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Nice work on this fella!

What did you end up using for reference for the teeth?

QUOTE (TheBigDeepCheatsy @ May 19 2021, 02:45 AM)

Nice work on this fella! What did you end up using for reference for the teeth?

I ended up using the Nutria, although its not that noticeable since their ancestors seemed to have relatively similar teeth.

"grabnubs patterns" "Grabnubs' patterns" or "grabnub's patterns".

"known as the gnawsferatu" doesn't have a full enter-key paragraph spacing afterward.

"purpose now" I recommend "function".
"their hand" Their hands, or "its hands"?
"rear most" should be "rear-most" or perhaps "tail-leg".
"due to the face" What does that mean?
"Their tail leg" uses a singular they, which isn't appropriate here.

The easy spread between temperate and tropical rainforests shows just how much subtropical environments are needed.

I like the color gradation and skin folds.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ May 20 2021, 01:33 AM)

"grabnubs patterns" "Grabnubs' patterns" or "grabnub's patterns". "known as the gnawsferatu" doesn't have a full enter-key paragraph spacing afterward. "purpose now" I recommend "function". "their hand" Their hands, or "its hands"? "rear most" should be "rear-most" or perhaps "tail-leg". "due to the face" What does that mean? "Their tail leg" uses a singular they, which isn't appropriate here. The easy spread between temperate and tropical rainforests shows just how much subtropical environments are needed. I like the color gradation and skin folds.

Alright, made the edits you suggested!

Can't really say much about the subtropical environments myself, since im not much of an expert on this kind of stuff.

Why thank you! I'm proud of the colors myself!

I'm really loving the skin patterns on this one, as well as the changing in color patterns through its flesh.

One thing, but you forgot to put a space between the first and second paragraph.

QUOTE (Nergali @ May 20 2021, 09:32 PM)

I'm really loving the skin patterns on this one, as well as the changing in color patterns through its flesh. One thing, but you forgot to put a space between the first and second paragraph.

Made the edit, thanks dude,

Changed the genus name into Alethotripus. Does this look good?

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ May 19 2021, 12:32 AM)

* Carnossamer is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest * Hydrabowl is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest * Mainland Fuzzpalm is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest * Tusovinda is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest * Twin-Tail Orbibom is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest

Probably a Typo but all of those specie are already present in Javen Temperate Rainforest. Did you mean to spread them to Javen Tropical Rainforest? I'm not sure the Tusovinda can spread there though, it is polar and temperate adapted with no tropical biomes in its original list.

QUOTE (kopout @ Jun 28 2021, 12:05 AM)

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ May 19 2021, 12:32 AM) * Carnossamer is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest * Hydrabowl is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest * Mainland Fuzzpalm is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest * Tusovinda is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest * Twin-Tail Orbibom is spread into the Javen Temperate Rainforest Probably a Typo but all of those specie are already present in Javen Temperate Rainforest. Did you mean to spread them to Javen Tropical Rainforest? I'm not sure the Tusovinda can spread there though, it is polar and temperate adapted with no tropical biomes in its original list.

Alright, made the edits. Thank you for letting me know!

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Tail foot posture, different coloration, larger claws
• Internal?: Improved ear, continuously growing teeth
• Behavioral/Mental?: Kicking defense, vocalization, herding, mating competition, new nesting behavior

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: Y (already done)
Other: Corrects misinterpretation present in its direct ancestor

Habitat:
Type?: 2/2 (Temperate and Tropical)
Flavor?: 1/3 (Rainforest)
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Within range?: Y
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y (expanded)

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: Ancestor needs to be updated

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Probably
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: Ancestor needs to be updated

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Y (Replace)
Other?: N/A

Status: Approved

Made the suggested edits

approved