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It's important to note pirate waxfaces can't really tell the difference between a spear and a less effective strip of wood; they're not as smart as shrogs. It's realistic that they might steal and use a spear, though. (I have a descendant of it in mind with that as its gimmick)

This submission is now complete. Is there any feedback?

I like the design a lot, it's like an adorably chubby, shell-less turtle. The one suggestion I'd make is combine the first few sentences, since it seems rather awkward that they appear to be 1 to 2 sentence long paragraphs. Alternatively, perhaps make them longer.

"As they are nocturnal and Seashrogs diurnal"

Should this be "As they are nocturnal and Seashrogs are diurnal"?

As for whether or not Twinkiiros and/or Twinkorals are able to survive on the driftwood islands, they should be fine, especially the former, since all that decay should in fact help facilitate their growth, especially since it would be save to assume several species would adapt to living along their submerged shorelines.

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Also, a heads up, but the Prime Specimen contest has been extended to June 12th. That means everyone has more time to work on their submission(s).

I decided to give it some Driftwood Islands details. They probably wouldn't find it as easy to colonize as for smaller, more common seafaring shrew-spread organisms, so I mentioned they were rare.

I also decided to justify introducing the Pirate Waxface to the Driftwood Islands. I'm surprised they weren't there already.

I don't think an adult pirate waxface can survive full-time in the driftwood islands that easily. Normally, beach-dwelling populations travel along the beach in search of seafaring shrews to eat. Individual driftwood islands are often very small, however, meaning there is less coastline and less chance of encountering something to eat, not to mention they themselves are moving as well. Further, while pirate waxfaces have the mechanisms to island hop, their method is based around the expectation of finding food when they cross water. The driftwood islands would be quite confusing to them.

Would you suggest I mention Pirate Waxfaces are helped in arriving on the islands by the Gentonnas, but haven't managed to colonize it for the reasons you've stated and so don't have permanent populations?

Okay, so I noticed that this only has generation 164 instead of "Generation 164A".

Also for support it should look like this.

Support: Endoskeleton (Bone)

The Generation information has been corrected.

Generation 164 A isn't a requirement

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Jun 10 2021, 04:02 PM)

Generation 164 A isn't a requirement

Hydro made the inclusion of A or B a requirement before Alpha was even revived.

I updated the description to mention that, although Gentonnas help Pirate Waxfaces survive the trip and arrive on the Driftwood Islands, they're doomed on arrival.