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This is Great, I love the island Finch name reference.

"since they no longer to soar all day," missing word

"They on nest on the ground" missing word

"ground both die to lack of predators " wrong word

"body is photosynthetic. Their wings " should use comma instead of period

"Their wings in particular are nightly concentrated with". Wrong word

Wonderful eight limbed beasty

So is it Flinch or Phlinch?

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ Aug 28 2022, 07:52 PM)

So is it Flinch or Phlinch?

oops! PH not F

QUOTE (colddigger @ Aug 28 2022, 07:48 PM)

This is Great, I love the island Finch name reference. "since they no longer to soar all day," missing word "They on nest on the ground" missing word "ground both die to lack of predators " wrong word "body is photosynthetic. Their wings " should use comma instead of period "Their wings in particular are nightly concentrated with". Wrong word Wonderful eight limbed beasty

Ok i think fixed.

Yes should be interesting to see that types of Phlinches will evolve from this.I hope this is general enough to evolve just about any type of niche from it.

This post has been edited by Hydromancerx: Aug 28 2022, 08:08 PM

Last time I checked, using "primus" as the species name is discouraged due to overuse. You could probably use a name referencing finches or the fact it walks.
"it's population boomed" is a typo.
There's some choppiness here, too. Like several other submissions, I'll have to come back later. There have been so many submissions lately that some earlier ones haven't gotten sufficient attention.

I think it's general enough, I can totally see someone making one that just lives on the ground like a dodo for example.

This post has been edited by colddigger: Aug 28 2022, 09:14 PM

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Aug 28 2022, 08:42 PM)

Last time I checked, using "primus" as the species name is discouraged due to overuse. You could probably use a name referencing finches or the fact it walks. "it's population boomed" is a typo. There's some choppiness here, too. Like several other submissions, I'll have to come back later. There have been so many submissions lately that some earlier ones haven't gotten sufficient attention.

Ok changed to "insulam" meaning "island"

I'm excited for a potential Xeno Island 2.0 that this species might bring about.

You're missing a colon in "Respiration Active"

Edit: Looks like it was fixed

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: smaller wings, longer legs
Internal?: increased photosynthesis in wings
Behavioral/Mental?: ground nesting
Are Changes Realistic?:y
New Genus Needed?: not very flight based

Habitat:
Type?:1
Flavor?:3
Connected?:y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Within range?:y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Transition Rule?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y, omnivore now

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: short
Capitalized correctly?: y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other:

Opinion: Approved

What a strange, friendly-looking creature.

"it's population" is a typo, and hasn't been fixed yet.

"spreading to" "It spread to".

"since they" The grammar doesn't quite match up, unless it's referring to the wings themselves. However, I'm not sure if it can be said that wings themselves soar.
"soar all day," should be "soar all day:".
"ground feeding": "Ground, feeding." Try reading the description aloud to get a feel for the right punctuation.

"their entire body" is a plural possessive error.

QUOTE (colddigger @ Oct 3 2022, 12:50 AM)

Approval Checklist: Art: Art Present?:y Art clear?:y Gen number?:y All limbs shown?:y Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y Realistic additions?:y Name: Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y Creator?:y Ancestor: Listed?:y What changes?: External?: smaller wings, longer legs Internal?: increased photosynthesis in wings Behavioral/Mental?: ground nesting Are Changes Realistic?:y New Genus Needed?: not very flight based Habitat: Type?:1 Flavor?:3 Connected?:y Wildcard?: Size: Same as Ancestor?:n Within range?:y Exception?: Support: Same as Ancestor?:n Does It Fit Habitat?:y Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated Other?: Diet: Same as Ancestor?:n Transition Rule?:y Reasonable changes (if any)?: y, omnivore now Respiration: Same as Ancestor?: y Does It Fit Habitat?:y Reasonable changes (if any)?: Other?: Thermoregulation: Same as Ancestor?:y Does It Fit Habitat?:y Reasonable changes (if any)?: Other?: Reproduction: Same as Ancestor?:y Does It Fit Habitat?:y Reasonable changes (if any)?: Other?: Description: Length?: short Capitalized correctly?: y Replace/Split from ancestor?: split Other: Opinion: Approved

Seconded

I feel like the forelimbs are too far back, giving the appearance that this guy would tip over and faceplant. Would it be possible for the forelimbs to be moved forward a little bit?