QUOTE (colddigger @ May 11 2023, 03:17 PM)

" This does not always work. " Change the word this to specifically State what action you are referring to, since you had added a little bit more to the end of the previous paragraph it no longer functions as a way of referring to what was stated in the previous paragraph. That's a pretty simple fix.

Changed to: This bursting, as a way to scare off predators, does not always work.

QUOTE (colddigger @ May 11 2023, 01:33 AM)

ah a classic looking gelatin an important thing when moving any life from water to land is prevention of dessication, as well as handling fresher water, you listed darwin plains as a habitat which is a pretty hefty thing without elaboration. I would suggest mentioning that they are able to survive when rolling about waterways, soaking up the liquid as they pass through. But having a tendency of drying out and whithering away in regions where they happen to not roll into water soon enough. Also would consider such colonies rare compared to the seaside populations, likely prone to a bit of tissue rupture in heavy rains due to excessive water absorption.

Elaborated the description per suggestions. (in blue)

Expanded the description a little bit.

Phenagouti

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown? y:
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?:

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:

• External?: Longer legs, longer body, longer neck, smaller ears, loss of shield,
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?:

Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: n/a

Habitat:
Type?: Temperate, Subpolar
Flavor?: Woodland
Connected to Ancestor?: y
Contiguous?: yes
Wildcard?: n

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does it Fit Lifestyle?: y
Does It Fit Size?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Transition Rule?: n
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Does it Fit Size?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: short
Capitalized correctly?: yes, afaik
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

Got the genus name.
And fixed the it/they sentence you pointed out.

QUOTE (colddigger @ May 10 2023, 12:47 AM)

But the Marchess is a born caste isn't it? How are they made? Or is it an individual dominance over the colony, not specifically due to bein born into the role but rather by taking it?

It’s a numbers thing. Since weight, etc. is so important, they know exactly how many are on a cloud. But still…. Added detail about what happens when a Marchessa dies unexpectedly.

QUOTE (colddigger @ May 8 2023, 11:35 PM)

Okay edited in, can you double check the map that it still is contiguous?

yep it is.

Changed to approved.

Kernel Cornucopia

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown? y:
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?:

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:

• External?: Bigger
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?:Leaves are shed

Are Changes Realistic?: yes
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: Temperate
Flavor?: Mixed Scrub, Woodland, Volcanic
Connected to Ancestor?: y
Contiguous?: yes
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does it Fit Lifestyle?: y
Does It Fit Size?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Does it Fit Size?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: long
Capitalized correctly?: yes, afaik
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:


Opinion: Approved

Fieldzeug

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown? y:
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?:

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:

• External?: Numerous different forms
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: Biennial, Only releases male spores

Are Changes Realistic?: yes
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: genus
Flavor?: genus
Connected to Ancestor?: y
Contiguous?: yes
Wildcard?: GENUS

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does it Fit Lifestyle?: y
Does It Fit Size?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Does it Fit Size?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: If you wanted you could probably list it as Puffy Spores (Male)
Other?:

Description:
Length?: medium
Capitalized correctly?: yes, afaik
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

Soripredator

SIZE=4]Approval Checklist:[/SIZE]
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown? y:
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?:

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:

• External?: Bigger
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: Sneaky

Are Changes Realistic?: yes
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: Temperate, Subpolar
Flavor?: Woodland, Mixed Scrub
Connected to Ancestor?:
Contiguous?: yes
Wildcard?: n

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?: n

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does it Fit Lifestyle?: y
Does It Fit Size?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Transition Rule?: n
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Does it Fit Size?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: medium
Capitalized correctly?: yes, afaik
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?: Needs a paragraph break at the end for editing purposes.

Opinion: Pending

why: Needs a paragraph "---" break at the end of the description.

Anyone wanna make any comments before I go over it?

I like it. Can’t immediately see anything obviously incorrect. Will look more in depth with a review.

QUOTE (Disgustedorite)

A sauceback with a broken neck cannot see or move its mouth and therefore cannot feed itself, and will starve. In some cases a pack might still be able to take care of it, but without the ability to swallow on its own, it will still struggle to eat.

Is the only reason I’m asking..

added supplemental image

Barlowe Specter

SIZE=4]Approval Checklist:[/SIZE]
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown? y:
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?:

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:

• External?: Cup eyes
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: Different living conditions, expanded diet

Are Changes Realistic?: yes
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: Tropical, Subtropical
Flavor?: Rainforest, Beach, Woodland
Connected to Ancestor?: yes
Contiguous?: yes
Wildcard?: n/a

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Within range?: y
Exception?: n

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does it Fit Lifestyle?: y
Does It Fit Size?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Does it Fit Size?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: medium
Capitalized correctly?: yes, afaik
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Apr 29 2023, 05:30 PM)

that one background example is difficult to visually connect to the other two that have their wings folded, Can a vinelike one without its wings out like that also be depicted?

I’m not really sure what you mean by “without its wings out”.
The Ivy like ones are more like the Ivy Thermoworm.

I think the wings are heavy to not have a wings “up” position.

It’s a rat?

I like it. Can find anything glaringly wrong with it. Will look in depth later.

I’m inspired to make my own Sorite.

Is this a wildcard submission... It seems to have 4 habitat flavors

Shrockal

SIZE=4]Approval Checklist:[/SIZE]
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown? y:
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?:

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:

• External?: largely bipedal
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: Changes in diet, Mane signaling

Are Changes Realistic?: yes
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: Montane, Temperate
Flavor?: Mixed Scrub, Woodland, Arid
Connected to Ancestor?: yes
Contiguous?: yes
Wildcard?: no

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does it Fit Lifestyle?: y
Does It Fit Size?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: no
Transition Rule?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Does it Fit Size?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: yes
Does It Fit Habitat?: yes
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: medium
Capitalized correctly?: yes, afaik
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

QUOTE (kopout @ May 5 2023, 09:17 PM)

They don't keep their brains in their head. Even if they did some real life animals who do have their brains in their head use their head as a weapon. They also have a threat display to discourage things so they don't always have to go through with the head smash.

A broken neck is still gonna be almost a death sentence

Don't they get hurt like really badly using their head as a weapon?

Changed to Pending

QUOTE (colddigger @ May 5 2023, 12:33 AM)

The size in the template needs a reference dimension, tall, wide, long etc. I would also add (including/excluding bristles) depending on how you've decided to measure them. "When a Cloudkeeper Krugg dies, its body will be used to expand the size of the Nimbus. " may want to say nimbus cloud, right? Unless I'm misunderstanding here. Given they need to be very lightweight I suspect the marchess would need to produce an egg only occasionally. Otherwise having multiple eggs and enlarged ovaries would put a notable dense spot in the nimbus cloud. Having the egg hatch quickly is good, no need to figure out what to do with it beforehand. I'm curious if the caste system here is age based, or selected at birth. Honeybees are age based, ants are "selected at birth". Or rather, does an individual change caste over time, or does it get stuck with one job its whole life. How are new marchesses made? " They constantly keep the bristles clean by grooming each other." rather than "they" I suggest putting the name of your species, otherwise based off the previous sentence it sounds like the dead krugg and the nimbus clean each other. "...Terran Ant Queen. When a Cloudkeeper dies, its body will be used to expand the Nimbus Cloud in which the Cloudkeeper March resides." I'm not sure if this sentence is needed since it was already stated before, though if there was more information to add to the concept it could work as a restatement.

Because of their few numbers, it’s not really a caste-thing. More of a task-at-hand thing.

Added “long”

And hopefully fixed some it/them issues