Sagan 4 Forum [Menu]

QUOTE (Nergali @ Apr 13 2020, 08:39 PM)

I suppose that this is plausible, though I am actually uncertain on how waterworms respirate.

You planning on changing these too, or keeping them as is?

Yes, I am working on them right now

"it's metabolism" "it's skull" You mean "its". (I can't edit posts directly here.)
"at swim" should be "and swim"
"themselves" That doesn't quite make sense. Did you mean "patches of the same species".
"While they prefer to feed[...]this sentence is a run-on sentence.
You forgot to add a parenthesis at the end of its diet list.

Can you go into a little more detail on how the skin on top of its head is specialized to absorb oxygen?

This is an interesting natural hazard. I like its tiny baby fins: they're like a Tyrannosaurus rex's arms, but for fins.

Rewrote some stuff and hopefully there are no more errors, tried to go into more detail about its oxygen intake. The baby fins remain.