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I assume this is present on all of the subtropical beaches on Vonnegut, including the big volcanic island? If so, I'm wondering if this interacts with the Kurtback in any meaningful way given the harsher conditions than the temperate part of its range. Probably not, but it's something to think about.

QUOTE (Cube67 @ Aug 8 2022, 01:55 AM)

I assume this is present on all of the subtropical beaches on Vonnegut, including the big volcanic island? If so, I'm wondering if this interacts with the Kurtback in any meaningful way given the harsher conditions than the temperate part of its range. Probably not, but it's something to think about.

Oh actually, the big island has Vonnegut Subpolar Beach, not temperature beaches. As for if it would impact your sauceback, well your species to too small to be considered prey, nor does what your sauceback prey upon fit the bill of being prey for this snoa either. So they should be fine

Regarding the beach type on that island: I know, but you have the subpolar beach listed, too.

This post has been edited by Cube67: Aug 8 2022, 02:11 PM

@Coolsteph any chance you could do your usual comments on this?

Hahaha. Feed on Seashrogs. Feed! What joy: it has inspired a brief "Tyrannical Vonngona Seashrog-Eating Jingle". (If only I could convey audio here.)
On a more serious note, since it's customary to list food items in order of preference/volume in the overall diet, it would seem they have the greatest predation pressure on Sparkleshrogs. Perhaps that could cause interesting developments.

On my word processor, the description is two pages long. For something that big, I recommend splitting it into three or four sections.

"Overtime" This has occurred so frequently that I really must ask you to keep watch for this error before submitting your descriptions. If you make descriptions in a word processor, as I recommend, you might be able to mark "overtime" uniquely as an error. I've never used Grammarly for Sagan 4 before, but Grammarly did catch the "overtime" error and pronoun mismatches.
"crested": crest.
"ancestor although" This needs a comma between "ancestor" and "although".
"time since" This needs a comma in between the two words.
"consists of shrogs": Consisting of shrogs.

Grammarly caught several basic errors. As I'm using a free version of it, you could use it too without any cost. I recommend running the description through Grammarly to catch typos and pronoun mismatches and pasting it in the corrected version. Then I can provide a more thorough look without impulsively writing down grammar errors.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Sep 2 2022, 10:45 PM)

Hahaha. Feed on Seashrogs. Feed! What joy: it has inspired a brief "Tyrannical Vonngona Seashrog-Eating Jingle". (If only I could convey audio here.) On a more serious note, since it's customary to list food items in order of preference/volume in the overall diet, it would seem they have the greatest predation pressure on Sparkleshrogs. Perhaps that could cause interesting developments. On my word processor, the description is two pages long. For something that big, I recommend splitting it into three or four sections. "Overtime" This has occurred so frequently that I really must ask you to keep watch for this error before submitting your descriptions. If you make descriptions in a word processor, as I recommend, you might be able to mark "overtime" uniquely as an error. I've never used Grammarly for Sagan 4 before, but Grammarly did catch the "overtime" error and pronoun mismatches. "crested": crest. "ancestor although" This needs a comma between "ancestor" and "although". "time since" This needs a comma in between the two words. "consists of shrogs": Consisting of shrogs. Grammarly caught several basic errors. As I'm using a free version of it, you could use it too without any cost. I recommend running the description through Grammarly to catch typos and pronoun mismatches and pasting it in the corrected version. Then I can provide a more thorough look without impulsively writing down grammar errors.

Alright, i rearranged the diet list to better reflect what is probably the most common prey for this species of snoa. I also tried to fix as many of the grammatical errors I could find.

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Sep 2 2022, 08:53 PM

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name: Tyrannical Vonnegona
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: (Tyrannoardeus venustacristatus)
Creator?: OviraptorFan

Ancestor: Driftwood Dasher
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Larger in size, Larger inner toe-claw, Darker coloration, shorter bill, brightly colored crest,
• Internal?: Goes into state of torpor
• Behavioral/Mental?: Nomadic nature, swimming from island to island, having a pecking order

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why) Already taken care of

Habitat: Vonnegut Archipelago Temperate Beaches, Vonnegut Subpolar Beach, Vonnegut Temperate Woodland Archipelago, Vonnegut Bush Archipelago, Lemmings Temperate Coast (travel only), Nemo Subpolar Coast (travel only)
Type?: 3/3
Flavor?: 2/3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: No

Size: 5.6 meters
Same as Ancestor?: No, see External Changes
Within range?: Yes (In terms of insular evolution)
Exception?: No

Support: Endoskeleton (Jointed Wood)
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet: Carnivore, Scavenger
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration: Active (Lungs)
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation: Endotherm
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?: N/A

Reproduction: Sexual, Two Genders, Live Birth
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Quite reasonably long
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?:

Status: Approved

Will get to some of Dorite's next, juuuuust wanted to get this one done.