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What lovely art. It has a lot of personality.

What's the shape of its leaf? Is it lying flat, with a twist at the start, or is it like a Dimetrodon sail?

"Much like its ancestor[...]scrounging for food." That's a long, breathless sentence.
"Their long tongue" That doesn't make sense; it's using the singular 'they'.
"culminated into": "culminated with" or "culminated in".

"It can often direct[...]" This sentence needs more commas.
"Most of the other creatures": Are you only counting large fauna, or should it be presumed bug-like fauna are also deaf?

"thrive on Fermi": that needs a comma.

I have to wonder how cold Fermi Tundra must be during the winter. It's an important detail to consider, since many fairly large Fermi fauna are endotherms with no integument. Knowing the conditions of Fermi Tundra would make it easier to migrate or evolve out organisms from Fermi Polar environments. Rackettoons having no integument, and also a long, skinny-looking neck, head, tail and long-skinny-looking legs and and a vulnerable-seeming sail would make them vulnerable to the cold. I'm not sure whether hibernation and hibernation alone would be a sufficient adaptation.

Is its coloration an adaptation for purple flora, or a mixture of black and purple environments?

I noiced it has an indigo stripe on its face and green stripes on its tail. Are those display structures, or predator-distraction structures?

Are you sure it eats Umbrosas? They have a "rock-hard shell" and are 2 meters wide. I don't think Rackettoons have a mouth well-suited to gnaw on Umbrosas. Umbrosas probably wouldn't be as tough, and certainly not as large, when they are very young, so that might be suitable.

Does it favor particular foods over others? With so many foods and habitats, it's hard to tell what are its preferred foods, unless it's "small foods", as the description may vaguely suggest.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Dec 22 2021, 03:10 PM)

What lovely art. It has a lot of personality. What's the shape of its leaf? Is it lying flat, with a twist at the start, or is it like a Dimetrodon sail? "Much like its ancestor[...]scrounging for food." That's a long, breathless sentence. "Their long tongue" That doesn't make sense; it's using the singular 'they'. "culminated into": "culminated with" or "culminated in". "It can often direct[...]" This sentence needs more commas. "Most of the other creatures": Are you only counting large fauna, or should it be presumed bug-like fauna are also deaf? "thrive on Fermi": that needs a comma. I have to wonder how cold Fermi Tundra must be during the winter. It's an important detail to consider, since many fairly large Fermi fauna are endotherms with no integument. Knowing the conditions of Fermi Tundra would make it easier to migrate or evolve out organisms from Fermi Polar environments. Rackettoons having no integument, and also a long, skinny-looking neck, head, tail and long-skinny-looking legs and and a vulnerable-seeming sail would make them vulnerable to the cold. I'm not sure whether hibernation and hibernation alone would be a sufficient adaptation. Is its coloration an adaptation for purple flora, or a mixture of black and purple environments? I noiced it has an indigo stripe on its face and green stripes on its tail. Are those display structures, or predator-distraction structures? Are you sure it eats Umbrosas? They have a "rock-hard shell" and are 2 meters wide. I don't think Rackettoons have a mouth well-suited to gnaw on Umbrosas. Umbrosas probably wouldn't be as tough, and certainly not as large, when they are very young, so that might be suitable. Does it favor particular foods over others? With so many foods and habitats, it's hard to tell what are its preferred foods, unless it's "small foods", as the description may vaguely suggest.

The leaf is actually that of its ancestors such as the Ringtailed Ketter and Pudgy Ketter, its actually jointed so it can be raised or lowered. The individual in this picture has it lying flat.

Made the edits in grammar.

If thats the case, how should It be able to tolerate the cold?

Regarding the coloration, these colors are all derived from the colors of its ancestor(I try to do that with all of my species), with the coloration being adapted to better camouflage it with with the black soil that is prevalent in their environment. The stripes on the tail are mainly used for display but mothers will also use it as a distraction for predators when trying to lure them away from their offspring.

Rackettoons don't really have a preference, as they will eat a wide range of things are will try anything at least once.

Also, do ketters have jointed wood like nodents, or unjointed wood like nobits?

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Dec 22 2021, 01:04 PM

It's not drawn as if it is entirely flat: it looks slightly tilted, like a blanket laid on top of a bed with a triangular prism underneath it on one side.

It's customary to split the paragraphs with two taps of the enter key.

It's hard to tell how a naked, terrestrial, subarctic endothterm would behave, since there don't seem to be any contemporary wild examples. Armadillos are somewhat similar due to their sparse hair, although they do not have fat reserves and these do.

The easiest solution is to say they migrate in latitudes or habitats prior to winter's approach in the Fermi Tundra habitat. Alternatively, you could specify they live in packed burrows as they hibernate, sharing body heat, and they stuff their burrows with insulating material (e.g., shrog hair). Low-density snow, such as fresh snow, is an effective insulator, while dense, wet snow is not so good an insulator. Therefore, you could specify igloo-like principles of construction whereby they use low-density snow. The interior of an igloo can be 70 degrees (Fahrenheit) warmer than the outside, so, depending on the exact minimum temperatures of Fermi Tundra, that could be plenty to keep it above the freezing point (32 degrees Fahrenheit) and therefore not require antifreeze chemicals or similar high-cold-intensity adaptations.

More minor details include specifying it hibernates with its limbs, tail, and snout curled up, like how arctic foxes sleep with tails over their noses. A mother with young, depending on prone to freezing the young are (itself contingent on Fermi Tundra temperatures), might adjust the posture to share more warmth with her young. Perhaps a spot between her forelegs or hind legs could be like a brood patch in birds, and the young could press their vulnerable limbs or snouts against it for warmth.

Here is a leaf from their ancestor, sort of showing how they look. The leaf of my species has not changed at all.

Even its direct ancestor has this feature.

Added some spacing between paragraphs.

So wait, your saying they should pack their burrows and the burrows they end up using with foliage for insulation? What kinds of foliage in the area would best suit them for such a thing?

I assume you don't know whether Ketters have jointed wood or unjointed wood for endoskeletons?

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Dec 22 2021, 04:08 PM

Alright! I finished adding everything onto the submission!

For Fermi Tundra, Snapperky down or feathers, possibly Colony Stalks defense phytids (better than nothing), freshwater Chainswarmers and freshwater Swarmerweeds (like Neptune Balls seaweed insulation), and perhaps Brushrums for Fermi Temperate Beach (Fermi Brushrums don't occur in rivers due to "poor osmoregulation", suggesting they don't occur in freshwater). Unless chainswarmer and swarmerweed insulation is much warmer than I expect, the insulation pickings are slim there, but if the rest of the architecture and hibernation setup is good enough and Fermi Tundra isn't extremely cold (not lower than about -37 Fahrenheit) it would be sufficient for most of them to survive.

Fermi Temperate Beach:
(In addition to Chainswarmers, Swarmerweeds, and possibly Fermi Brushrums.)

Bladesnapper fuzz, Seashrog fur, Fuzzpalm fuzz, Kakonat fur, Fuzzweed fuzz/the whole Fuzzweed, Pirate Waxface feathers, and Fuzzpile fuzz are likely the best insulators. Kakonat fur might be the warmest option, at least among the things obtained without too much danger to itself. (Though an adult Kakonat is 25 cm, and this is 30 cm, so unless Kakonats shed in clumps or unless there's a dependable supply of corpses, it would still be difficult to get.)

Getting Fuzzweeds and Fuzzpile fuzz would be very easy and fairly effective.

Bonespire, Bonegrove, and Branching Bonespire leaves, gathered en masse might have some value, and it's possible dried Gourjorn shell pieces would be weak insulators, if only to hinder cold air or winds from getting to the organism.

I'd recommend Dockshrog fur and Hypnotizer Waxface feathers, too, but the protocol for updating descriptions to incorporate non-paired species of the same Generation outside a dietary context is unclear, and, in any case, incorporating those would mean those two would have to be approved first.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Dec 23 2021, 03:40 PM)

For Fermi Tundra, Snapperky down or feathers, possibly Colony Stalks defense phytids (better than nothing), freshwater Chainswarmers and freshwater Swarmerweeds (like Neptune Balls seaweed insulation), and perhaps Brushrums for Fermi Temperate Beach (Fermi Brushrums don't occur in rivers due to "poor osmoregulation", suggesting they don't occur in freshwater). Unless chainswarmer and swarmerweed insulation is much warmer than I expect, the insulation pickings are slim there, but if the rest of the architecture and hibernation setup is good enough and Fermi Tundra isn't extremely cold (not lower than about -37 Fahrenheit) it would be sufficient for most of them to survive. Fermi Temperate Beach: (In addition to Chainswarmers, Swarmerweeds, and possibly Fermi Brushrums.) Bladesnapper fuzz, Seashrog fur, Fuzzpalm fuzz, Kakonat fur, Fuzzweed fuzz/the whole Fuzzweed, Pirate Waxface feathers, and Fuzzpile fuzz are likely the best insulators. Kakonat fur might be the warmest option, at least among the things obtained without too much danger to itself. (Though an adult Kakonat is 25 cm, and this is 30 cm, so unless Kakonats shed in clumps or unless there's a dependable supply of corpses, it would still be difficult to get.) Getting Fuzzweeds and Fuzzpile fuzz would be very easy and fairly effective. Bonespire, Bonegrove, and Branching Bonespire leaves, gathered en masse might have some value, and it's possible dried Gourjorn shell pieces would be weak insulators, if only to hinder cold air or winds from getting to the organism. I'd recommend Dockshrog fur and Hypnotizer Waxface feathers, too, but the protocol for updating descriptions to incorporate non-paired species of the same Generation outside a dietary context is unclear, and, in any case, incorporating those would mean those two would have to be approved first.

What about on Fermi Polar Beach?

Fermi Polar Beach:

Global options: Chainswarmers, Swarmerweeds, possibly Fermi-specific species of Brushrums.

Probably most effective options: Beach Snapper down, Beach Piloroot leaf-fur, Pilonoroot leaf-fur, Fuzzy Beachballs, Talfuzz fuzz

Probably less effective: Dry Gelatin, Polarblades, Beach Colonystalks stalks, Segmented Carnofern leaves

Its name is similar to the previously-approved Velocitoon, but they are not even distantly related. For this reason, it would be good to change its name slightly.

It spreads so many species that using bullet-point lists and separating the description into different sections would aid organization. It could be simply the main details with transferred organisms afterward, or split into "Senses & General", "Cold Adaptations & Reproduction", and "Spread Organisms", or "Senses & General', "Cold Adaptations", "Reproduction" and "Spread Organisms".

Note that the previous suggestions of insulation in each habitat did not consider the things it had so freshly transferred to new habitats. Beach Piloroot, Talfuzz, and Fuzzy Beachballs are some of the more effective newly-spread insulation options.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Dec 25 2021, 03:47 PM)

Its name is similar to the previously-approved Velocitoon, but they are not even distantly related. For this reason, it would be good to change its name slightly. It spreads so many species that using bullet-point lists and separating the description into different sections would aid organization. It could be simply the main details with transferred organisms afterward, or split into "Senses & General", "Cold Adaptations & Reproduction", and "Spread Organisms", or "Senses & General', "Cold Adaptations", "Reproduction" and "Spread Organisms". Note that the previous suggestions of insulation in each habitat did not consider the things it had so freshly transferred to new habitats. Beach Piloroot, Talfuzz, and Fuzzy Beachballs are some of the more effective newly-spread insulation options.

Added in bits regarding insulation! Hopefully it works!

I do not plan to change the name, as it works on several different levels. First, it combines racket and toon(which partially references their mating rituals where they make a lot of noise and their dances could possibly be attributed to a cartoon character dancing). Secondly, it takes in elements of racoon and ketter, which both reflect their lifestyle and ancestry. The fact it sounds similar to Velocitoon is due to sheer coincidence.

I also added a few additional species to the species it has spread, I don't generally do sections within my submissions or do bulletlists. Im not sure if the latter is nessecary, but I can try to do the former one.

Sorry it took so long for me to respond, been a little busy with stuff.

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Jan 11 2022, 08:11 PM

"While a rackettoon usually does make their own burrows, ":"its own burrows".

"rackettoon if they remained active" You meant: "it".

"snapperkys": You meant: "Snapperkies."

"-whether made by themselves or used by something else-" That needs an emdash.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jan 12 2022, 12:17 AM)

"While a rackettoon usually does make their own burrows, ":"its own burrows". "rackettoon if they remained active" You meant: "it". "snapperkys": You meant: "Snapperkies." "-whether made by themselves or used by something else-" That needs an emdash.

Tried to do the grammar edits, do they look good?

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Darkened coloration
• Internal?: Thermal regulation
• Behavioral/Mental?:

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: N

Habitat:
Type?: 2/2
Flavor?: 3/3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: NA

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y
Exception?: NA

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Y

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Transition Rule?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Y

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: NA
Other?: NA

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: No (unlisted)
Other?: Too many species are spread, please whittle this down

Opinion: Pending(make the necessary changes)

I added the fact it is a split.

So wait, what do you mean too many species are being spread? Is it due to the Rackettoon spreading various flora directly through their waste, which in turn herbivores spread into new regions following the vegetation, and in turn predators following the herbivores?

If I am to whittle this down, where should I start? Should I start with the scavengers and carnivores?

Theoretically, if you quickly made a spore-spreader organism to be approved before this one, you could distribute the Fat Korystal, Dome Crystal, Polar Orbion, Fuzzy Beachballs, Sunleaf, and Retigroenx habitat-spreading to that organism, and consequently anything indirectly following those flora. That should cut down the number of species it indirectly spreads. (Spiny Wrigum, Climbing Korybug, Krugg, Billeka, and likely others.)