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You'll need to capitalize things in the template. For example: "unknown" should be capitalized, as well as the respiration methods.

If the details ar different for different life stages, you should separate them using colons. (":")

If Ramul Subtropical Woodland Archipelago is the last habitat listed, you should remove the comma.

"Visospatial" should be "visuospatial". When in doubt over obscure terminology, try checking the spelling over a search engine.

"more analogues": More analogous.

"of their single eye" This is grammatically unclear. It's like the Grey Sisters of Greek Mythology: three old women with only a single eye between them, or "their single eye".

"vibration then travel": Vibration then travels.
"pressure sensitive": Pressure-sensitive.
"lignin rich": Lignin-rich.
"psudo-cartilage": pseudo-cartilage.
"hold their breath" this is grammatically unclear.

The musculature of its legs is unclear. If it's covered in a thick layer of fat, that might justify its baggy look, but given its subtropical environment, such thick fat on a probable ecothterm seems unlikely. Depending on the exact latitude, though, the winters might be cold enough for long enough for fat to be useful, at least on its extremities, although that does bring up the question of how it avoids cold damage to its trunk, too.
Its toes seem so deeply cleft as to appear like klipspringer hooves. Surely you can erase a little of the dividing line at the top?
What adaptations allow them to survive in both fresh and saltwater? Do they have salt-excreting glands? Kidneys adapted to filter out excess sodium?
How sensitive are these electrosensitive pits? It would surely be difficult to pick up on these signals outside of the water, so it would be worth specifying.

A diagram of the newly-developed ear would help in understanding the organism, but it's not required.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Aug 18 2022, 11:33 AM)

You'll need to capitalize things in the template. For example: "unknown" should be capitalized, as well as the respiration methods. If Ramul Subtropical Woodland Archipelago is the last habitat listed, you should remove the comma. "Visospatial" should be "visuospatial". When in doubt over obscure terminology, try checking the spelling over a search engine. "more analogues": More analogous. "vibration then travel": Vibration then travels. "pressure sensitive": Pressure-sensitive. "psudo-cartilage": pseudo-cartilage. How sensitive are these electrosensitive pits? It would surely be difficult to pick up on these signals outside of the water, so it would be worth specifying.

I think I've addressed all of these.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Aug 18 2022, 11:33 AM)

"lignin rich": Lignin-rich.

Are you sure? Its rich in both lignin and cellulose so I'd think either both or neither would have the -

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Aug 18 2022, 11:33 AM)

"of their single eye" This is grammatically unclear. It's like the Grey Sisters of Greek Mythology: three old women with only a single eye between them, or "their single eye". "hold their breath" this is grammatically unclear.

I'm not sure how to address these though, I would have thought it was obvious they don't all share a single eye and I don't know what I'd change "hold their breath" to.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Aug 18 2022, 11:33 AM)

The musculature of its legs is unclear. If it's covered in a thick layer of fat, that might justify its baggy look, but given its subtropical environment, such thick fat on a probable ecothterm seems unlikely. Depending on the exact latitude, though, the winters might be cold enough for long enough for fat to be useful, at least on its extremities, although that does bring up the question of how it avoids cold damage to its trunk, too.

I shrank down the legs a bit because they would have much in the way of winter.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Aug 18 2022, 11:33 AM)

Its toes seem so deeply cleft as to appear like klipspringer hooves. Surely you can erase a little of the dividing line at the top?

I suppose, though it is based on their ancestor and their ancestor's ancestor, both of which have toes that split at the "ankle".

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Aug 18 2022, 11:33 AM)

What adaptations allow them to survive in both fresh and saltwater? Do they have salt-excreting glands? Kidneys adapted to filter out excess sodium?

I imagine osmoregulation would be handled by the excretory system in the adults because they can no longer use their gills for it. Its not clear how the excretory system of scooters works though, I think its though the skin but I'm not sure. I don't want to assume they have kidneys when they don't or have them develop kidneys when they already had them so I left it vague.

This post has been edited by kopout: Aug 18 2022, 07:23 PM

I'll have to get back to the other things later.

"is not very effective in the air compared to in the water"
Judging by a quick Wikipedia check of electroreception and echidnas (one of the few terrestrial species that use electroreception), this ability might work if it's in contact with very moist soil, or very humid air. The most plausible way this could reliably occur at relatively long-range would be if an electrical signal of some sort was sent through the trunk or feet and into very moist soil. (I am assuming each Squaphaneer is not touching or very close to each other)

this is just that thing from The Eternal Cylinder

QUOTE (Cube67 @ Aug 19 2022, 10:27 AM)

this is just that thing from The Eternal Cylinder

For reference, the Trebhum species are the player-character species of the video game The Eternal Cylinder.



There are some similarities, but I wouldn't say it's just "that thing from The Eternal Cylinder". It's a bipedal, tailless blob with an eye and a long trunk, but there are substantial differences.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown?: y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?: y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:upright stance, ability to form depth perception via processing changing visual information, section of gill pouch now performs hearing, formation of brachiostegal lung from gills, transcutaneous respiration, limbs and gills parts stiffened with "pseudo-cartilage", adults can survive with salt or fresh water,electrosensitive pits at base of trunk
[*]External?: y
[*]Internal?: y
[*]Behavioral/Mental?: y
[/LIST]Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: y, lots of changes, including sensory and respiration

Habitat:
Type?: 1
Flavor?: 3
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?: n/a

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: in the description it is described that limbs and gills have developed a specific support, this ought to be listed i think.

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Transition Rule?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: juvenile diet is not listed, I think this change should not have happened as it results in ambiguity. Juvenile diet ought to be added back.

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: y, elaborated
Other?: n/a

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: n/a
Other?: n/a

Description:
Length?: good
Capitalized correctly?:y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: unknown
Other?: whether it replaces or splits from the ancestor should be elaborated. A basic description of the juvenile would be nice.

Opinion: pending, certain things such as diet needs to be worked on.
I'm curious about this method of hearing, I'm not sure it's really that much like tetrapod hearing, but I would need to look more carefully at the parts that go into that system. this doesn't mean it doesn't work, there are many other forms of hearing systems in the world.

I'm making a quick check on organism updates since I was away.

Can you trim the image to focus on the organism?

@kopout, this organism's approval is still pending. A response is needed to proceed.

The main post is now updated

cool

approved