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I have also checked punctuation, and there seems to be no remaining run-ons.

The lung bumps don't appear to be depicted.

Which lung bumps? The circular part near the tail?

QUOTE (Oofle @ Jul 1 2021, 05:21 PM)

Which lung bumps? The circular part near the tail?

Yep,those are the lungs

Yes, that circular part is the lung. It's absent on my species because it internalized the lung.

Good catch, MNIDJM.

Oofle, you could similarly internalize the lung, say it has a sufficient layer of subcutaneous fat streamlining it to make the bump hard to see from most lights, or simply add a bit of shading suggesting the bump.

I mean, it could also be exhaling, surely the lungs aren’t puffed out all the time right? If they are I will add the bump, but still.

Given that the bump is partly formed by an external limb fused to the body, I think it would always be visible.

Oh, I suppose I’ll just mention it got internalized then since that seems more suitable if it’s already shrinking a bunch of its fins for aerodynamics as well.
Alright, I did it.

…hello? Anybody?

Well I have no more objections. Anyone else?

Most Srugeing descendants now provide thermoregulation and respiration details. (That's a new requirement for submissions now, for the most part.) Once those are added, though, this should be complete.

Added thermoregulation and respiration! These just weren’t there because at first I don’t think it was considered decided for srugeing. I’ll be happy to finally get this thing finished.

"go through a small growth spurt," needs to have a colon, not a comma, and "diet. Which" needs to replace the period with a comma, but at this point it ought to just get edited once it's on the wiki.

I believe this is sufficient. Does anyone else have further feedback? If not, this submission can be approved and Oofle can be admitted as a member.

Oofle Welcome to the Sagan 4 team!