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Item amended!

I like the striping on its tail fin.

" becomes heart-shaped," "Became heart-shaped".
"evolve" Evolved.
"Its usual hunting strategy[...]" the sentences in this paragraph are too long, and could be split. They sound breathless.

Suggested changes made.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 10 2021, 09:07 AM)

I like the striping on its tail fin.

Those are not stripes, but fin rays inherited from the Speartooth Seaswimmer faintly relieved through the thickened lower fin, where they only exist at.

I meant the stripe-like technique for depicting the fin rays, using a fuzzy brush option, it seems. I know they aren't literal stripes.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 11 2021, 07:04 AM)

I meant the stripe-like technique for depicting the fin rays, using a fuzzy brush option, it seems. I know they aren't literal stripes.

I used a combination of Flash and Krita for the picture. The effect for the tail outline and the fin rays in particular was achieved in Flash by applying blur filters to them after drawing them and converting them to "Movie Clip" symbols, then reducing the alpha setting to soften them as they were drawn as solid black lines.

ITS THE NARWHAL SNAKE.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?:Y
All limbs shown?:Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Fully aquatic, fusiform bodyplan, caudal fin shape, dorsal ridges, reduced nostrils and rear eyes
• Internal?: Live birth in water,
• Behavioral/Mental?: Rests half brain, thrashing hunting behavior

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: Y; Already Done

Habitat:
Type?: 3/2 (Marine, Polar, Temperate)
Flavor?: 1/3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y (85 cm -> 340 cm)
Exception?: Maybe, need to determine if it meets qualifications.

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Live birth in water now

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: No
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Y
Other?: N/A

Status: Pending(Too many types, does it fully qualify for Low Competition exception?)

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Type?: 3/2 (Marine, Polar, Temperate)

This creature's biology makes it better suited for temperate regions, so to satisfy the type limit, I'm going to have to change its habitats, which will also mean adjusting what prey species it eats. It will have to descend from the Speartooth Seaswimmers in the Oz Temperate Coast.

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Exception?: Maybe, need to determine if it meets qualifications.

What does this mean?

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Capitalized correctly?: No

Are Sagan 4 common names not proper nouns? Is the convention of capitalizing every term in the itemized descriptors (like "Live Birth, Two Genders") ending?

This post has been edited by Giant Blue Anteater: Jul 12 2021, 03:33 PM

I cannot find improper capitalization. Perhaps it existed in an earlier version of the submission, prior to June 11.

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QUOTE Exception?: Maybe, need to determine if it meets qualifications. What does this mean?

Qualifications for a low competition exception so it can grow 4x

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QUOTE Capitalized correctly?: No Are Sagan 4 common names not proper nouns? Is the convention of capitalizing every term in the itemized descriptors (like "Live Birth, Two Genders") ending?

It’s the faunal names that are not proper nouns. “ Thrashing Seaswimmer” should be “thrashing seaswimmer”

Any further thoughts about would this be a Low Competition exception?

I know I procrastinated but I will change this to reflect that it its descended from speartooth seaswimmers from the Oz Temperate Coast tomorrow so the type limit can be satisfied.

This post has been edited by Giant Blue Anteater: Jul 26 2021, 08:18 PM

I am now in the process of reworking its diet based on its new range, as well as a diet in the event it could only grow twice its ancestral size.

New habitats and two possible diets depending on size:

Habitat: Oz Temperate Coast, Maineiac Temperate Coast, Soma Temperate Coast, North Jujubee Temperate Ocean Sunlight Zone

Diet (2x): Larvaback, Krillpedes, Miniswarmers, Diamond Pumpgill, Floating Pumpgill, Metamorph Spinderorm

Diet (4x): Larvaback, Plump Gillfin, Diamond Pumpgill, Finback, Floating Pumpgill, Sardchovy, Gulperpump, Scuttleball Gillfin, Metamorph Spinderorm