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Ooooh! It looks really nice dude! Though I do want to mention that you don’t list it’s ancestor in the description.

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Sep 14 2022, 10:44 PM

These biomes are either not connected or nonexistent (As with the Fermi Polar Desert), but I understand the placement of things in Fermi is a little confusing.

Does oxygen need to be in respiration?

It should say the specific passive method for respiration, not oxygen

I think I made a template for shell support at one point. It's complicated for this group because it's multi-layer.

It's good to see you again, Jlind11.

The text formatting of the description is very odd, like it was written on a Notepad document with words fitting the window's margins. Can you fix that?

EDIT: Interestingly enough, a greeting to a returning member was my 1,000th post. That may have been what brought me to "Nomad" status. (The organism titles seem based on number of forum posts, though I don't know the exact numbers for each.)

This is a really funny and fun critter, I easily visualized these trains moving around and attempting to encircle food

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Sep 14 2022, 10:45 PM)

It's good to see you again, Jlind11. The text formatting of the description is very odd, like it was written on a Notepad document with words fitting the window's margins. Can you fix that? EDIT: Interestingly enough, a greeting to a returning member was my 1,000th post. That may have been what brought me to "Nomad" status. (The organism titles seem based on number of forum posts, though I don't know the exact numbers for each.)

Habitat and Description updated. You are correct, I did write it in all in a Notepad Document xD

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(i.e. the creature is stronger or is carrier guarded by an obstinate predator)

Is carrier a typo here? It would seem like you may have meant carrion, but I don’t know.

QUOTE (Oofle @ Sep 15 2022, 08:42 PM)

QUOTE (i.e. the creature is stronger or is carrier guarded by an obstinate predator) Is carrier a typo here? It would seem like you may have meant carrion, but I don’t know.

Updated: sorry it took so long

"Passive (Oxygen)" is not how respiration should be formatted. Method is required, as passively breathing oxygen could be done in a myriad of ways, such as through skin directly, a porous cuticle, immobile gills, tracheae, stomata, etc.

Support needs to state the material of the shell. In this group, it has two layers, the inner one being chitinous while the outer one was originally made of sulfur but I'm unsure if that still applies to modern species.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?:y
Art clear?:y
Gen number?:y
All limbs shown?:N, BUT SHOWN IN SUPPLEMENTAL SO I THINK IT IS OKAY
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?:y
Realistic additions?:y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?:y
Creator?:y

Ancestor:
Listed?:y
What changes?:
External?: smaller
Internal?:
Behavioral/Mental?: congo line cooperation, scent markers
Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: mm, probably not

Habitat: Fermi Tundra, Fermi Steppet, Scifi Subpolar Beach, Arctic Subpolar Beach
Type?: 1
Flavor?:3
Connected?: y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?:y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: I MEAN, YEA?
Reasonable changes (if any)?: ELABORATED
Other?: EXOSKELETON NEEDS TO BE SPELLED RIGHT, and material should be listed, and external shell could probably replace exoskeleton in this section

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: YES?
Transition Rule?:
Reasonable changes (if any)?: POTENTIAL PREY NEEDS TO BE ADDED IN DIET

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y, sure
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?:
Does It Fit Habitat?: ....yes?
Reasonable changes (if any)?: yes? elaborated
Other?: IF LISTED AT ALL, then maybe cover the method of passive gas exchange, since oxygen is just assumed it shouldn't be listed.

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?:y
Does It Fit Habitat?:y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: okay, short
Capitalized correctly?: uh...
Replace/Split from ancestor?: split, but replaced in territory.
Other?: STEPPE NEEDS TO BE SPELLED CORRECTLY IN HABITAT, should this cover what happens in Winter?

Opinion: Pending needs fixes

"congo-tingos" Is the name supposed to be hyphenated or not?
"secrets" Secretes.
Why is there an asterisk for "external shell"?
If it's a small ectotherm living in an environment with harsh winters, cold weather adaptations are worth mentioning.

Yeah is there a hyphen or no?

I want to apologize for being AKF. I'm addressing these comments now.

Habitat: Looks correct to me?
Exoskeleton: I assume Calcium? Or Chitin?
Respiration: Passive (Oxygen) Surface Capillaries
Diet: They are meant to be generalists, can I just mention the Genuses?

QUOTE (Jlind11 @ Jan 30 2023, 08:48 PM)

I want to apologize for being AKF. I'm addressing these comments now. Habitat: Looks correct to me? Exoskeleton: I assume Calcium? Or Chitin? Respiration: Passive (Oxygen) Surface Capillaries Diet: They are meant to be generalists, can I just mention the Genuses?

Oh the habitat problem was more just a typo that needed to be fixed, which it looks like you did fix.
For Exoskeleton, I imagine it would be chitin. Though it might be worth asking some others about it
For Respiration, Im not exactly sure what would work here, since in the ancestor it mentions this "The blood warms or cools the neurons depending on the weather, and to maximize this affect there are now four times as many capillaries on the horns. The cotingo also now uses these capillaries as a main site for gas exchange. A primitive heart made out of 2 pumps powered by peristalsis can be found within the shell." For all we know it might be semi active.

For diet, i would check out the ecosystem page, looking up the habitats this guy lives in, and then seeing what else lives there that could be potential prey.

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Jan 30 2023, 05:02 PM