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" They are hermaphrodites," That comma should be a colon.
"during that period": That sentence is breathless, so I recommend a comma there.
"spore producing": "Spore-producing".

Correction: scrublands.
Do they feed on ripe Lurspire fruit on the tree, fallen Lurspire fruit, or decaying Lurspire fruit?

The first two. As I understand it Lurspire fruit is a gelatinous mass rather than a solid "fruit"so its not all that different that Creab jelly in that way

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?: Eggs and diet and body ratios
External?: Y
Internal?: N
Behavioral/Mental?: Y
Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: N

Habitat:
Type?: 1
Flavor?: 3
Connected?: Y?
Wildcard?: N?

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: N
Exception?: N/a

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Clarifying

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Transition Rule?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/a
Other?: n/a

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/a
Other?: N/a

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/a
Other?: Eggs are temperature dependent for hatching

Description:
Length?: Okay
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: Some minor clean up needed

Opinion: Pending(why)


"and has spread the woodlands and scrublands"

Missing word