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Oh interesting, never really thought of stating a regional extinction without replacing in that region

Image:
No issues. I like the texturing, especially for the fins. It is a bit odd-looking, though. It looks like scales or a spongy texture, not filaments or veins. This does not need to be changed, though.

Template:
I’m pretty sure these are ectotherms.

Description:

“those these actions”: “Though these actions”.
“Being a meal”: becoming a meal.
“Taken care of”: it sounds grammatically better as “cared for”.
“Their is”: “there is”.

“Though these actions”. If these breed in the twilight zone floors, their breeding habitats are worth specifying. Ideally, you’d also specify the depth range at which they can be found, at least for breeding. In real life, there are a lot of fish whose ranges extend from the lower sunlight zone to the upper twilight zone, such as saithe (coalfish), Alaska pollock and plaice, and some fish regularly migrate between the two environments. (Generally, the upper margins of the twilight zone is 200 meters down.)

It’s worth mentioning it has a keen sense of smell, which would help it find carcasses to eat.

Do they still have teeth?

Updates for Coolstephs suggests and catches ought to be done before review.








I like how clean the image is.

@MNIDJM, can you implement the feedback suggested?
If the unspecified support is not a problem, this should be ready to review after the feedback is implemented.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ May 7 2023, 06:21 PM)

Image: No issues. I like the texturing, especially for the fins. It is a bit odd-looking, though. It looks like scales or a spongy texture, not filaments or veins. This does not need to be changed, though. Template: I’m pretty sure these are ectotherms. Description: “those these actions”: “Though these actions”. “Being a meal”: becoming a meal. “Taken care of”: it sounds grammatically better as “cared for”. “Their is”: “there is”. “Though these actions”. If these breed in the twilight zone floors, their breeding habitats are worth specifying. Ideally, you’d also specify the depth range at which they can be found, at least for breeding. In real life, there are a lot of fish whose ranges extend from the lower sunlight zone to the upper twilight zone, such as saithe (coalfish), Alaska pollock and plaice, and some fish regularly migrate between the two environments. (Generally, the upper margins of the twilight zone is 200 meters down.) It’s worth mentioning it has a keen sense of smell, which would help it find carcasses to eat. Do they still have teeth?

Fixed

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: y
Art clear?: y
Gen number?: y
All limbs shown?: y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: y
Realistic additions?: y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: y
Creator?: y

Ancestor:
Listed?:
What changes?:

• External?: smaller, more streamlined, less distinct crest,
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: hides between roots in mangals, follows shrog nests

Are Changes Realistic?: y
New Genus Needed?: n, not that different

Habitat:
Type?: 1
Flavor?: 2
Connected to Ancestor?: y
Contiguous?:y
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Within range?: y
Exception?:

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does it Fit Lifestyle?: -
Does It Fit Size?: -
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Transition Rule?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: yes, carnivore added

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Does it Fit Size?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated, y
Other?:

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: n
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: elaborated, y
Other?:

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: y
Does It Fit Habitat?: y
Reasonable changes (if any)?:
Other?:

Description:
Length?: good
Capitalized correctly?: mostly
Replace/Split from ancestor?: replaced ???????????????????
Other?:

"slimy clusters of eggs, which are cared of until they hatch."

this needs to be fixed somehow

Opinion: Pending sentence needs fixing.


Approved

This post has been edited by colddigger: Jun 11 2023, 09:41 PM

I'll make my comments on this species once I complete the redraw of it's direct ancestor.

QUOTE (colddigger @ May 30 2023, 06:44 AM)

Approval Checklist: "slimy clusters of eggs, which are cared of until they hatch." this needs to be fixed somehow

Fixed

Oh I think I was registering the word "of" which to me should be "for" in

"which are cared of until they hatch"

But given it's literally just one word and you'll see this and make a decision I'm gonna give this an approval.