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There's also those frogs called Mountain Chicken

While it shouldn't disqualify it, the only thing I would like added is to redescribe the ancestral cellulosebane fumigant and its effects on plent respiration in the defense section.

My reasoning is that while digging through the ancestral lineage of any species someone wants to work with is a necessary norm for almost all sagan 4 species, especially for those of us who like playing with anatomy and internal systems, here the description is so close to being an exception and standing fully on its own, providing 99% of a full course that lets anyone know everything they'd need to know about working with the species and future descendants, covering everything from its biomechanical systems to its evolutionary symbiotic origin and embryonic development. the only thing that requires prior sagan 4 knowledge - the remaining 1% - is the cellulosebane. I believe that if you covered that, you could practically give this to a complete newbie with no experience in sagan 4 and they'd still be able to understand how everything works and how to evolve from it.

Also, I love the animated mental image of its walls rippling throughout the day in response to light.

This post has been edited by Jarlaxle: Nov 26 2022, 07:47 AM

"It must be mentioned that these doctor pickle compounds, though less devastating when taking affect in comparison to their ancestral chemistry, are considerably more effective over all in their ability to defend their creator, being able to burn or irritate mucus membrane and wet tissue in general. The cellulosebane fumigant of old had acted in a more selective manner toward living things that relied on wood, or cellulose, destroying tissue to the point of death. Having been coupled with the gratuitous and unrestrained release of spore clouds the airborne weapon of the cellulosebane had forced a disastrous selection process on its environment, Plents, Purple Flora, and Black Flora were destroyed indiscriminately through entire biomes. This kind of action, coupled with such a specialized weapon, meant creating a world filled with hungry fauna completely unfazed by their clouds of doom and with nothing to eat but the crystals themselves.

The doctor pickle has side stepped such folly, as had been previously described, with application being more reserved in release, more general in what it can affect, and less devastating in results."


How's that?
I would just slap it under the original paragraph.

I've also edited some wrong words in the mitosis and reproduction sections.

QUOTE (colddigger @ Nov 26 2022, 07:27 PM)

"It must be mentioned that these doctor pickle compounds, though less devastating when taking affect in comparison to their ancestral chemistry, are considerably more effective over all in their ability to defend their creator, being able to burn or irritate mucus membrane and wet tissue in general. The cellulosebane fumigant of old had acted in a more selective manner toward living things that relied on wood, or cellulose, destroying tissue to the point of death. Having been coupled with the gratuitous and unrestrained release of spore clouds the airborne weapon of the cellulosebane had forced a disastrous selection process on its environment, Plents, Purple Flora, and Black Flora were destroyed indiscriminately through entire biomes. This kind of action, coupled with such a specialized weapon, meant creating a world filled with hungry fauna completely unfazed by their clouds of doom and with nothing to eat but the crystals themselves. The doctor pickle has side stepped such folly, as had been previously described, with application being more reserved in release, more general in what it can affect, and less devastating in results." How's that? I would just slap it under the original paragraph. I've also edited some wrong words in the mitosis and reproduction sections.

Excellent

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y


Ancestor:
Listed?: y
What changes?:
External?: fruiting body, plate segmentation
Internal?: water pumping, root storage system... the line between changes and clarification can get fuzzy, classifying them as changes to be safe but probably also clarifying existing but previously undetailed systems.
Behavioral/Mental?: selective defense
Are Changes Realistic?: yep
New Genus Needed?: y

Habitat:
Type?: 2 (Polar, Subpolar)
Flavor?: 3 (Beach, Mixed Scrub, Wetlands)
Connected?: y
Wildcard?: n

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?: within floral range

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y, clarified
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: visible segmentation, flexing towards light sources
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Transition Rule?: n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y, clarified
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: y, clarified
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: like a boat on the river
Reasonable changes (if any)?: recovering spore dispersal, fruiting body
Other?:

Description:
Length?: Excellent (all our entries are stubs now).
Capitalized correctly?: The Slari bog makes for a fine capital, lots of tourism oppertunities.
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?:

Opinion: Approved

Agreed and approved