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" known to hunt on Chum Tropical Coast and Elerd Temperate Coast" should be "Hunting Only: Chum Tropical Coast, Elerd Temperate Coast". If it only does so occasionally or rarely, use: "Hunting Only: Chum Tropical Coast, Elerd Temperate Coast (Uncommon)", and swap out "uncommon" with "rare" if necessary.

"One Males" should be "on males".
"which used for" should be "which is used for".
Can a specific feature by described as "evolved"?
Can Wading Hearts "expect" eggs? Why not use "when a mated female in the pair is gravid, the pair will locate"?
"to construct an egg cradle from" The "from" should be removed.
I like the watercolor-like art.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 21 2021, 06:50 PM)

" known to hunt on Chum Tropical Coast and Elerd Temperate Coast" should be "Hunting Only: Chum Tropical Coast, Elerd Temperate Coast". If it only does so occasionally or rarely, use: "Hunting Only: Chum Tropical Coast, Elerd Temperate Coast (Uncommon)", and swap out "uncommon" with "rare" if necessary. "One Males" should be "on males". "which used for" should be "which is used for". Can a specific feature by described as "evolved"? Can Wading Hearts "expect" eggs? Why not use "when a mated female in the pair is gravid, the pair will locate"? "to construct an egg cradle from" The "from" should be removed. I like the watercolor-like art.

Thanks for the help! And the compliment, it is in fact water-based markers which are effectively watercolors, it allows me to mix colors together.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Longer Legs, Shorter Feathers, Splayed Hooves
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: Wading Hunting

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: N

Habitat:
Type?: 2/2
Flavor?: 3/3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Within range?: N/A
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Transition Rule?: Y (Omnivore -> Carnivore)
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: N
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: N/A

Status: Approved