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This is a swap for oviraptorfan

I suddenly realize that I need to set the diet for the planktonic larvae, and probably draw a visual of them.

“The Quilled Watersnake split from its ancestor the Marocta I moved into the open Waters surrounding Rhodix Vents.“
I think there is a typo here.

Also I love this species a lot! Really well done!

While I do like this design, I do feel like this should have a different name IMO.

The name comes from the toy called a water snake, which the front body section is kind of like .

QUOTE (colddigger @ Aug 28 2022, 11:05 PM)

The name comes from the toy called a water snake, which the front body section is kind of like .

Surely there's another name that can be utilized or a way to soup it up a little bit?

Given that there are real-life aquatic snakes and that this hardly looks like any of them, I'd probably find a different name choice. Unless it's trying to pull a "shrew" or "quail" again.

I could call it a water wiggler since that's another name for that toy

QUOTE (colddigger @ Aug 29 2022, 07:43 AM)

I could call it a water wiggler since that's another name for that toy

Wigglemaw?

That's a good name, I'll take it.

However I don't have the ability to access full edit for the topic title.

QUOTE (colddigger @ Aug 29 2022, 10:17 PM)

That's a good name, I'll take it. However I don't have the ability to access full edit for the topic title.

Fixed it for you.

Does this larval form still work

This post has been edited by colddigger: Oct 31 2022, 10:09 PM

QUOTE (colddigger @ Nov 1 2022, 02:08 AM)

Does this larval form still work

Well, could you perhaps do a drawing of what the larvae looks like?

"it moved" moving

"Their long ribbon-like fins "

could be worded better... maybe something like:

Their frontmost and rearmost ribbon-like fins have changed into four short and highly mobile fins to allow the organism to more easily maneuver in its open water home. Meanwhile the other ribbon-like fins have changed into a selection of movement sensitive quills toward the rear of the body, to detect motion through the water, and to deter predators. The tips of the quills are dark and hardened.

The body is divided into two distinct pieces. The rear has a well-defined exoskeleton where the majority of the organs are located. The front section which is mainly mouth, crop, and stomach is supported by flexible but firm semi-external notochord-like structure of both living cells and cuticle. This supporting structure extends all the way to the front of the body where it rings the toothless mouth and provides an anchor point for the muscles that control the front fins, pincers, and eye nubs."

"The eyes" ... they

"On either side of the mouth are very sharp and hard pincers that carry a venomous bite, these weapons are essentially the only means that this organism has for subduing prey." -

Hard pincers on either side of the mouth carry a venomous bite and are essentially the only means for the Quilled Wigglemaw to subdue its prey.

"species is met than the couple up" - "species is met, they"

Their long ribbon-like fins have been changed into a selection of movement sensitive quills toward the rear of the body, to detect motion through the water, as well as four short and highly mobile fins to allow the organism to more easily maneuver in its open water home. The quills toward the back of the body have the second purpose of deterring predation, their tips are dark and hardened.

changed to


Their frontmost and rearmost ribbon-like fins have changed into four short and highly mobile fins to allow the organism to more easily maneuver in its open water home. Meanwhile the other ribbon-like fins have changed into a selection of movement sensitive quills toward the rear of the body, to detect motion through the water, and to deter predators. The tips of the quills are dark and hardened.



plus other minor edits.

Anyone have further comments on this?