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Keep in mind that it probably wouldn’t be able to walk very well with hooves that pointy, but since they sort of resemble klipspringer hooves, I’m going to presume they still can walk. This isn’t a significant issue because they seem to spend most of their time aloft, and are probably much lighter than they look anyway. This may be more of an issue for the chicks, if the chicks are like their ancestor’s and cannot fly.

The easiest solution is that the hooves on chicks naturally wear away on rocks or tree bark as they walk, keeping them squarish, whereas adults’ hooves get pointy because they rarely use them to walk on land and so don’t wear them down. Having such pointy hooves could make it harder to pole-vault up into the air, which is a particular issue when feeding young, but if they nest on top of tree branches or on top of rocky cliffs on islands, they could easily fall off and fly that way. If they glide by their young and drop or regurgitate food, they wouldn’t even need to land, but this is an odder solution.

Its jaws don’t seem to have any cutting flanges. With that being said, it easily could have flanges too small to see at this resolution, much like how some ducks have ridges along the edges of the bill that help in catching slippery fish.

It would help to make the eyestrain underneath the jaws a little more conspicuous, if the eyes are meant to wrap around the jaws. At first glance, it seems to have significantly fewer eyestrils than its ancestor, which is not impossible, but is worth noting.

Made adjustments to the hooves (not as pointy)
& Added cutting flanges to the jaws.

I don't think I noticed anything particularly off about this submission if anyone wants to do a review on it

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown?: y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?: y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:

• External?: Longer, narrower wings and other soaring adaptations; food pouch; oil for feathers; wide jaw splay
• Internal?: Omnivorous diet
• Behavioral/Mental?: Gifting to mates

Are Changes Realistic?: Y, however I feel that the jaw splay should be explained more. As an ophrey, it depends on a strong bite to kill prey, as it has no other structures that can be used for that; a wide gape would affect its jaw strength. Is it compensating in some way?
New Genus Needed?: already done

Habitat:
Type?: 3/3
Flavor?: 3/3
Connected?: N - How does it skip the beaches? Also, how did it get into the northern hemisphere?
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?: n/a

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Transition Rule?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Description:
Length?: kinda short but acceptable
Capitalized correctly?: y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?: n/a

Status: Pending - see highlighted issues

With the removal of plains and addition of beaches, this could be salvaged as a plausible descendant of coastwoodufo, which is a slightly smaller but very similar ophrey species that's already coastal and lives in the north Darwin subtropics (which border the temperate regions).

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Mar 28 2023, 10:09 PM)

With the removal of plains and addition of beaches, this could be salvaged as a plausible descendant of coastwoodufo, which is a slightly smaller but very similar ophrey species that's already coastal and lives in the north Darwin subtropics (which border the temperate regions).

Switched Plains to Beaches.
And changed to correct ancestor.
And since the jaw thing wasn’t going to work, removed it

This post has been edited by HethrJarrod: Mar 28 2023, 07:47 PM

The atmosphere should not be included when an organism isn't part of the sky ecology (this is just hunting stuff in the biomes it flies over)

You say it's only in temperate and subpolar, but you listed polar biomes too.

Soma temperate mangal is listed twice.

Coolsteph temperate beach is listed twice.

The range is not one solid piece on the map.

(my being hard on the submission is not disapproval of the concept - I actually have an idea for a descendant)

With everything fixed, I am changing this to approved.