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Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?:
What changes?:

• External?: Coloration, lip length, Ear shrink
• Internal?: Mandable wider, Thigh muscles
• Behavioral/Mental?:

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: N

Habitat:
Type?: 2/2
Flavor?: 2/3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y (1 m -> 2 m)
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Y
Other?: N/A

Status: Approved

Uh, MNIDJM I don't think species that have gotten zero comments at all should be approved, even if it technically follows all rules. That's how Devorator and Coral Cish happened in Beta.

Indeed, I was going to comment on this one today.

"This cycle continues until one of them gives up and leaves, with the loser often wandering on their own or joining bachelor herds." Since it's males specifically, using "his" is appropriate.

"running secretmaw has to live up to their name" Its name.

There's some purpose-oriented language here.

I like the coloration and pose.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 2 2021, 01:44 AM)

"This cycle continues until one of them gives up and leaves, with the loser often wandering on their own or joining bachelor herds." Since it's males specifically, using "his" is appropriate. "running secretmaw has to live up to their name" Its name. There's some purpose-oriented language here. I like the coloration and pose.

Alright, tried to make some edits with making it less purpose oriented. Also fixed the grammar.

Thanks! Had to get a lot of help from dorite to make sure it was right. Should help anyone wanting to evolve a descendant from the lipped sauceback or running secretmaw by providing a visual reference!

I disagree with mni's approval checklist so I'm doing one
Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Different coloration, more robust mandibles, narrower hooves, more developed young, cursorial limbs
• Internal?: N/A
• Behavioral/Mental?: Herding behavior

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: N

Habitat:
Type?: 2/2 (Temperate and Montane)
Flavor?: 2/3 (Scrubland and Grassland)
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N (Bigger)
Within range?: Y
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Not listed (should be Endoskeleton (Chitin)) Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y (Same diet, different items)
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Not stated (assumed split?) Y
Other?: N/A

Status: Approved (Unless anyone has objections)

QUOTE (Disgustedorite @ Jun 30 2021, 04:36 PM)

I disagree with mni's approval checklist so I'm doing one Approval Checklist: Art: Art Present?: Y Art clear?: Y Gen number?: Y All limbs shown?: Y Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y Realistic additions?: Y Name: Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y Creator?: Y Ancestor: Listed?: Y What changes?: External?: Different coloration, more robust mandibles, narrower hooves, more developed young, cursorial limbs Internal?: N/A Behavioral/Mental?: Herding behavior Are Changes Realistic?: Y New Genus Needed?: N Habitat: Type?: 2/2 (Temperate and Montane) Flavor?: 2/3 (Scrubland and Grassland) Connected?: Y Wildcard?: N/A Size: Same as Ancestor?: N (Bigger) Within range?: Y Exception?: N/A Support: Same as Ancestor?: Not listed (should be Endoskeleton (Chitin)) Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Diet: Same as Ancestor?: Y (Same diet, different items) Transition Rule?: N/A Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Respiration: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Thermoregulation: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Reproduction: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Description: Length?: Good Capitalized correctly?: Y Replace/Split from ancestor?: Not stated (assumed split?) Other?: N/A Status:  Pending (See highlighted issues)

Alright, I added the support bit and stated that they split from their ancestors. Is it good now?

Yeah, looks good now.