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I see there's yet more justification to release my Dundigger and Sitting Dundi descendants in the works.

"The bill is still made of wood, however, since the boschian paardavogel’s reproductive methods have not changed at all with a female still holding her young in a pouch." Even if the jaw must be highly flexible, I don't know why that constrains the material of the bill itself.

"can breath," Can breathe.

"taxon jaws" Unless you mean the jaws of the Taxxon aliens from the book series Animorphs, I think you meant: "taxon's jaws".

" the Boschian Paardavogel can’" There's inconsistent capitalization here.

"the boschian paardavogel relies on their forelimbs" That's using the singular "they", which doesn't make sense here.

" to deal lethal wounds." That's purpose-oriented, which is not recommended.

"giving them their" This is also a pronoun error.

" larger more" Do you mean "larger" or "larger and more numerous"?

It makes sense to put both "occasionally" prey items in the last part. It's customary to sort prey roughly in order by organism preference or frequency in the diet.

Is "Dualtrunk youngsters" meant to be "Dualtrunk juveniles"?

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Oct 1 2021, 01:36 AM)

I see there's yet more justification to release my Dundigger and Sitting Dundi descendants in the works. "The bill is still made of wood, however, since the boschian paardavogel’s reproductive methods have not changed at all with a female still holding her young in a pouch." Even if the jaw must be highly flexible, I don't know why that constrains the material of the bill itself. "can breath," Can breathe. "taxon jaws" Unless you mean the jaws of the Taxxon aliens from the book series Animorphs, I think you meant: "taxon's jaws". " the Boschian Paardavogel can’" There's inconsistent capitalization here. "the boschian paardavogel relies on their forelimbs" That's using the singular "they", which doesn't make sense here. " to deal lethal wounds." That's purpose-oriented, which is not recommended. "giving them their" This is also a pronoun error. " larger more" Do you mean "larger" or "larger and more numerous"? It makes sense to put both "occasionally" prey items in the last part. It's customary to sort prey roughly in order by organism preference or frequency in the diet. Is "Dualtrunk youngsters" meant to be "Dualtrunk juveniles"?

Alright, I fixed the errors, though I still think the bill would not be calcified because that would make it less flexible and I imagine the bill stretches with the jaws.

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?:
What changes?:

• External?: Front Limbs, Coloration
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: Cathemeral

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: Y

Habitat:
Type?: 2/2
Flavor?: 2/3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: N (80 cm -> 2m)
Exception?: N

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Transition Rule?: Y (Omnivore -> Carnivore)
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: N/A

Status: Pending(Too big)

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Nov 6 2021, 01:15 PM)

Approval Checklist: Art: Art Present?: Y Art clear?: Y Gen number?: Y All limbs shown?: Y Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y Realistic additions?: Y Name: Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y Creator?: Y Ancestor: Listed?: What changes?: External?: Front Limbs, Coloration Internal?: Behavioral/Mental?: Cathemeral Are Changes Realistic?: Y New Genus Needed?: Y Habitat: Type?: 2/2 Flavor?: 2/3 Connected?: Y Wildcard?: N Size: Same as Ancestor?: N Within range?: N (80 cm -> 2m) Exception?: N Support: Same as Ancestor?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?:  N/A Other?: N/A Diet: Same as Ancestor?: N Transition Rule?: Y (Omnivore -> Carnivore) Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y Respiration: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Thermoregulation: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Reproduction: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Description: Length?: Good Capitalized correctly?: Y Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split Other?: N/A Status:  Pending(Too big)

the Length is actually about right. I took a look at the Plehexapod and it is around a meter long.



You can see in this image it is longer than it is tall. I use length, not height, for most of my organsims. If you want me to include height as well I can do that.

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ Nov 6 2021, 06:08 PM)

If you want me to include height as well I can do that.

If you don't mind.

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Nov 6 2021, 02:46 PM)

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ Nov 6 2021, 06:08 PM) If you want me to include height as well I can do that. If you don't mind.

There, made the edit