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You might have noticed I've been gone from the forum for a few days. I appear to have a mild case of the flu, which became clear on February 15. I've been avoiding anything even moderately strenuous for the past few days to accelerate my recovery. Apparently it's working, but I recommend either waiting a few days for me to return to full health or finding a way around my absence.

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Feb 18 2023, 10:56 PM)

@OviraptorFan, you clearly know what you're doing, so welcome to the Beta team! Please repost your submissions to the subforum. As for the others, I'm gonna wait until @Coolsteph has commented before proceeding.

Thank you dorite!

Name: Gorgonaut (Asternauta Fidomallis)
Creator: HethrJarrod
Ancestor: Darwinauts
Habitat: Darwin-Flisch Reef, North Darwin Tropical Undersea Meadow, West Darwin Tropical Coast, West Darwin Tropical Undersea Meadow, Darwin-Rhino Reef, Mid-Darwin Subtropical Undersea Forest, Darwin Subtropical Undersea Meadow, West Darwin Subtropical Undersea Forest, East Darwin Subtropical Coast
Size: 10 cm long
Support: Soft-Bodied (Muscular Hydrostat), Shell (Calcite)
Diet: Filter-Feeder (<500 micrometers), Detritivore
Respiration: Passive Diffusion
Thermoregulation: Ectotherm
Reproduction: Sexual (Spore-like gametes), Asexual (Limited Regeneration)

The Gorgonauts split off from their ancestor, moving to the subtropical and tropical waters off of Darwin.

Gorgonauts have longer tentacles than their ancestors. The tentacle consists of an eyeball at the end, baits which help to filter food particles in the water. and a ventral opening that is used to suck in the food to a stomach located inside the shell.The tentacles have rudimentary sensory processing organs to allow them to act quickly and independently from each other. It can no longer retract these tentacles back inside its shell.

Supplemental Image:


The Darwinauts had limited fragmentation ability. The Gorgonauts have gotten a bit better. When threatened or damaged, a tentacle can detach itself. This tentacle dies after a few minutes. The main body can regrow new tentacles to replace it.

This post has been edited by HethrJarrod: Mar 1 2023, 09:52 AM

The only thing I can think of really commenting on at the moment is the odd grammar in the beginning sentence. The “unlike” sets it up to be a single-sentence comparison, but then the comparison extends to multiple sentences. It could be revised to not use the word “unlike”.

Can anyone review my submission?

QUOTE (Cube67 @ Feb 21 2023, 01:00 PM)

The only thing I can think of really commenting on at the moment is the odd  grammar in the beginning sentence. The “unlike” sets it up to be a single-sentence comparison, but then the comparison extends to multiple sentences. It could be revised to not use the word “unlike”.

Fixed it to
"In the Darwinauts, a damaged tentacle was essentially dead. This is not the case with Argonauts."

Information wise if someone wants to make a descendent for it it might be helpful to describe where the ventral openings are on the tentacles. Is it under the eye or around the base on the ventral side of the main body or somewhere in between?

How do fragmented tentacles grow? Do they have their own gut tissue? Do they absorb nutrition through the skin?

QUOTE (Jarlaxle @ Feb 22 2023, 07:19 PM)

Information wise if someone wants to make a descendent for it it might be helpful to describe where the ventral openings are on the tentacles. Is it under the eye or around the enbase on the ventral side of the main body or somewhere in between? How do fragmented tentacles grow? Do they have their own gut tissue? Do they absorb nutrition through the skin?

Added a supplemental image for mouth placement.

Should I make one for the other organs in the tentacle?

I should mention that an argonaut is already a real animal. A (false-)shell-bearing pelagic cephalopod, at that.

I have done a bit of a rewrite for the Oligopods and updated their pictures to reflect this.

@Future Tyrannosaurus Each paragraph needs a double space between it.

Also, make sure to follow the order of the submission form listed in the rules, they should be in this order:

Name (Genus species)
Creator
Ancestor
Habitat
Size
Support
Diet
Respiration
Thermoregulation
Reproduction

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@Primalpikachu Genus group entries need all 3 species in one image. Also, please try to make them all fit inside one genus - This still appears to be two separate genera in different niches.

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@HethrJarrod How are tentacles growing from the baits at the end of the tentacle? In all other primitive asterzoa, they regrow from the center of the organism, like starfish do. Also, remember, the baits in species this basal are structures extending from a cell like a flagellum, not organs or even whole cells which an organism can regenerate from.

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Feb 24 2023, 08:43 PM)

@Future Tyrannosaurus Each paragraph needs a double space between it. Also, make sure to follow the order of the submission form listed in the rules, they should be in this order: Name (Genus species) Creator Ancestor Habitat Size Support Diet Respiration Thermoregulation Reproduction @Primalpikachu Genus group entries need all 3 species in one image. Also, please try to make them all fit inside one genus - This still appears to be two separate genera in different niches. @HethrJarrod How are tentacles growing from the baits at the end of the tentacle? In all other primitive asterzoa, they regrow from the center of the organism, like starfish do. Also, remember, the baits in species this basal are structures extending from a cell like a flagellum, not organs or even whole cells which an organism can regenerate from.

Alright, I tried editing it, how is it now?

@Disgustedorite could you elaborate on how the entry still looks like two separate genera?

I have now made the organisms one image and have proportioned them more appropriately to reflect the smaller size of the species with fewer segments

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Feb 24 2023, 11:43 PM)

@HethrJarrod How are tentacles growing from the baits at the end of the tentacle? In all other primitive asterzoa, they regrow from the center of the organism, like starfish do. Also, remember, the baits in species this basal are structures extending from a cell like a flagellum, not organs or even whole cells which an organism can regenerate from.

Change the description to describe them as being more like flatworms.