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Are you sure stomata is correct for this fauna?

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Nov 16 2021, 01:58 PM)

Are you sure stomata is correct for this fauna?

Ah, thanks for pointing that out. I meant to put down spiracles, as lizardworms, one of their closest kin, have those, and I don't believe any other method has been mentioned in this lineage.

I didn't know these were still alive.
That's fun.

QUOTE (colddigger @ Nov 16 2021, 05:12 PM)

I didn't know these were still alive. That's fun.

They're basically restricted to one biome, Slarti Polar Riparian, along with all their symbiotes/parasites.

QUOTE (Nergali @ Nov 16 2021, 04:45 PM)

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Nov 16 2021, 01:58 PM) Are you sure stomata is correct for this fauna? Ah, thanks for pointing that out. I meant to put down spiracles, as lizardworms, one of their closest kin, have those, and I don't believe any other method has been mentioned in this lineage.

Saying "spiracles" is like saying "nostrils".

Probably better to wait for elaboration to be done before adding respiration.

Understood, will do.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?: Shrunk in size, burrowing, loss of obtaining nutrients from symbiont
External?: Y
Internal?: Y
Behavioral/Mental?: Y
Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: Y, reproductive change, symbiont relationship change

Habitat:
Type?: 1??
Flavor?: 3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: ...

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: N
Exception?: Y, climate pressure and symbiont pressure makes sense to drive this to become smaller fast

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Clarifying

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Transition Rule?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y, loss of symbiont food source

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Clarifying

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: clarifying

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: The words used for reproduction are the same as ancestor but the method of reproduction isn't quite the same, I'm not sure how to adjust this.

Description:
Length?: decent
Capitalized correctly?: Yes
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: Na

Opinion: Pending(why);

There are some fixes that need to be done.


"One another, gaging the size of both their partner"

Misspelling

"when the females is preparing to fertilize the eggs"

Plural or singular female?

"developing within the egg, leaching off some of the excess reserves "

I think it's actually the other form of leaching, leeching, that is meant, but look into that.

Ok, I made the edits, and clarified reproduction/support more.

This post has been edited by Nergali: Dec 20 2021, 02:07 PM