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Made some corrections to things you pointed out.

QUOTE (HethrJarrod @ May 20 2023, 10:46 AM)

Made some corrections to things you pointed out.

It would be better to give an update alert only after you've implemented all the feedback proposed, or given compelling reasons not to act on them. It is possible that you're using update alerts like these to indicate feedback responses in progress, rather than finished responses to a set of feedback. If you are inclined to give such updates for feedback responses in progress, rather than complete responses, I recommend the compromise of replying to a quoted form of my feedback set and noting which things you responded to, such as with a checkmark.

Implementing either of these changes to the feedback response structure would reduce approvers' time and effort, thereby speeding up the process.

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Image: 1. Nothing significant. While there are stray lines and uncolored areas, and this would be better with those fixed, they are pretty subtle and therefore excusable. Template 1. Its habitat is contiguous only because of travel through the open ocean, such as South Jujubee Ocean. However, it requires contact with a substrate and lives in the sunlight zone, so it can’t live in the open ocean. You’ll need to specify it exists only as spores in incompatible habitats (and do so in the template). 2. For a single organism submission, use an average for listing size, and give more specific details in the description. 3. You’ll need to capitalize the specific details in the template, such as in the Support, Respiration, and Reproduction sections. 4. Most fauna (in the sense of “non-flora”) can be considered consumers (heterotrophs) by default, so “consumer” is redundant. 5. It would be useful to specify the planktonic size range. Krill are technically plankton, but they are vastly bigger than, say, picoplankton. Description: 1. “Unlike its ancestors, it does not grow in as tight as a spiral.” It doesn’t seem to grow in a spiral at all here. It looks like a tusk. 2. How does it draw in ensnared plankton caught on its sticky sap-like substance? 3. “Mangal shrubite can form”: “Mangal shrubites”, you mean? 4. “Off of”: “off”, or “off from”. 5. How does it avoid digesting the spores?

Template:
1. Changed to specify habitat for Spore and habitat for adult.
2. Changed to average size.
3. I'm pretty sure they were capitalized, but capitalized more things for good measure.
4. Deleted Consumer.
5. Cant find any referent with ancestor or relatives about a size range, so just leaving that part out.

Description:
1. Added additional detail.
2. This was mentioned in the description already.
3. Fixed.
4. Fixed.
5. Elaborated.

Added supplemental image for internal structure.