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The wording might be a bit too meta in places.

Third paragraph has capiri misspelled a couple times

QUOTE (colddigger @ Jan 30 2023, 07:55 PM)

Third paragraph has capiri misspelled a couple times

Darn autocorrect.

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Jan 30 2023, 07:30 PM)

The wording might be a bit too meta in places.

Which parts should I specifically edit? I want to keep in the ghost lineage and fossil stuff at least, since I'm explaining why its existence went unaddressed.

I really like this guy!

My suggestion would be modifying this scentence.

"Its favorite food is the yanisflora, which its ancestors also ate, but it will also eat other leafy flora in its environment."

Perhaps it could look more like this?

"While yanisflora are a prominent part of the organism's diet, just as they were in their ancestor, the Mystery Capiri will also feed upon other leafy vegetation found in its range."

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Jan 30 2023, 06:08 PM

calling it its favorite is more fun wording though

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Jan 30 2023, 10:10 PM)

calling it its favorite is more fun wording though

Well 1g1 did say the description might be too meta, so this was a suggestion to slightly alleviate that....

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Jan 30 2023, 06:15 PM

I assumed that was about how it describes the recording of its extinction

I vote in favor of keeping the word favorite because capiris need that.

On the wiki, the Migrating Capispine is listed as extinct. Was it marked as extinct erroneously, because its habitat wasn't actually lost?

I think "favorite food" is reasonably formal.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jan 30 2023, 11:48 PM)

On the wiki, the Migrating Capispine is listed as extinct. Was it marked as extinct erroneously, because its habitat wasn't actually lost? I think "favorite food" is reasonably formal.

Just not updated yet. It's an indirect resurrection from one of the retro species, and the means by which it survived are also described here in mystery capiri.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Color changing
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: Dancing

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: Done

Habitat:
Type?: 2/3
Flavor?: 2/3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Transition Rule?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?:Good
Capitalized correctly?:Yes
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Replaced
Other?: N/A

Opinion: Approved]