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I like the color and design.
Can you increase the contrast for the supplementary drawing?
I recommend specifying the singular ends in an S and it doesn't change with number, like "deer" and "sheep" because otherwise the descriptions seems to have plural errors.

"and buck-tooth" Buck-toothed.
"prevent them getting" "Prevent them from getting" sounds more natural, somehow.
"source food" You probably meant "source of food".
"requires to tierracolmillos" Requires the tierracolmillos.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ May 26 2021, 08:55 PM)

I like the color and design. Can you increase the contrast for the supplementary drawing? I recommend specifying the singular ends in an S and it doesn't change with number, like "deer" and "sheep" because otherwise the descriptions seems to have plural errors. "and buck-tooth" Buck-toothed. "prevent them getting" "Prevent them from getting" sounds more natural, somehow. "source food" You probably meant "source of food". "requires to tierracolmillos" Requires the tierracolmillos.

Thanks!

I don't think the supplementary drawing needs to be changed, its anatomy is clearly shown and gets the point across.

Made the grammatical edits and addressed its name though!

OviraptorFan Do you have more to do, or am I good to review?

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Jun 10 2021, 03:41 PM)

OviraptorFan Do you have more to do, or am I good to review?

Nope, I think the species is ready to be reviewed by you!

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Coloration, mandible shape, tail thickness, sprawled posture, smaller ears, closable nostrils and spiracles
• Internal?: Constant mandible growth, breath-holding and low oxygen tolerance
• Behavioral/Mental?: Burrowing, no longer forms packs, pair bonding

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: Y (Already Done)
Note: Sprawling legs evolving this fast are in line with established sauceback anatomy

Habitat:
Type?: 2/2 (Temperate and Tropical)
Flavor?: 1/3 (Rainforest)
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N (Larger)
Within range?: Y
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: Ancestor needs to be updated

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y (Expanded, subterranean food)

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Reworded
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Y (Partial Replace)
Other?: N/A

Status: Approved