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This is pretty adorable!

The only things I'd say is that the deep bleats should be changed to squeaks or screeches since it is only 50 cm long and that its ancestor actually had more of feathers that are pretty close to bird feathers, but not quite that advanced yet.

But you are welcome to write them as having feathers as advanced as bird feathers.

Thank you for doing this.

This post has been edited by TheBigDeepCheatsy: Dec 16 2020, 05:58 PM

"Its 4 legs have 2 hoofed toes while its tail-leg has 3 hooffed toes"
Doesn't it make more sense to write it as "four", "two", and "three"? There's also a typo in "hoofed".
What do the males do before the eggs have hatched? Their role is only mentioned after the eggs have hatched.

I agree that "deep, bleating calls" doesn't really make sense, unless it has special vocal adaptations, like certain toads. You could say its voice is surprisingly deep for its size, though.

" crash down" "Crashing down" is grammatically correct.

"This back foot helps them leap away from predators. While the other legs help in its quick bounding." These should be merged with a comma. "However very few reach breeding age." This needs a comma after "however".