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Pretty sure you can just say Iiteum in regards to it being on all land areas of Iiteum in the case of genus groups

That's a good point

Island chains do not have independent genus groups from the mainland.

Grammar Time!

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They're torso and tail gain most of their support from the sauce and cere , the latter of which has become more of a semi rigid sheet of chitin rather than remaining defined segments.

Their

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It's brain has shrunk considerably from similar selection.

its

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This allows its larvae to take advantage of much smaller sources of debris than it's ancestor, such as simply existing in layers of leaf litter. Lessening the burden of obtaining fuel for metamorphosis into adult forms the Leepi Meepi remains exothermic it's entire life.

Latter sentence is incomplete and should be joined to the former one with a comma. also its, not it's.

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The the head has become very small and narrow and elongate,

Accidental double "the". Also, I think you could replace the first "and" with a comma, given that this is a list.

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If they are Disturbed however

Why is disturbed capitalized?

Microlungs should be one word throughout.

Given that this is a genus group, shouldn't this group be referred to in the plural? Actually, what is the plural? Leepi Meepis?

Grammar Time over - this organism is very skrunkly.

My voice to text probably thought I was talking about the band disturbed

The plural is like sheep

Made the edits.

This post has been edited by colddigger: Aug 31 2022, 08:21 AM

QUOTE (colddigger @ Aug 31 2022, 02:42 AM)

If they are disturbed however they on their legs are capable of freaking them any particular direction many times their own body length, some even being able to throw themselves 20 cm away before very quickly leaping again.

Are you sure freaking is the right word to use here? I feel like “flinging” or “propelling” would be a more correct choice of word.

Solved thank you

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Aug 31 2022, 12:08 AM)

Island chains do not have independent genus groups from the mainland.

I'll remove iiteum

I don't know why you island chains couldn't have genus groups, but I find island dwarfism without an island as at least one of the habitats very confusing.

Also, let's imagine the life of a Hawaiian botanist trying to work with such a rule IRL… Just imagine her day, going out to the field, trying to classify and describe their findings, trying to write research papers, followed by the talks they have to go with their cardiologist, her stress medication regime, the sanity waning day by day, the nail biting and hair pulling, the helplessness of their partner reaching a breaking point leaving them to wake up in an empty home, imagine her reaching the point where she stops trying to take care of herself, dedicating herself entirely to her work, only to one day loose it all and receive that research grant cancelation email, using the last of her private funds to try and keep going, but there wasn't much… Is that what we want for her? If only there was something that could have being done, some change… Alas, island chains can't have their own genus groups.

This post has been edited by Jarlaxle: Nov 27 2022, 06:14 PM

I guess I could change the size

Though genus groups seem to tend toward being pretty loose and wild in sizes anyway.

Could just call it an exception too.

QUOTE (colddigger @ Nov 28 2022, 05:55 AM)

I guess I could change the size Though genus groups seem to tend toward being pretty loose and wild in sizes anyway. Could just call it an exception too.

I was going for the other direction - I meant you should be able to include Iiteum so that it makes sense. Including it in the description could also work.

Please don't change the size, we are one insular dwarfism skip away from 500um rotifer size sauceplankton! That's absolutely awesome in all ways but literal.

Ah I won't change the size, don't see much reason to since islands are in fact included.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?:

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Toes, shallow nostrils
• Internal?: Slight shift from skeletal to hyodrostatic support
• Behavioral/Mental?: Smaller brain

Are Changes Realistic?: Wonderfully so
New Genus Needed?: (If yes, list why)

Habitat:
Type?: all of 'em
Flavor?: all of 'em
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: maybe? not sure about genus rules

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y
Exception?: Island dwarfism

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Yish
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Rigid structures replaced with soft mesh
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Transition Rule?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Neotonic

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Neotonic

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: Medium-well
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: There's a misplaced empty space in "cere ,"

Opinion: Pending(Misplaced space);

Ah, the space was removed

A stamp of approval on the leepi meepi face since the displaced space was displaced and replaced by a backspace