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I didn't realize this "old school" phlyer lineage was still alive and kicking. I always felt there was something off about those phlyers being so pudgy, as active fliers.

Hm, have you considered the possibility of your phlyer spreading it food sources to new habitats? Also I recommend adding a body length to the description as well (just by comparing its body length to one of its wings, it looks like this species has a body length of 20 centimeters).

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Aug 10 2022, 06:22 AM

Good tip, I have added a body length. As for spreading its food to other environments, I am a bit worried about spreading, if only because I do not know the rules for spreading species very well. If y’all think it would be okay though, I will think on it. Would you have any advice?

It's really cool to see this classic phlyer shape again

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: color change, smaller body
Internal?:
Behavioral/Mental?: detritivore added to diet
Are Changes Realistic?: y, though I wonder about the body size change choice given the habitats
New Genus Needed?: n

Habitat:
Type?: 2
Flavor?: 1
Connected?:y
Wildcard?:n

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Within range?:y
Exception?: wingspan listed is same, body size unspecified in ancestor, clarified in this and stated to be smaller, still works

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y
Other?: elaborated

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Transition Rule?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y, detritivore added

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y ?
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?:okay
Capitalized correctly?:y
Replace/Split from ancestor?:split
Other?:I honestly wonder if anything should be living in the Drake Barrens at all if it is meant to replicate the center of Antarctica. I would suggest instead moving this further south. Shrinking the body also leaves it more sensitive to heat loss, moving this further south would help lessen the significance of this as well.

Opinion: Pending, because I'll wait for someone else to approve it or if Changeling wants to switch up the submission at all.

I see what you mean regarding it living in the barrens. Do you think I could edit the description to remove it from the barrens and keep it in the tundra, but add the drake steppe to its environments, with notes that it has accidentally brought the Glassleaf south because of its diet and nesting? As per Oviraptorfan’s previous suggestion?

I don't see why not

New range edited in

Just to clarify, the barrens are not like central Antarctica, not sure where this idea came from. They are polar tundra, which while cold and harsh does not mean empty. A better example of what the Barren flavor is would be the Kergulen Islands

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Flora_and_fau...rguelen_Islands

The areas that ARE actually near incapable of complex land life would be the Glacial flavors (save for glacier beaches, as they would be slightly better at supporting complex life.

Just a cursory check....
How garish. That's probably intended, though.
"bodies ability: "bodies' ability".
There's no need to capitalize habitat type names. That's only needed for individiual habitats.
"Cotten Candy": That's a typo.

Oh gosh. Candy Cotton is the typo, Cotton Candy is right, it’s meant to refer to the fair treat.

Edit: title corrected and other changes made

This post has been edited by Changeling: Oct 9 2022, 06:00 PM

QUOTE (Changeling @ Oct 10 2022, 01:22 AM)

Oh gosh. Candy Cotton is the typo, Cotton Candy is right, it’s meant to refer to the fair treat. Edit: title corrected and other changes made

It's spelled "cotten" with an e instead of "cotton" a few times within the submission, i think that's what they meant

Ah I see. Hopefully it is better now

The word "description" should be omitted.
"Polar Spade-Leafs": That should probably be "Polar Spade-Leaves".
Unless the creator specifies otherwise (such as for "deer", "sheep", and "moose", or "geese" or "mice"), general English grammar rules can be applied to the plural of an organism name.
"large number Pink Phlyers": "large number of Pink Phlyers".
Although "population" refers to a lot of organisms, I get the feeling that "its" would be more appropriate. Consider: "The U.S. population has stated its opinion" relative to "the citizens of the United States have stated their opinion."


I wonder...by what standard of decay does something fall into the "detritus" category? If something is overripe, but not mere sludge, does that count as "detritus"?

"More striking": This sentence needs to be revised.
"Similarly though": This sentence needs to be revised: I suggest a comma.
"their mate": This is a pluralization error.
"birth two": "Give birth to two"
"Tundra": This should not be capitalized.


This is an important detail: this species lives in a high-latitude cold environment, but it has large skin-wings, no pelage, very large wings for its body size, and a small body size. Some accommodations need to be made within some combination of design, habitat, migratory patterns, or use of shelter.


I'll have to get back to this later.

" both to warm their small bodies up and to photosynthesis"

both to warm their small bodies up and to photosynthesize?

I like your edits regarding migration and importance of sunlight access.

I think being able to eat things plus their ability to use big wings for photosynthesis would provide enough sugar to keep a livable temperature for something that doesn't need as high of a body temperature as, say, a human.

as for issue with heat loss through the wings.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Countercurrent_exchange

thing could help somewhat.