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Remarkable: these may be the first to eat the new Minifee genus group.
Laying eggs directly into the sea would require adaptations for tolerating salinity. I'm not sure if it's possible to directly transition from its previous reproduction habits to laying directly into the sea, since it's a big change in salinity.
"in the bonegroves" should be "on the bonegroves", unless there are hollows within the bonegroves.
"progressively large": Did you mean "progressively larger"?
The sentences are breathless. Most of the sentences need to be split with commas.
"their outer grasping" is a possessive error: you should use "its" or "their" and the plural of "finger".

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 30 2021, 12:58 AM)

Remarkable: these may be the first to eat the new Minifee genus group.

Huh, cool.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 30 2021, 12:58 AM)

Laying eggs directly into the sea would require adaptations for tolerating salinity. I'm not sure if it's possible to directly transition from its previous reproduction habits to laying directly into the sea, since it's a big change in salinity.

While it is a significant change in salinity this lineage has made such jumps before, from fresh to salt and back again. Would a line like "Their eggs and larva are significantly more salt tolerant than their ancestor's, more like those of their distant ancestor the tileback." be ok?

I've made the other corrections.

A quick question, but do the aquatic thornbacks possess scales, or are they something that grows in as they mature and take to the land?

QUOTE (Nergali @ Jul 1 2021, 05:40 PM)

A quick question, but do the aquatic thornbacks possess scales, or are they something that grows in as they mature and take to the land?

I think most of them would have scales. I hadn't intended it to be different form the Tileback.

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While it is a significant change in salinity this lineage has made such jumps before, from fresh to salt and back again. Would a line like "Their eggs and larva are significantly more salt tolerant than their ancestor's, more like those of their distant ancestor the tileback." be ok?

Kopout,that could work, although mentioning specific adaptations, such as kidney adaptations to deal with water concentrations and solutes, would be better. You could say it also has gill-based adaptation to control salt levels, or skip that entirely and say it has air-breathing young. It would seem the water-bound young of various Teguloterguformes have gills, judging by Crallsnapers and various thornbacks.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Larger outer digits, Thicker skin on fingers
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: Semi-arboreal,

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: N

Habitat:
Type?: 1/2
Flavor?: 2/3
Connected?:
Wildcard?:

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y (1 m -> 50 cm)
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Transition Rule?: Y (Insectivore -> Omnivore)
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: From Cryobowls to Seawater

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: N
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: N/A

Status: Approved