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"—" why the emdash?
"Gekkotan" is highly obscure jargon. I recommend "gecko-like".

"multitude ridges" Multitude of ridges.

Have the mammary glands disappeared entirely? It doesn't seem as if there would be a cost to vestigial structures.

I see it has a huge breadth of Carpozoan hosts. While many parasites are host-specific (e.g., elephant t ticks sheep keds), some, like black-legged ticks, hav a broad variety of hosts. Even black-legged ticks have preferred hosts, though. Is its list of hosts ranked in preference?

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"—" why the emdash?

It indicates abrupt insertions or parenthetical ones of more germane register than those in parentheses. Are you saying I should use the en-dash instead or reduce its usage?

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"Gekkotan" is highly obscure jargon. I recommend "gecko-like".

Perhaps, but I wanted to use higher-register language here, and it was perhaps influenced by a time I remember in the early days of the project when the usage of "-like" was frowned upon, influenced by the aversion to Earth-likeness at the time.

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Have the mammary glands disappeared entirely? It doesn't seem as if there would be a cost to vestigial structures.

As of this revision, they have, though vestigial, non-functioning mammary glands could remain if that's more reasonable.

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I see it has a huge breadth of Carpozoan hosts. While many parasites are host-specific (e.g., elephant t ticks sheep keds), some, like black-legged ticks, hav a broad variety of hosts. Even black-legged ticks have preferred hosts, though. Is its list of hosts ranked in preference?

Yes, sort of, with the mesotherms on the trailing end of the list. There is no order of preference in the endothermic hosts. It only targets medium-to-large hosts of any carpozoan endotherm or mesotherm. It avoids small hosts closer to its size.

You somehow succeeded in making it even more terrifying. Well done

Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?: Method of blood extraction, bigger feet with pads, ballooning stomach, larger eyes, better olfactory, heat pit in nose cleft, better developed young at birth capable of eating blood
External?: Yes
Internal?: Yes
Behavioral/Mental?: Yes
Are Changes Realistic?: Yes
New Genus Needed?: Yes, several sensory developments and offspring changes

Habitat:
Type?:
Flavor?:
Connected?:
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: N/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Yes, specification of bone
Other?: Might be good to specific kind of bone

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Yes
Transition Rule?: N/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/a

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/a
Other?:n/a

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Addition of hosts body heat is good, very clarifying

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Loss of milk in reproductive approach, makes sense as offspring are born capable of drinking blood

Description:
Length?: Decent
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: N

Opinion: pending, someone else do the biome stuff

This post has been edited by colddigger: Dec 18 2021, 02:27 PM