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Very elaborate description that should actually be helpful with making any future descendants of this... speaking of which, I do like how this is a descendant of the Spoisoreth.

However, "One chance seen to the shell is it turning from dark green to brown"

Should be "One change seen to the shell is it turning from dark green to yellow-brown".

QUOTE (TheBigDeepCheatsy @ Sep 12 2022, 02:31 AM)

Very elaborate description that should actually be helpful with making any future descendants of this... speaking of which, I do like how this is a descendant of the Spoisoreth. However, "One chance seen to the shell is it turning from dark green to brown" Should be "One change seen to the shell is it turning from dark green to yellow-brown".

Made the grammatical change

I'm kind of curious if the outline is able to be emphasized more for better defining the swirl growth under the seabed.

This post has been edited by colddigger: Oct 8 2022, 12:55 PM

Would the support not be its exoskeleton?

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Dec 15 2022, 02:49 PM)

Would the support not be its exoskeleton?

Do they have one? I don't really want to jump to conclusions on what the support of this is in case im wrong. Is this the only thing holding this back?

Well their ancestors list them as having hardened shells

Could it simply say shell, and what the shell is made of rather than exoskeleton?

I suppose exoskeleton (shell)

could also work, with listing what it's made of.

This post has been edited by colddigger: Jan 11 2023, 07:43 PM

@OviraptorFan, have you seen the above?

also grammar check ig

"helping to anchor it in the sediment and thus make it harder" make should be making

"the plates being made of the same material as their shell" its not their

"hopefully snatching it and piercing its hide with their retractable fangs" its not their

"they will mature in a small version" into not in

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Jan 28 2023, 05:06 PM)

@OviraptorFan, have you seen the above?

I have, but I still don't really want to jump to conclusions on what the structure of the shell is. So I was actually thinking about contacting rhodix and contacting him about this

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ Jan 28 2023, 03:26 PM)

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Jan 28 2023, 05:06 PM) @OviraptorFan, have you seen the above? I have, but I still don't really want to jump to conclusions on what the structure of the shell is. So I was actually thinking about contacting rhodix and contacting him about this

Just leave it blank for now. I remember how slow rhodix can be to reply and we can't leave it pending for ages.

Please fix the grammatical issues I listed, then I'll do the approval checklist.

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Jan 29 2023, 02:06 PM)

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ Jan 28 2023, 03:26 PM) QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Jan 28 2023, 05:06 PM) @OviraptorFan, have you seen the above? I have, but I still don't really want to jump to conclusions on what the structure of the shell is. So I was actually thinking about contacting rhodix and contacting him about this Just leave it blank for now. I remember how slow rhodix can be to reply and we can't leave it pending for ages. Please fix the grammatical issues I listed, then I'll do the approval checklist.

Alright, I can do the grammatical edits this evening.

Alright, the edits have been made!

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown?: y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?: y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:

• External?: Light sensors, coloration
• Internal?: Sexual reproduction,
• Behavioral/Mental?:

Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: n

Habitat:
Type?: 3/3 (temperate, subtropical, and tropical)
Flavor?: 1/3 (coast)
Connected?: y
Wildcard?: n/a

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?: n/a

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: n/a
Does It Fit Habitat?: n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: y (but actually listed)
Transition Rule?: n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: n/a
Does It Fit Habitat?: n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: y (elaborated)
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: sexual now
Other?: n/a

Description:
Length?: y
Capitalized correctly?: y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?: n/a

Status: Approved