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yeah, I think it may be a little much to just have the copied description and nothing else. Perhaps add in more information about the species if you can?

It doesn't seem like too long of a copied section, but maybe vary the word order and the choice of words so that it's more of a paraphrase than a plagiarism.

This post has been edited by Cube67: Aug 15 2022, 06:23 AM

I've tweaked it

It has a fairly broad range. It could help boost the description if you specified its sunlight requirements, water requirements, and ideal soil type. Judging by its life history, it seems it thrives in the later stages of ecological succession. If fires are fairly common in some of its habitats, you could specify how it responds to fire. You could also add trivia in the form of sensitivities or hyperaccumulation of certain minerals, its smell or taste, and particular interactions with fauna species.

What happens when a prong snaps?

"It can support small fauna in its prongs, but it will snap if anything too large tries to climb."

Is it a matter of size, or rather heaviness? Is there an approximate size or weight that causes it to snap? For size in particular, that might help guide parameters on relatively large arboreal fauna.

What's the range of decades it takes to grow to full size? 20 years and 90 years, for example, are substantially different. Similarly, how many centuries can it usually live for?

The branch seems to decrease in thickness as it goes higher which probably makes that a complex question @Coolsteph

QUOTE (Cube67 @ Aug 15 2022, 06:01 PM)

The branch seems to decrease in thickness as it goes higher which probably makes that a complex question @Coolsteph

A range between the maximum thickness and thinnest thickness, then.
Just as an plausible anchoring value, a quick Google search suggests the biggest arboreal animal (still extant, anyway) is the Bornean orangutan. A male Bornean orangutan's maximum weight listed on a quick Google check is 220 pounds, and it's 1.25 to 1.5 m (4.1-5 ft.) tall.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown?: n/a
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?: y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?:
What changes?: helixed branches, notable trunk, smaller
[*]External?: y
[*]Internal?: n
[*]Behavioral/Mental?: n/a
[/LIST]Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: n, not very different

Habitat:
Type?: 2
Flavor?: 7?
Connected?: n?
Wildcard?: n/a

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?: n/a

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y, elaboration
Other?: n/a

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Transition Rule?: n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y, elaboration
Other?: n/a

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Description:
Length?: short
Capitalized correctly?: y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?: minor spacing issue, at least one period lacks a space following it.

Opinion: approved.

This post has been edited by colddigger: Sep 18 2022, 05:30 PM

this is in 3 types and 3 flavors. temperate/subtropical/montane and woodland/rainforest/shrubland.

perfect, then approved