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" hunt for small game along but are always within eyeshot"

Along?

"these plents have wised up to the traps made by such shrogs and will scan the ground for any hints that something might be wrong while foraging. "

I'm not sure how smart these would have to be to achieve this behavior.

So they give their mothers cesarean section?

This post has been edited by colddigger: Aug 13 2022, 02:29 PM

QUOTE (colddigger @ Aug 13 2022, 06:23 PM)

" hunt for small game along but are always within eyeshot" Along? "these plents have wised up to the traps made by such shrogs and will scan the ground for any hints that something might be wrong while foraging. " I'm not sure how smart these would have to be to achieve this behavior. So they give their mothers cesarean section?

Fixed the typo

I think this species is fairly smart, though not as brainy as something like most shrogs

I guess?

"Over time". This is a common error in your submissions.
"This quickly leads to a chain reaction[...]" This sentence is too long, and so shoul be too split.
"thirty five" thirty-five.
"head on" head-on.
"since not many potential predators would not dare come close" There seem to be two "nots"

Calcification of wooden parts seems such a common, independently-occurring adaptation that there might be cause to make a wiki page on the phenomenon.

I wonder if its quick-clotting blood makes it resistant to bloodsuckers, or at least unappealing? Bloodbees were fond of plent blood, and got assimilated into the xenobees genus group, but it doesn't seem that the xenobees drink blood, just nectar and mucus. Xenowasps drink blood, but there's no mention of plent blood, which might be chemically different. This might be opportunity for a specialist Xenowasp/Xenobees descendant.

It's interesting to see a fauna with scars. This is the first time I've seen definite scars on official art, in fact. This adds a big worldbuilding detail that plents have green scars, regardless of skin color. (or at least heavily suggests that for related species)

Are there sufficient differences to justify its new genus? It's broadly similar to its ancestor in physiology, and doesn't diverge greatly compared to its relative, the Passarurso, which still has its ancestor's genus. Its calcified jaws and reproductive habits might be the biggest points to justify a new genus.

I ought to hurry up with my own terrorbeak descendant idea. So many submission ideas...

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Aug 14 2022, 01:08 PM)

"Over time". This is a common error in your submissions. "This quickly leads to a chain reaction[...]" This sentence is too long, and so shoul be too split. "thirty five" thirty-five. "head on" head-on. "since not many potential predators would not dare come close" There seem to be two "nots" Calcification of wooden parts seems such a common, independently-occurring adaptation that there might be cause to make a wiki page on the phenomenon. I wonder if its quick-clotting blood makes it resistant to bloodsuckers, or at least unappealing? Bloodbees were fond of plent blood, and got assimilated into the xenobees genus group, but it doesn't seem that the xenobees drink blood, just nectar and mucus. Xenowasps drink blood, but there's no mention of plent blood, which might be chemically different. This might be opportunity for a specialist Xenowasp/Xenobees descendant. It's interesting to see a fauna with scars. This is the first time I've seen definite scars on official art, in fact. This adds a big worldbuilding detail that plents have green scars, regardless of skin color. (or at least heavily suggests that for related species) Are there sufficient differences to justify its new genus? It's broadly similar to its ancestor in physiology, and doesn't diverge greatly compared to its relative, the Passarurso, which still has its ancestor's genus. Its calcified jaws and reproductive habits might be the biggest points to justify a new genus. I ought to hurry up with my own terrorbeak descendant idea. So many submission ideas...

do you mean as having them be "overtime" instead? If so I can fix that, like i did with the rest of the grammatical issues.

For sufficient differences to be a genus, I do think its indeed distinct due to the calcified bill and teeth and the fact young will tear their way out of their mother's throat. Its also distinct because of its fission-fusion social lifestyle and how that affects their hunting prowess.

Yes, I meant "overtime". Apparently I auto-corrected the very example provided.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Aug 14 2022, 09:41 PM)

Yes, I meant "overtime". Apparently I auto-corrected the very example provided.

Alright, fixed it

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name: Cicatrizargo
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: (Rigidirostrum violensortus)
Creator?: OviraptorFan

Ancestor: Terrorbeak
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Fully calcified teeth and beak and twice is ancestor's size
• Internal?: New method of birthing through its "throat", faster clotting, and stronger immune system
• Behavioral/Mental?: More social lifestyle, less aggressive towards one another, but more aggressive towards other predators, wizened up to Twineshrogs

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why) Already taken care of

Habitat: Raptor Tropical Rainforest, West Wallace Tropical Woodland, Dixon Subtropical Woodland, Dixon Subtropical Rainforest, Dixon Tropical Woodland
Type?: 2/3
Flavor?: 2/3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: NO!

Size: 2.8 m
Same as Ancestor?: No
Within range?: Yes
Exception?: No

Support: Endoskeleton (Jointed Wood)
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet: Carnivore
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration: Active (Lungs)
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation: Endotherm
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction: Sexual (Male and Female, Live Birth)
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Reasonably thorough
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: Wait until this evolves a perfected method of live birth....

Status: Approved