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The only comment I have on this at the moment is that i recommend having the genus name be Crystallomuria (Crystal pickle) instead of just picklicus (which need to have the p captialized either way).

Fixed, thank you

It will take me a while to get through a description this big, so here's just a quick check: you'll need to capitalize the things in the template (e.g., "Sexual, Spores", "Photosynthesis") and remove the gap between the organism name and the rest of the template. You'll also need to put the scientific name in parentheses. While the multiple pictures do help break up the text, I recommend splitting the text into sections anyway.

As I mentioned when this was a work in progress, "Dr. Pickle" won't work as an organism name, and calling it a "pickle" is not recommended. Physicians' Gherkin is a reasonably close compromise that sounds like a real plant name (e.g., "Shepherd's Purse", "St. John's wort") and not too close to a very specific kind of real-world plant. You can also look at the suggested names I gave in the work-in-progress.

Can you enhance the contrast for the supplemental pictures?

You should also make sure you fix the "it's/its" errors.

I mean calling it doctor pickle makes sense if you're using doctor the way you would use cat if you called it cat pickle

This is a ridiculously detailed and impressive submission. Was it made specifically to help elaborate on how crystal flora work?

This post has been edited by Cube67: Sep 6 2022, 12:42 PM

Added capitalization, and changed spacing and fixed the it's I could find.

I will not adjust the images any more than they are, and I have taken a liking to this name so I'll keep it.

Sectioning off the description is a thought, I might do that, I'll have to see how it's divided.

Yes this is submission has a lot to do with making sense of the crystals. Not everything is supposed to be generic crystal though, the flabellum turris for example is unique to the doctor pickle.

Created sections in the description

the respiration needs to state if it's passive, active, or semi-active

added, thank you, it's passive.

Anyone else have anything to say?

Doctor Pickle needs to be lowercase in the description

Edited for names.

One thing I want to mention is I do make reference to the innards of the cellulosebane crystal, I had asked hydro his thoughts on it and he had said he's cool with such a thing. Since the only crystal of old to reference their innards suggested floors and hatches and such, I think it fits well.

I'm aware that disgustedorite wants the innards of her crystals to be more vertically stringy, I don't think it gets in the way of that, as I covered the ease and reason for such conversion in the crunchy Trufflegrass.

I still maintain that "Doctor Pickle" is a bad name. "Pickle" isn't even a kind of plant, but a processed food. It's like calling a fauna submission an Actor Steak.

There's plants and animals in real life with weirder names.

^ Yeah
Like the fish that’s just called the old glory

Lost In The Doctor Pickle Ward won best Naucean film of the eon, we can't change the name now it will ruin a cult classic.