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Welcome, Clayren.
"to better protect" suggests intention. "which better protects the delicate 'fins'" is better.
"swooping, and pecking" There should not be a comma between them.
"I've never seen "florae" used before, but it seems valid.
"Summer" should not be capitalized.
"Juvenile Tenant Phlyer couples" Aren't juveniles incapable of breeding? Did you mean "subadults" or "adults with no territory"?


The art looks nice. What technique did you use to make it?

After "size" there should be "support", which in this case would be:
Support: Endoskeleton (Jointed Wood)

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 5 2021, 08:47 AM)

Welcome, Clayren. "to better protect" suggests intention. "which better protects the delicate 'fins'" is better. "swooping, and pecking" There should not be a comma between them. "I've never seen "florae" used before, but it seems valid. "Summer" should not be capitalized. "Juvenile Tenant Phlyer couples" Aren't juveniles incapable of breeding? Did you mean "subadults" or "adults with no territory"? The art looks nice. What technique did you use to make it?

Thanks for the feedback. The art is sketched in pencil then traced with a pen when I'm happy with it. For the colors I have a big collection of art markers, this one was mostly ecoline and tombow brush pens.

There are still a few typos or oddities in the description: summer is probably not-capitalized just once, an the issue about juvenile couples wasn't corrected.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 5 2021, 10:06 AM)

There are still a few typos or oddities in the description: summer is probably not-capitalized just once, an the issue about juvenile couples wasn't corrected.

Ah, I missed those, thanks.

I have also modified the picture somewhat to better reflect the interior of a crystal tree.

This post has been edited by Clayren2:Electric Boogaloo: Jun 5 2021, 07:28 PM

Okay, so I noticed that this only has generation 164 instead of "Generation 164A".

The Courier Phlyer got reclassified into the genus Sangexorituti. Unless your species is a distinct genus, I recommend changing the genus name of the Tenant Phlyer into Sangexorituti!

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ Jun 24 2021, 04:49 PM)

The Courier Phlyer got reclassified into the genus Sangexorituti. Unless your species is a distinct genus, I recommend changing the genus name of the Tenant Phlyer into Sangexorituti!

I see. Name changed, thanks.