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Single species entries should be singular.

While it's not out of the question you could submit a tiny, local genus, even for that, I recommend gaining more experience in single-species entries first. Genus groups are under more scrutiny now, and are likely to require more information on physiology and ecology than a single species entry. You can always submit this as a singular species, make a bunch of descendants for it, and then, once you've gained experience, make a genus-group descendant.

Brushrums crawl around on the seafloor. It's ambiguous what the typical range is for photosynthetic species, but it's likely somewhere between 50 m-200 m. It's a pretty big jump for a species with no conveniently "pre-adapted" support structure (e.g., like a crustacean moving onto land), to go immediately from crawling on the seafloor to climbing high above the water line. You didn't specify how far up it goes, but if there's actually a need to flap its leaves to slow its descent, it's surely pretty high up. It would help to clarify how far it climbs up a tree. It would help to research tide pool animals, and perhaps mudskippers, since they are both tide-dependent aquatic organisms and can climb trees.

This is a singular species entry, not a genus.

Like its ancestor Juvenile Brushrums, these float on the top of the water.
These ones just don't go benthic like its ancestor.

The flapping of the leaves is an attempt to slow their descent. Does it actually slow the descent.... no. (not yet at least)

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Sep 6 2022, 11:52 AM)

While it's not out of the question you could submit a tiny, local genus, even for that, I recommend gaining more experience in single-species entries first. Genus groups are under more scrutiny now, and are likely to require more information on physiology and ecology than a single species entry. You can always submit this as a singular species, make a bunch of descendants for it, and then, once you've gained  experience, make a genus-group descendant. Brushrums crawl around on the seafloor. It's ambiguous what the typical range is for photosynthetic species, but it's likely somewhere between 50 m-200 m. It's a pretty big jump for a species with no conveniently "pre-adapted" support structure (e.g., like a crustacean moving onto land), to go immediately from crawling on the seafloor to climbing high above the water line. You didn't specify how far up it goes, but if there's actually a need to flap its leaves to slow its descent, it's surely pretty high up. It would help to clarify how far it climbs up a tree. It would help to research tide pool animals, and perhaps mudskippers, since they are both tide-dependent aquatic organisms and can climb trees.

This post has been edited by HethrJarrod: Sep 6 2022, 09:42 AM

Brushrums are a genus.

Ah is the "s" at the end of florrums meant for singular or plural?

Are theose hairs or stray lines arund the main body? While stray lines in art are permissible, those are rather conspicuous.

The scientific name should follow the common name on the same line.

You needn't mark out new additions to your description. It's distracting.

When I have multiple sentences that don't share a theme, I put them in a miscellaneous paragraph. I recommend you do that here.

There's apparently a typo on the species name, judging by how the name in the description and template differ from each other.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y,despite lines it's pretty clear what is being looked at.
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown?: y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?: visually yes

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: larger tentacles, black thing in center, more distinctly separated leaves, tentacles appear more smooth likely due to the protocuticle
Internal?: sap sucker attribute to tentacles
Behavioral/Mental?: climbing into trees
Are Changes Realistic?: yes, the tentacles in the ancestor were consumer-esque, easy to move that to absorbing and tapping into twigs, leaves easily can be separated, and these are already mobile.
New Genus Needed?: yes, tentacles now specialize in sap sucking

Habitat: BLOCKS SUBPOLAR MANGAL
Type?: 3
Flavor?:2
Connected?:y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Within range?:
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Transition Rule?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y added parasitism

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:n/a
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:n
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:
Does It Fit Habitat?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: short
Capitalized correctly?: yes?
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split
Other?: What is that black thing in the center, blocks mangal needs to be renamed to blocks subpolar mangal

Opinion: Pending habitat needs to be fixed, what is that black thing anyway

QUOTE (colddigger @ Oct 27 2022, 10:04 PM)

Approval Checklist: Art: Art Present?: y Art clear?: y,despite lines it's pretty clear what is being looked at. Gen number?: y All limbs shown?: y Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y Realistic additions?: visually yes Name: Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y Creator?:y Ancestor: Listed?:y What changes?: External?: larger tentacles, black thing in center, more distinctly separated leaves, tentacles appear more smooth likely due to the protocuticle Internal?: sap sucker attribute to tentacles Behavioral/Mental?: climbing into trees Are Changes Realistic?: yes, the tentacles in the ancestor were consumer-esque, easy to move that to absorbing and tapping into twigs, leaves easily can be separated, and these are already mobile. New Genus Needed?: yes, tentacles now specialize in sap sucking Habitat: BLOCKS SUBPOLAR MANGAL Type?: 3 Flavor?:2 Connected?:y Wildcard?: Size: Same as Ancestor?:y Within range?: Exception?: Support: Same as Ancestor?:y Does It Fit Habitat?:n/a Reasonable changes (if any)?: Other?: Diet: Same as Ancestor?:n Transition Rule?:y Reasonable changes (if any)?:y added parasitism Respiration: Same as Ancestor?:y Does It Fit Habitat?:n/a Reasonable changes (if any)?: Other?: Thermoregulation: Same as Ancestor?:n Does It Fit Habitat?:y Reasonable changes (if any)?:y elaborated Other?: Reproduction: Same as Ancestor?: Does It Fit Habitat?: Reasonable changes (if any)?: Other?: Description: Length?: short Capitalized correctly?: yes? Replace/Split from ancestor?: split Other?: What is that black thing in the center, blocks mangal needs to be renamed to blocks subpolar mangal Opinion: Pending habitat needs to be fixed, what is that black thing anyway

Fixed Habitat (I think it’s due to it just being listed as Blocks Mangal on the map from the wiki)

Elaborated on the center (it’s dark because it’s in shadow). It’s a pit/bowl like thing that emits a sweet smell to attract pollinators.

Why does it both expel spores and attract pollinators? Also, that's not where the reproductive organs are?

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Oct 28 2022, 04:47 AM)

Why does it both expel spores and attract pollinators? Also, that's not where the reproductive organs are?

The spores are the “pollen”
Hitching a ride is great, but not necessary

I’ll see if I can draw a supplemental image later

". Several paired gonads exist along the edges of each leaf. "


https://sagan4alpha.miraheze.org/wiki/Brushrums


Given they exist along the edges of the leaf one could move them to the base as the leaves become more distinctly separated from each other.

But that would need to be mentioned.

It also leaves the ring of tissue around that center to be explained.

Which can exist, as a separate object.



I thought these dropped their spores into the water, it's alright to change their reproductive habit of course.

QUOTE (colddigger @ Oct 28 2022, 10:53 AM)

". Several paired gonads exist along the edges of each leaf. " https://sagan4alpha.miraheze.org/wiki/Brushrums Given they exist along the edges of the leaf one could move them to the base as the leaves become more distinctly separated from each other. But that would need to be mentioned. It also leaves the ring of tissue around that center to be explained. Which can exist, as a separate object. I thought these dropped their spores into the water, it's alright to change their reproductive habit of course.

I don’t want to really change the organism that much. Right now it’s mostly aesthetic and meant to imitate flowers.

This post has been edited by HethrJarrod: Oct 28 2022, 08:05 AM

Just being an attractant is probably good enough given critters step on their spores

Personal aesthetic is not a valid reason to vastly change anatomy. Species should, in general, work with what they have unless they actually have an evolutionary reason not to (which they generally won't).

A more realistic evolution for this would be for the reproductive organs to move first for different reasons, then evolve flower mimicry using their convenient placement later. Except it would sorta actually become a flower at that point? You get what I mean.

Also, having a hole there interferes with the digestive organs.

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Nov 6 2022, 04:19 PM)

Personal aesthetic is not a valid reason to vastly change anatomy. Species should, in general, work with what they have unless they actually have an evolutionary reason not to (which they generally won't). A more realistic evolution for this would be for the reproductive organs to move first for different reasons, then evolve flower mimicry using their convenient placement later. Except it would sorta actually become a flower at that point? You get what I mean. Also, having a hole there interferes with the digestive organs.

I'm ok with it being more like a flower... But I'm also planning on a carnivorous so having the digestive organs there also makes sense.

Gonna have to go into my headspace and draw the internals for this I guess.

SUPPLEMENTAL IMAGE:



Spores are collected into small chambers in the center creating a small raised ring. When an insect steps onto the central depression, this triggers the spores to be released into the air. The Denticle, pokes into the surface of the flora, and is how the Flurroom gets at the nutrients from its host flora.
And in between these two areas is the Flurroom's stomach.

This post has been edited by HethrJarrod: Nov 6 2022, 05:52 PM