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Oh, that's beautiful art...but you really ought to put submissions as undeveloped as these in another place. It doesn't seem complete enough to justify taking up a work-in-progress slot. The image needs a little processing, and the template has only three filled lines.

I believe there's a rule that you can only post an incomplete submission twice per generation, yeah. It's not a hard auto-reject rule if you're prompt, but please keep it in mind.

What else is there to say about it

Make sure to capitalize the stuff in the template.

There's also an overly large space between the template and description.
Please do some image-processing to get rid of the paper background. The patchy lighting and texturing is distracting, like including the default black background for a Sculptris model.

"flora, during" There should be an "and" before "during".
"body weight, their" The comma should be a period. "mature height an" Right now, the sentence sounds breathless. It would be much improved by adding a comma after "mature height".

"Their segmented body". If you're not talking about multiple individuals (e.g., a herd), as a general rule, use "it".

There is no rule against having a paper background and I do not personally think this is distracting. The art contrasts well enough with it.

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"They" was consistently used in the description as reference to the species population.
I can change that but I don't understand the need for the change.

This post has been edited by colddigger: Oct 14 2021, 09:20 AM

For something called "Dune", it's interesting how it doesn't live in any of the dune biomes.

Most oceanic beaches I've been to have dunes making up their upper portion.
It seems to either be dunes or cliffs.

Has their breeding style changed at all?

I figured it wouldn't be different, but if you think there should be more emphasis on seedlings rooting straight into the ground then I can add that.

"their taproot is quite long"
Do they have one taproot, collectively? "Its taproot" is the clearest.

I do not like the white background.

I was thinking it would have a singular taproot for the stem cluster.

I will edit that.

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Oct 14 2021, 06:48 AM)

I believe there's a rule that you can only post an incomplete submission twice per generation, yeah. It's not a hard auto-reject rule if you're prompt, but please keep it in mind.

The rule rn is that you can in theory have as many as you want per gen, but can only have 1 active at a time. I'm acting on the honor rule that people won't abuse that.

Is this better?

There's some speckled artifacts not easily removed using the magic wand tool and paint bucket of GIMP, but it's subtle enough it might be fine.

Frankly, I think removing the grain from the background makes it distracting because it no longer matches the subject. Which is also against the rules.

The original image as posted is fine as-is.