainland Fuzzpalm, Mangot, Qupe Tree, Bangsticks Branching Qupe Tree, Topship Fuzzpalm I just don't think getting rid of coast would be the best option here. Got rid of Rainforest and Archipelago |
You seem to have mistaken "Elerd Temperate Coast" with "Elerd Temperate Beach". On second inspection, Carnosprawls and floating Mangrovecrystal forests are also an option, but that does bring up the question of what happens to them if they float away from the trees and land into the water. The simplest solution is to keep them on land, rather than on Mangrovecrystal, Carnosprawl, or Topship Fuzzplams.
EDIT: It seems you've already corrected the beach/coast problem.
| QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Oct 25 2022, 01:16 PM) | ||||||
You seem to have mistaken "Elerd Temperate Coast" with "Elerd Temperate Beach". On second inspection, Carnosprawls and floating Mangrovecrystal forests are also an option, but that does bring up the question of what happens to them if they float away from the trees and land into the water. The simplest solution is to keep them on land, rather than on Mangrovecrystal, Carnosprawl, or Topship Fuzzplams. EDIT: It seems you've already corrected the beach/coast problem. |
Decided to make the organism multicellular.
Warranting a taxonomical name change (Kotelimus volans)
And changing the reproductive method to reflect the shift. It reproduces the same way, smaller individuals would occasionally break off from the parent, but that seems more appropriate to be called budding.
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