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The scientific name should be immediately after the common name, and the reproductive methods should be capitalized. I don't think you need to add pollination by xenobees in the template. The sentence that starts with, "The way the sweetstalk attracts xenobees" is a breathless run-on sentence, so you should split it up with commas or periods.

Imperial Quid (Rex roma)

Creator: Thistle and Rose

Ancestor: Venomous Quid

Habitat: Itchy salt swamp, King tropical coast

Size: 1.4m

Diet: Carnivore (Wadesnapper,Spineless oadtuga, Thorny toadtuga,Horned landlubber,Verdiundi,Itchypede,Shailinotor,Gulperpump)

Reproduction: Sexual, two genders, Spawns hundreds of egg sacs

The Imperial Quid employs odd hunting techniques for its group, most notably the habit of plucking prey from the water's edge, or shallow water. If it can capture prey quickly enough its claw-like stingers will sink deep into the victims' flesh, and it will pull back into the water, while the venom takes effect. The poison is not lethal to large victims, merely being modified as a paralysing element to stop the struggles of the species. It is because of this change that they usually begin feeding while the organism is still alive, under the effect of the toxin.

One of its biggest changes is its size, which has almost doubled, and enabled it to overpower prey that is quite large, most notably the wadesnapper. However it usually hunts other animals like the horned landlubber and the toadtuga, which pack less of a punch. Its size may put it at risk of larger predators, and that was solved with its natural attack being stored in small numbers along its arms. When its arm is bitten off, or the Quid is killed, the little pockets burst, distributing poison all along the body. The cells in the quid's body have some degree of tolerance to it.

One of the least notable is its colouration, changing to a partially mottled black colour, warns hunters when it shows it is both dangerous and lethal to eat. When hidden in the murky water of the salt marshes, or the eddying currents of the king coast nightscape it is almost invisible due to its pattern. It has also adapted to pulling prey from the edge with a very large eye further up the face, While the second eye has remained the size. This is useful so it can peer out of the water without the rest of the body showing.
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The name, scientific name, creator, ancestor, habitat, size, diet, and reproduction information should all have only a single return (line break) between them, or at least a consistent spacing scheme. The organism names, habitat names, and reproductive methods should also be capitalized.

The name here is listed as "Angels of Death", but that plural name would only make sense for a genus group or if "Angels" was supposed to be both the plural and singular, like "deer" and "sheep". I would recommend "Angel of Death" be capitalized, like most species, although there has been an accepted habit of not capitalizing species names on the Beta timeline.
Of course, these points could be irrelevant: "Angel of Death" is a very odd name to give an organism. There's the Monkeypuzzle Tree, pineapple, Adam's rib/ribs of Adam and St. John's wort, common kingslayer (a jellyfish that was named someone with the surname King) as examples of organisms with odd, spaced-out or referential names, but "Angel of Death" is so vague but well-established as phrasing it doesn't make sense to use it. "Deathangel" or even "Death Angel" is closer to conventional Sagan 4 organism names. (Not to be confused with the Angel Dart, a Dartirs descendant inspired by the Zoraptera, or "angel insects")

"Waters edge" should be "water's edge". ("Waters' edge" also makes sense, though it sounds antiquated.)

"Victims flesh" should be "victims' flesh" or "victim's flesh". I would recommend not using informal, colloquial language like "throw their weight around"; I recall Hydromancerx once revised the phrasing of one of my organisms from "bite first and ask questions later" to "bite first, and spit out if not edible". (Delivering the occasional joke or describing something funny with detached humor is fine, though.)

"almost doubling" should be "which has almost doubled". "and enabling" should then be "and enabled".

"Quids body" should be "Quid's body".

"warns hunters" should be "which warns hunters". "One of the[...]almost invisible" should be chopped up into two or three sentences.

"with very large eye" "It has also adapted[...]rest of its body visible" I'm not sure how to chop up that sentence. The end of the sentence, ending with "body visible", should have a period at the end.

Make sure you edit the picture to indicate it has gills.

While I've many tiny artwork before myself, I do recommend you adjust the size of the art to be a little bigger. As it is, it's hard to see that red dot on its face is its smaller eye. (Although you did mention that detail in the description.)

Generally, depictions like the lower one, in which it is attacking prey, is included as a supplementary image. (See the Oilyback entry or Seashrog entry for examples of supplementary images.)

"claws like stingers" that should be "claws, like stingers" or "claw-like stingers".

Thank you for the feedback! i should have picked up those errors before i posted, so thank you for pointing them out!. The edits have been made- andi have also changed the name

edit: Thx dorite

The diet should be formatted like Diet: Carnivore (list)

In a scientific name, only the first name, the genus name, is capitalized. The names of organisms, at least in the diet list, should be capitalized. The reproductive methods should also be capitalized.

You missed some errors I pointed out, such as: "its claws like stingers"

The supplementary art doesn't have visible gills.

I don't recall any other organism art where an organism bleeds red blood. (My art of a Dualtrunk getting pestered by Bloodbees has shallow scratches with green blood, but it's not so violent as this.) This could be shocking content. And yet, dinosaur books intended for children can still illustrate a Tyrannosaurus chomping down and causing bloody holes, and logically the Imperial Quid would kill its prey in a bloody way.

Should there be a read-more for that supplementary image on the wiki? Should the bleeding be reduced?

Ive edited its claws like stingers part, and ive added gills.
I understand this could come out as shocking, but one or two species have this.
for example....



edit: added the capatalisation

That species isn't canon yet, but yeah, people haven't generally freaked out much about blood. If there was guts, though, I would recommend toning it down.

Oh, a bit of an unfortunate coincidence...the ancestor you chose seems to have misinterpreted anatomy, placing its mouth where its anus should be and a giant horn where its mouth should be. We're still working out what we're going to do about messed up creatures like that, so I'd like to suggest holding off on submitting quids for the moment.

Name: Dragon Marephasmoids (Dracophasmatis spp.)
Ancestor: Rainbow Marephasmatis
Habitat: Global (Sagan 4)
Size: 1-4 cm long
Diet: Detritivore, Planktivore
Reproduction: Sexual (spawning, 2 sexes)

After 500 million years of evolutionary dormancy, a relic population of rainbow marephasmatis experienced a sudden boom in diversity. Oddly enough, this genus of marephasmatis came into existence partially due to the actions of the seashrog, bringing massive amounts of microbe-riddled driftwood into the open ocean. Dragon Marephasmoids are opportunistic, feasting on almost any cloud of microbes or clump of dead tissue they come across. To aid in feeding, their sticky anterior digestive membrane has become a somewhat concave dome-shape, and is able to be everted in order to grab hold of larger objects. Four small knobs surround the “mouth”, acting as the main sites of chemoreception.

Dragon Marephasmoids aren’t particularly fast. However, they are not necessarily easy prey. They pulsate with vibrant colors to warn predators of their venomous sting, which is much more potent than it was in their ancient ancestors. The sting now also possesses four tiny, backwards-pointing spines that makes it harder to remove.

While Dragon Marephasmoids don’t differ that much from their ancestors externally, they do possess a relatively significant internal innovation. A new type of tissue is now present in their bodies, the cells of which have a large and extensive extracellular membrane. This tissue, called Dracophasmatic Structural Tissue (DpST), is similar to cartilage in both structure and function, though it is a bit softer and much more flexible. Each of their 12 fins possesses an intricate structure of DpST fibers; three large rods of DpST extend from the base to the tip of each fin, connected together by many smaller ones. The tail is also supported by a rod of DpST, which counterintuitively gets marginally thinner towards the base.

Dragon Marephasmoids are found in every ocean on Sagan 4, though they particularly favor tropical areas, being rare in polar waters.

DpST structure inside of the fins.

Hi cube! Can you wait a bit on this and repost? The "identical but elaborated" replacement must come first, and the order on the wiki is the order of submission. This also has a few errors from misinterpreting things that I've gotten clarified with help from Yokto.

This post has been edited by Disgustedorite: Mar 3 2021, 06:19 PM

But the Rainbow Marephasmatis is extinct...
Is this one of those cases where an organism was erroneously made extinct and was interpreted to survive multiple extinction events, like the Uksip Marfinnus?

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Mar 3 2021, 10:08 PM)

But the Rainbow Marephasmatis is extinct... Is this one of those cases where an organism was erroneously made extinct and was interpreted to survive multiple extinction events, like the Uksip Marfinnus?

Yeah, it happened again. Hydro mistakenly thought it was replaced when it wasn't, it survived gamma ray for the same reason that the green swarmer did, and it got through the rest like it was nothing.

I don't think I'm able to delete comments here or anything like that, but yes as indicated before, I will be reposting this as soon as you come out with the better-elaborated descendant. Errors will hopefully be fixed as well.

Name: Sprinting Bubbleskin (Choriobullae velox)
Ancestor: Drake Bubbleskin (Choriobullae drakeus)
Habitat: Drake Tundra, Drake Polar Scrub, Drake High Desert, Drake High Grassland
Size: 100 cm long
Diet: Hemophagus, Carnivore (Genteel Tuskent(Juveniles), Shortface Sauceback, Shaggy Glasseater(Juveniles), Grazing Gossalizard, Desert Gossalizard, Shaggycoat, Tuskcoat, Rosybeak Phyler, Pinyuk, Strider Fuzzcoat(Juveniles), Dwarf Pinyuk, Loafpick, Lipped Sauceback(Juveniles))
Reproduction: Sexual, Live Birth, Two Genders, Pouch




The Sprinting Bubbleskin evolved from Drake Bubbleskins that began to rely more on speed and agility to hunt their prey. While they got smaller to avoid competition from their ancestor, they still hunt prey of decent size. Much like their ancestor, the Sprinting Bubbleskin feeds on the blood of plents, glasseaters and saucebacks though it has also expanded its diet to take the soft parts of a carcass as well such as internal organs. They are still social animals, hunting in packs of 3-5 individuals. The pack continues to sleep in a “dogpile” to keep warm, as several individuals are better at keeping warm than a single individual.

Much like their ancestors and relatives, their skin is covered in air-filled bubbles which trap air to help insulate them from the cold environment. Much like their close kin, the ears are within the skin. Similarly to the Drake Bubbleskin, the Sprinting Bubbleskin sees in color from red to ultraviolet from their main eye while the frontmost eye can see the bio-electrical signals of their prey and the furthest back eye can see in infrared(meaning they can see heat). The tongue also has the same “sandpapery texture” of their ancestor, due to the small bristles located on it.

They hunt primarily at night, when they have the advantage over their prey as they’re usually sleeping or not fully aware of their surroundings and have the cover of darkness which aids in sneaking up to the animals. As they chase their targets, they select the individual with the weakest bio-electric signals. Once the victim is decided upon, the Sprinting Bubbleskins communicate with one another with high frequency chirps(which are often out of the frequency their prey can hear) and move in on the target. The pack will single out this individual and isolate it from the group it's in before moving in to take it down. Much like their ancestors, they use their fangs and clawed forelimbs to kill their prey with the claw on their forelimbs have developed serrations to cause more damage allowing the victim to bleed to death much more quickly.

The Sprinting Bubbleskins will lick up blood that has fallen on the ground, while additionally gutting the carcass to feed on the soft internal organs. While the blood and organs can be frozen, their stomachs are adapted to deal with this. The species does not need to drink water, as they get all their moisture from the blood and internal organs they consume. While their warm blooded metabolism means they need to hunt regularly, their adaptions to consuming internal organs provides more nutrients compared to blood alone so it's not as frequent as their obligate-hemophagus relatives.

The social hierarchy is very similar to their ancestor, with the pack being led by a single alpha male who holds strict breeding rights over the females. The male will mate with the females every fall with the females which then give birth to 1 or 2 pups in the spring, after which the young are kept in the pouch until summer arrives on Drake when they become too large to carry comfortably. These pups lack the fangs, claws, and tongue bristles when born which helps to not damage the mother while in the pouch. The pack regularly feeds them regurgitated blood until they are old enough to join them on hunts. At a certain point, the males of the pack will be driven away by the alpha male.


Hello! This is my first submission! I may be a bit clunky with it but I have to start somewhere!