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" Since the only regular predator of the Sowverms are the Regalian Fossorundis that care for them, alongside the fact they are regularly fed high nutrient-meals, Sowverms breed extremely quickly and produce a lot of offspring."

The phrasing of this could be different. The way I read it it seems as though to suggest that the lack of diverse predation resulted in high reproductive rates, as opposed to the high predation of a single predator selecting for fast breeding.



I really like this colony dependent organism

This post has been edited by colddigger: Oct 14 2022, 03:46 PM

QUOTE (colddigger @ Oct 14 2022, 07:46 PM)

" Since the only regular predator of the Sowverms are the Regalian Fossorundis that care for them, alongside the fact they are regularly fed high nutrient-meals, Sowverms breed extremely quickly and produce a lot of offspring." The phrasing of this could be different. The way I read it it seems as though to suggest that the lack of diverse predation resulted in high reproductive rates, as opposed to the high predation of a single predator selecting for fast breeding. I really like this colony dependent organism

Hm, how could i change the phrasing then?

" Since the only regular predator of the Sowverms are the Regalian Fossorundis that care for them, alongside the fact they are regularly fed high nutrient-meals, Sowverms breed extremely quickly and produce a lot of offspring."

How about:

"Like most of their kin, Sowverms are rapid breeders which produce large numbers of offspring. While in most vermees the vast majority of these offspring would be preyed upon by a wide variety of predators and thus have their populations kept in check, this is not the case for Sowverms. Under the watchful guardianship of their shephards, the Regalian Fossorundis, the Sowverms are able to flourish in large numbers whose growth is only further fueled by the nutrient-rich meals which they are provided. While their stewards due cull their throngs from time to time in order to both fill their bellies and stock their larders for their own offspring, this relationship has nonetheless proven a major boon Sowverms, who have grown quite populous as of late."

With few predators to control their numbers, with the key exception being the Regalian Fossorundis who tend to and ultimately farm them,

What are the Regalian Fossorundis? I can’t find that on the wiki

QUOTE (Nergali @ Oct 15 2022, 10:28 PM)

" Since the only regular predator of the Sowverms are the Regalian Fossorundis that care for them, alongside the fact they are regularly fed high nutrient-meals, Sowverms breed extremely quickly and produce a lot of offspring." How about: "Like most of their kin, Sowverms are rapid breeders which produce large numbers of offspring. While in most vermees the vast majority of these offspring would be preyed upon by a wide variety of predators and thus have their populations kept in check, this is not the case for Sowverms. Under the watchful guardianship of their shephards, the Regalian Fossorundis, the Sowverms are able to flourish in large numbers whose growth is only further fueled by the nutrient-rich meals which they are provided. While their stewards due cull their throngs from time to time in order to both fill their bellies and stock their larders for their own offspring, this relationship has nonetheless proven a major boon Sowverms, who have grown quite populous as of late." With few predators to control their numbers, with the key exception being the Regalian Fossorundis who tend to and ultimately farm them,

Alright, made the change\, how does it look?

I would LOVE to see some art depicting both the Fossorundi and Sowverm together... but that's neither here nor there

Approval Checklist:

Art:

Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown?: y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?:

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:
External?:
Internal?:
Behavioral/Mental?: domestication by another fauna
Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed? (If yes, list why): possibly

Habitat:
Type?: 3
Flavor?: 2
Connected?: y
Wildcard?: n

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Within range?: y
Exception?: n

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Transition Rule?: n
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved;

Agreed