Several errors remain. These errors were not fixed, despite repeated rounds of feedback and reminders. While new members may be expected to make more errors than those who have been here for a while, given you now have 361 posts to your name and so some experience, it is reasonable to expect substantial improvements to your submission processes and responsiveness to feedback. Repeatedly giving reminders for you to address the same unresolved submission issues is taking up time and energy disproportionate to submission description length or complexity. At this point, time and energy is better spent on looking over other submissions.
This is the last round of feedback I will give for this organism. I have put it into a bullet-point list to make it especially easy to mark off a list. If any errors remain, someone else will have to deal with it. At this point, I intend to only provide two rounds of feedback each to your other submissions as well, so make sure to either address errors or provide compelling justification for not addressing them.
Remaining errors:
1. “There are a lot of stray lines and uncolored spots in both individuals depicted.” You don’t need to get rid of all of them, but the number and conspicuousness of these problems is severe. It’s particularly serious when there’s bleed-through between yellow and red.
2. “On a less important note, the stripes on the legs and the spots on the face don’t match between the two, but they otherwise look similar enough that this doesn’t seem to be explainable by mere genetic variation.”
3. “Omivore”. (It’s “omnivore”)
4. “While the other Sirrush has claws now, the foot-claws are a drastically different style (like elephant feet) and aren’t colored in. Please make them a little pointier and color them in. Please also clarify the tips of the beaks more. The bleed-through of the lines on the beak of the one in the foreground makes it hard to detect the full shape of the beak.”
5. “If the outward-facing toe (away from the center of the body) is indeed meant be significantly smaller than the other toes, I recommend correcting the size of the outermost claw on the Sirrush’s right (viewers’ right) foot.”
New feedback:
6. Please reduce the bleed-through and uncolored areas on the supplemental art, and get rid of the color dot on the proboscis picture.
7. Are you sure it can eat Hedgimals? Hedgimals are bigger and fairly well-armored, and it doesn’t seem to hunt in packs. Its proboscis might allow it to avoid injuring itself too often, as would spraying acid, but it’s worth pointing this out in the description.
8. I'm not really sure what the spots are for, but that might be an issue with its ancestor, not this one specifically. The ancestor's description doesn't make it clear if it's a flat pattern or an ear.
This is the last round of feedback I will give for this organism. I have put it into a bullet-point list to make it especially easy to mark off a list. If any errors remain, someone else will have to deal with it. At this point, I intend to only provide two rounds of feedback each to your other submissions as well, so make sure to either address errors or provide compelling justification for not addressing them.
Remaining errors:
1. “There are a lot of stray lines and uncolored spots in both individuals depicted.” You don’t need to get rid of all of them, but the number and conspicuousness of these problems is severe. It’s particularly serious when there’s bleed-through between yellow and red.
2. “On a less important note, the stripes on the legs and the spots on the face don’t match between the two, but they otherwise look similar enough that this doesn’t seem to be explainable by mere genetic variation.”
3. “Omivore”. (It’s “omnivore”)
4. “While the other Sirrush has claws now, the foot-claws are a drastically different style (like elephant feet) and aren’t colored in. Please make them a little pointier and color them in. Please also clarify the tips of the beaks more. The bleed-through of the lines on the beak of the one in the foreground makes it hard to detect the full shape of the beak.”
5. “If the outward-facing toe (away from the center of the body) is indeed meant be significantly smaller than the other toes, I recommend correcting the size of the outermost claw on the Sirrush’s right (viewers’ right) foot.”
New feedback:
6. Please reduce the bleed-through and uncolored areas on the supplemental art, and get rid of the color dot on the proboscis picture.
7. Are you sure it can eat Hedgimals? Hedgimals are bigger and fairly well-armored, and it doesn’t seem to hunt in packs. Its proboscis might allow it to avoid injuring itself too often, as would spraying acid, but it’s worth pointing this out in the description.
8. I'm not really sure what the spots are for, but that might be an issue with its ancestor, not this one specifically. The ancestor's description doesn't make it clear if it's a flat pattern or an ear.
1. Maybe.
2. Not important to change.
3. Fixed.
4. Tip of the beak is clarified.
5. No.
6. Dot was removed.
7. Mentioned in description.
8. Idk what I’m supposed to do about it since it’s related to the ancestor. This just seems to be pointing out a thing I have no way of fixing.
2. Not important to change.
3. Fixed.
4. Tip of the beak is clarified.
5. No.
6. Dot was removed.
7. Mentioned in description.
8. Idk what I’m supposed to do about it since it’s related to the ancestor. This just seems to be pointing out a thing I have no way of fixing.
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