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I very much enjoy this wave of "(almost) just normal trees", cold

Thank you!

Does anyone have a constructive comment before I give this a review?

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Optional: It would be ideal if each leaf were linked to the originating twig, but I suppose mild stylization or simplification is acceptable in some cases. Quite a lot of Sagan 4 organisms have cartoony Pokemon-esque eyes, after all. Since the leaf stalk is clearly portrayed and the tree is seen from a distance, it’s readable.

Template:

Like for the previous review, there’s too much empty space in the template.
The words specifying the method should be capitalized.
Heliothermy is not appropriate for flora.

P.S. Oh boy…big habitat lists are not fun to double-check. I have a lot to go through, so I’ll have to come back to that later.

Description
“Split[….]to spread” Suggests intentionality or purpose in evolution. It is generally deceptive to suggest this. (Octopi, however, have a very strange RNA editing ability.)
“Fairly straight, trunk”: “fairly straight trunk”.
“Well forked”: “well-forked”.
“To be softer”: becoming softer.
“Higher light demanding”: What do you mean by this? Do you mean “less shade-tolerant”?
“They are 15 cm long”: “small clusters and are 15 cm long”.
“Entrypoints”: “entry points”.
“Toward their back end an air pocket, like in their ancestor, exists.” I recommend rewriting this as: “The megasporangiums have air pockets near their back ends, much as in their ancestor’s megasporangiums.”
“ability to float is less successful due to no not needing to survive lengths of time in oceanic waters.”
Less successful? How? Do you mean it’s less buoyant? Do you mean this ability is less useful?
“No not”: “not needing”.
“Their ancestor”: “their ancestor’s”.
“Ancestoral”: “Ancestral”. This can be caught by a spell checker.
“Otherwise they look”: “Otherwise, they look”.

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i changed higher light demanding to more light demanding.

I added the word often in reference to floating to shift the statement toward a generalization on many times the fruit has fallen instead of only one.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Taller, Summer Leaf Change, Megasporangium Shape
• Internal?: Megasporangium Air Pocket Shrink
• Behavioral/Mental?:

Are Changes Realistic?: Yes
New Genus Needed?: Yes, Done

Habitat:
Type?: 3/3
Flavor?: 2/3
Connected to Ancestor?: Y
Contiguous?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does it Fit Lifestyle?: Y
Does It Fit Size?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Does it Fit Size?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: N/A

Status: Approved

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