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Hm.

That could use an elaboration,

I took it as stating that it was handed back to the mother OR passed along to others depending on the social arrangment in an outcrop.

But the sentence is clunky in that part, could be broken up into a couple sentences instead.

Possibly just adding

"leaving out only its respiratory spiracles, afterwhich it makes its way back to its mother's neck"

But this still may need to be elaborated on, maybe that the mother sticks around.

Fixed

I think that's pretty good, better clarity on what's happening.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y, though it is a little faint, it's the clouds.
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:
External?:smaller proboscis girth, webbed feet, rounder streamlined "head", snapping style tusks like bobbit worm, extreme male neoteny due to fast selection via new repropductive habit
Internal?: air layers trapped in lower portion of shell, more short fast action muscles in neck
Behavioral/Mental?: now actively swimmings rather than stalks about the shoreline, rarely lifts its probscis/head other than for particularly interesting things, collapse of harem style breeding
Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: Y, should not be in same genus as Bobbysoxer

Habitat:
Type?: 2
Flavor?: 3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Replaced
Other?: N/A

Opinion: Pending, change the genus and it's approved

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Feb 20 2023, 04:12 PM)

Pending, change the genus and it's approved

Fixed (to Lapiratis)

edit: just to make sure, they are only replaced within the range.
Last time I checked the eco page, after the bobbysoxer's and rockruiser's range-replacement, there should still be a last surviving population of OG rockshorians around Austin bay.
(Just in case anyones wants to make an Austin rockshorian)

This post has been edited by Jarlaxle: Feb 20 2023, 03:02 PM