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The art seems incomplete. Even if the art style is such the outer edges are supposed to be white, it looks more like an incompletely colored-in coloring book page. If coloring the whole thing is too much, cropping it to just the Cliff Bristler itself or its immediate surroundings would be easier.

Though they might get cropped out, it's nice to see those Signpost Crystamboos in the background. They seem pretty popular as a foodstuff or mention in other description.

"newer branches" should have a comma after it.
"fall of" is a typo.
"up in the mountains. But rain is infrequent" Should be merged using a comma.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 12 2021, 09:00 PM)

The art seems incomplete. Even if the art style is such the outer edges are supposed to be white, it looks more like an incompletely colored-in coloring book page. If coloring the whole thing is too much, cropping it to just the Cliff Bristler itself or its immediate surroundings would be easier. Though they might get cropped out, it's nice to see those Signpost Crystamboos in the background. They seem pretty popular as a foodstuff or mention in other description. "newer branches" should have a comma after it. "fall of" is a typo. "up in the mountains. But rain is infrequent" Should be merged using a comma.

Thanks for the tips. I'm leaving the white one as the main image, so as not to leave any confusion about which plant is the Bristler, but a full color image is also attached.