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The woody filaments seem pretty coarse...are they similar to tree porcupine or North American porcupine spines in texture?

For someting with enhanced wood in its beak, extra-hard foods don't rank high on its list. Am I correct in assuming that they prefer more tender foods, even if they can handle tougher foods?

"comes into play" is oddly informal.

"very little things" Very few, unless its predators are tiny.

The beak proportions of the supplementary art don't match that of the primary art. It's a small enough difference you could say it's due to genetic variations, or that the males have sligtly bigger beaks on their lower jaws.

There are other things I'd like to point out, but it's late in my time zone. I'll come back tomorrow.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ May 12 2021, 12:47 AM)

The woody filaments seem pretty coarse...are they similar to tree porcupine or North American porcupine spines in texture? For someting with enhanced wood in its beak, extra-hard foods don't rank high on its list. Am I correct in assuming that they prefer more tender foods, even if they can handle tougher foods? "comes into play" is oddly informal. "very little things" Very few, unless its predators are tiny. The beak proportions of the supplementary art don't match that of the primary art. It's a small enough difference you could say it's due to genetic variations, or that the males have sligtly bigger beaks on their lower jaws. There are other things I'd like to point out, but it's late in my time zone. I'll come back tomorrow.

If you want, I can include a supplementary image that shows the structure of the fuzz up close.

I believe it would prefer tender foods, but the enhanced wood in their beak allows them to feel on tougher flora when their preferred food is scarce or absent.

Alright, what should I say instead of “come into play”?

Fixed the grammar.

I have to draw each of these on paper, so I guess it makes sense that it’s not 100% that same. But I still tried to make it as close as I could. Perhaps this is just genetic variation.

How none of this got addressed by anyone else when I shared the document on discord for comments is beyond me. Thanks for the feedback though!

I'm actually not sure how to re-phrase "comes into play" in a way that's not even worse, so I recommend cutting it out entirely.

A close-up of the fuzz could be useful for future descendants.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ May 27 2021, 12:45 AM)

I'm actually not sure how to re-phrase "comes into play" in a way that's not even worse, so I recommend cutting it out entirely. A close-up of the fuzz could be useful for future descendants.

Alright, cut it out of the profile.

I'll do some touchups to the drawing I already got and then I'll send it here. Would you like me to inform you when its uploaded?

I have an auto-checker for this sub-forum, so I'll be automatically alerted if the topic at the top changes.

OviraptorFan Do you have more to do, or am I good to review?

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Jun 10 2021, 03:42 PM)

OviraptorFan Do you have more to do, or am I good to review?

I’ve gotten no response from Coolsteph, so I think that means it is ready!

Wait...shouldn't it have the Support field?

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 11 2021, 10:40 AM)

Wait...shouldn't it have the Support field?

Ah yes, this guy was submitted before the support thing was approved. I'll add that in.

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ Jun 11 2021, 03:41 PM)

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Jun 11 2021, 10:40 AM) Wait...shouldn't it have the Support field? Ah yes, this guy was submitted before the support thing was approved. I'll add that in.

Made the edit!

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Fuzzy integument, more horns on face, shorter/more compact hind feet, different coloration
• Internal?: Stiffer lignin, more frequent reproduction
• Behavioral/Mental?: "watch each other's backs"? (unclear if ancestor did this or if it was actually intended as a change)

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: Y (already done)

Habitat:
Type?: 1/2 (Montane)
Flavor?: 2/3 (Grassland, Woodland)
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N (smaller)
Within range?: Y
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Probably?
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: N (More food items added, pioneeroots removed)
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Probably?
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Y (Split)
Other?: N/A

Status: Approved, unless OviraptorFan wants to make more changes or anyone else has objections.